|Reviews for Picture Booth|
| NY13 chapter 25 . 3/30/2015
I liked the premise very much. So cute with the fortune teller and Atlantic city and two jaded souls looking for something simpler. I had problems with their dialogue and inner voices - they sound like they're in high school. I also felt beyond the premise and one STI scare there wasn't much plot. You need something to drive the plot, maybe a big conflict or problem they have to solve - like maybe the local economy being so bad, someone has to relocate or they can't find each other right away and they start to date someone else - maybe the trust doesn't come so easily or someone paid the fortune teller. Some more descriptors wouldn't hurt - what does the salt air feel like and smell like down on the boardwalk.
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/20/2015
this was perfect except for you really could have left out the I could feel my cock getting hard... I'm sure you wanted to show us his instant attraction but it didn't really fit with the rest of the chapter.
| Jenn Jean Cullen chapter 25 . 1/1/2015
| Twilightfanatic85 chapter 25 . 12/14/2014
| KatHat chapter 1 . 12/6/2014
Hey, I saw this on TwifanfictionRecs and came to check it out. I have been reading and rec'ing close to 1000 ff stories since '09 and have never quite seen this kind of formatting...where every sentence is double-spaced as if it is a new paragraph. It's really distracting and chops up the flow of information of several sentences that are on the same topic and should be one paragraph. I know dialog is spaced apart like that, but internal thoughts...no. I checked several chapters ahead and it all looked the same.
You know how in regular books, there are paragraphs?
So, sorry, I can't enjoy reading like this. Best of luck.
| TwiFanfictionRecs chapter 1 . 12/1/2014
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| KimiD chapter 24 . 11/23/2014
So much fun playing hookie!
| KimiD chapter 23 . 11/23/2014
Happy Birthday Edward! lol
| Rita01tx chapter 25 . 11/17/2014
I'm such a sucker for HEA's and our sweethearts certainly are gettin' one! Thanks for sharin'!
| Rita01tx chapter 24 . 11/17/2014
Yay! Can't hardly wait...they're gonna have a wonderful life *squee!*
| Rita01tx chapter 23 . 11/17/2014
A weddin' on the pier sounds great but Madam Rita should be invited LOL!
| Rita01tx chapter 22 . 11/17/2014
So glad they're OK and back on track with their lives together!
| Rita01tx chapter 21 . 11/17/2014
I'm sure they're fine, too, but it was a shitty thing for Ben to pull at her place of work!
| Rita01tx chapter 20 . 11/17/2014
Well, that sounds ominous! STD perhaps *Yech!*
| Rita01tx chapter 19 . 11/17/2014
That Kate just doesn't know when to quit, does she? Now let's find out what the hell Benjamin wants with Bella!