Reviews for Dreamscapes
Guest chapter 43 . 6/29
Wow! What a great story! You have a real talent for writing. Thank you so much for all your hard work!
Guest chapter 17 . 5/15
His whole life? Jake and Bella where only around each other for 6 months post corpse, before the drama queens came back from italy. Jake hadnt seen Bella for a decade before she came back to forks to live with Charlie. She was only with the corpse for a few months before he left which also makes her reaction to Dedward dumping her all the more pathetically amusing.
Guest chapter 13 . 5/15
As much "passion" as Bella may think she sees in Edward, she could never have the same experiences with him as with Jake. Edward is essentially a reanimated dead body, a corpse, only colder and harder. All of his looks, smells etc? They are predatory adaptations, not things to attract women. Not the makings of a god but the tools of a mass murderer and while Bella turning may make her Edwards physical equal, She will never be anything more than an object. Bella keeps projecting human motives on Edward for his actions. But Edward is no more human than a bear. His attraction to her stems from her bloods call to him and the fact that since he cant read her thoughts, he cant hear her normal teen desires and wants, he can make himself believe Bella is a proper "lady" He is very much is a product of his time which was the early 20th century. The end of the victorian age. Edward being an object of sexual desire freaks him out and he makes it a moral issue. I am pretty sure that had another female human or vampire come around who's thoughts were silent to him before he met Bella, that would have caught his attention. They are both attracted to what the other has made themselves believe about each other and not the actual reality of the other. Jake loves her for who she is, not who he thinks she is. All of those things will never happen with Edward.
Guest chapter 7 . 5/14
An interesting riff on twilight. However this is yet another version of Bella that no one can really care about.
And in spite of Meyer trying to skirt around the matter and somehow make readers think it was the best night of her life, what little was described of her wedding night came off as brutal. I bring up the point to say what Bella is willing to go through for her payoff. I cant grasp how anyone could find any stimulation in attempting intimacy with a dead body that is cold and unyeilding. But this is Bella so...
Guest chapter 1 . 5/14
All that bad destiny all that pain. Thats Bella. whats funny is that Bella is too..clueless to undertand that what Dedweird has isnot her heart. The sparkly poser has used classic control and manipulation techniques to make Bella dependent on him. He makes all the decisions. Where she can go, who she can see, what she can do. He is manipulating her emotionally and sexually. Bella marries him TO GET LAID of all things. All of her notions about love come from books that do NOT show love. Obsession, infatuation? Yep. Bellas selfishness will not let her take risk Dedward is the only one she thinks will never leave her (even though he did!) Jake could im,print or fall out of love or die. Bella will not take that chance. Not even for the deepest love there is. THAT is what she cant live without. Dedweird is merely the doorway to what she wants. Just wish we had a fic where Jake was more like his canon self, not willing to put up with bells sickness. There where lines he was not willing to cross, not even for her.
Shogun0 chapter 21 . 12/21/2014
Oklaaaaay this is ...uh...interesting. more twilight as hardcore porn. Thats was more graphic than penthouse forum. Here is my take. Bella is not really choosing Jake out of love - not really. Not because Jake has been good or kind or open and honest with her at all times. Not because Jake gave her his heart knowing that she may not (in fact probably would not) return his feelings -at least not openly. Not because he stood by her when she was hateful and cruel and downright ugly too him. Not because she can be herself around him and he makes her feel beautiful and wanted even though Jake is every bit as stunningly beautiful as Dedward and even more so since he is alive and Bella would never have to feel she needs to change to be equal to it or worthy of it.. Jakes beauty is not the adaptation of a predator of humans. and it is not solely on the outside like dedward. She isnt choosing him because he is just so right for her when EVERYTHING about Dedward is wrong and wrong for her.
Nope. Bella isnt choosing him for any of those reasons. She is choosing him because she had sex dreams and she's horny after spending all that time with the corpse who treats her more like a his pet doggy than a flesh and blood female. and while dedward may make her heart stutter a bit Jake makes her motor run. She needs to get laid and she figures Jake is the better man for THAT particular job. Her dreams told her he is going to be the monster fuck of her young life. They aren't back in each others presence 10 minutes when they are going at it like rabbits. Now while that's actually kind of humorous and it certainly makes for some...enlightening reading, the story loses most of whatever charm, romance, drama and warmth that it might have had and that most people read twific for. You might want to take into account that very few (as in almost nobody) couples are quite this uninhibited with each other until they get to know each others likes and dislikes. Not every girl likes to get fucked like the dude is drilling for oil while shouting all kinds of obscenities in her face at the top of his lungs. Not the first time anyway. But the real issue I have with this is: There is simply no tenderness or warmth or caring from a young man and woman who have managed to find there way to each other against tremendous odds and after overcoming enormous obstacles. This is simply 2 people getting off as graphically as possible.
Guest chapter 15 . 12/20/2014
Your version of Jake is as bad as Bella although totally opposite. Bella is scared witless by lifes "what if". What if I get old, what if I need protecting, what if Jake leaves, what if he imprints..what if...what if...what if.. Jakes what if's are more positive but no less absurd when looked at in the light of day. What if I could convince bella to..stay, not get changed, what if she gave in to her feelings for me, have a shred of positivity about life (Bellas thoughts about being uninteresting to men seem self serving at best considering the attention she got on first arriving in forks. It seemed more like men were not interesting to HER as opposed to the opposite)what if Bella gave a crap about somebody..ANYBODY really other than herself and her own feelings..what if..what if.. what if...Nobody builds a life out of or based on what ifs. You take the what ifs as they come and you live the best you can anyway and you live for today. Setting goals? Sure. good thing. Trying to plan for avoiding any and all negative things that may possibly befall you? Seems that even being a walking corpse is no shield or guarantee against bad things happening to you when you consider that most of the vamps would not choose to be what they are if given the choice that Bella has. Being a corpse has simply brought its very own set of "what ifs". For Bella getting changed will simply bring another set of much harder to face what if's.
Guest chapter 14 . 12/19/2014
Seems to me like Jake has the perfect set up. Bella in his dreams. He doesnt have to put up with her diseased soul. Jakes dream is better than porn the way you put it. Bella sucks cock like she gets paid for it, fucks like a porn starlet and there is no bullshit to put up with. Why would jake want the real thing when its a dead solid bet it will not even come close. AND he will have to put with bella making him miserable. It sure will not be hot and cold running blowjobs. Not only that but he can fing himself a woman that is human like Mina. Best of both worlds.
Guest chapter 12 . 12/19/2014
Whatever the psuedo-porn is getting boring. Maybe you could have Bella die a horrible death? Get screwed to death by dedweirds icicle pee-pee? After all its what she wants.
Guest chapter 11 . 12/19/2014
She could watch from afar and DELUDE herself into THINKING she did the right thing. Bella will always be able to be selfish and sick AND make herself believe that doing only what she wants, making sure she gets what she wants no matter who gets hurt is the "right thing". Bella is incapable of doing the right thing for anybody but herself of will always be a small ...whatever ...vampire, person. so she would always need protection since Dedward is the one who keeps getting her in all the danger (another point that Bella, fucking idiot that she is, misses). But what you described is correct. Bella is a fucking coward, deathly afraid of life on its own terms. Esme the perfect mother? No. She was a woman who wanted marriage and motherhood and a simple life it was taken. Carlisle who is just selfish and twisted as most of the sparkles wanted an insta -family. Existing forever is something that Esme would never have chosen on her own. According to Bellas logic any woman approached by a man more physically attractive then her should just automatically lay down strip, open her legs and let the man fuck her. after all..who is she to turn him down right?
Guest chapter 10 . 12/19/2014
Bella wouldnt know the truth if it walked up and hit her in the head with a bat! Bella Never NEVER wanted Dedward for WHO he was. She knew nothing about who he was as a person but the few heavily sanitized facts he wanted her to know. Such as - Yes he killed humans but because they were bad, bad people. Certainly not because he wanted human blood. So he went to movies with heavy violence or sexual themes for that time. when someone had a dark or naughty though (since Dedward is so pure)he figured he would murder that one to "save" someone. Bottom line the only significant thing Bella knew about the sparkler was 1. he was a half assed vampire 2. he was 17 for a while 3. he was pretty 4. he played decent piano and lastly he talked funny and treated her like a pet poodle. That aint much information for a walking corpose that she intended to marry AND die for so she could spend forever with his abusive ass.
Guest chapter 9 . 12/18/2014
I think you should probably be writing porn and stay away from twilight fic. Too much emphasis on the lemons and not enough on this moronic its always a good thing when Jacob gets his and for whatever reason he wants it from mousy Bella when he could get from a woman with a heart and a soul instead of an empty shell, most first timers dont fuck and suck and pillow talk like porn stars that have been at it for years. You summed it up fairly well earlier so im not sure why you went in this direction. Even dreams stay withing the envelope of he dreamers experience. Most people having sex with each other for the first time are not quite this...uninhibited untill they get to know each others likes and tolerances.
Guest chapter 7 . 12/17/2014
The main problem with this fic besides its abysmal pacing and trite silly dialog is that I just know you are going to screw Jake over by saddling him with this useless excuse of a lowlife.. For Bella and to get Jake after all this is sooo NOT a good thing. It is not a happily ever after. The only thing to be happy about would be if she got hit by a bus twice.
Guest chapter 6 . 12/17/2014
That wasnt sad at all it was just creepy. Bellas view on the corpse is really Strange. I mean could she be any more pathetic?. While I feel for Jake. Bella needs to go and die. Dedward a god? Thats a fucking joke. A mass murderer with a shred of humanity. Please kill this disgusting escuse for a human off.
What a coward.
Guest chapter 5 . 12/17/2014
LOL that was great. Bella giving Jake head. Well the kid deserves something for all of the crap he puts up with. Dedward? Who gives a shit about him. or Bella for that matter.
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