Reviews for Until I Met You
K.T Shakepeare chapter 4 . 12/22/2013
Thank you so much for adding Feliks! He's my favourite character and he doesn't get enough love :(

xXxXLupicideXxXx chapter 27 . 6/24/2013
Russia Land of Fire and Snow chapter 27 . 5/23/2013
No. The last page break didn't happen. You cant just mwake stories within stories this is not fanfic-ception. That is not allowed stop it!
And now I feel compelled to complement your story because the negative beginning there may make it seem like I didn't enjoy the story. But that would be a pack of lies. It was wonderful and great and I have to go find your other ones because Im making this long without actually saying much (sounds like every essay ive ever written).
Russia Land of Fire and Snow chapter 2 . 5/23/2013
This mental hospital is a pretty popular place...
TheCrimsonMage chapter 27 . 4/24/2013
Dude,like totally amazing story! Umm,ahem...uhh,so much poland in 3? Hours means heckticness for me...
Seriously,I read this in like only 3,4 hours and its only that much because I stopped for 1 hour and 30 mins to play black that i m rereading this reveiw I find that I make myself sound noting like a girl
Christoph Andretti chapter 27 . 4/7/2013
Hello. I just finished reading this story, and objectively, i will tell you what i think about it. I'll kinda jump around from place to place, so please bear with me.

The first few chapters start out promising enough. I could understand the depression and issues that causes Gil to go over the edge. Okay, that's fair enough. It seems like it goes a little faster than it should, but I've seen way worse pacing. Ultimately, the biggest problem with this story is that it cuts from scenes to others WAY to often. Once or twice is fine, but every scene intertwines with another, and it becomes very annoying. Most of theme don't even have a real connection towards each other; they are almost completely unrelated.

Not to mention, the characters motivations and emotions are very weird, almost messed up at the time. Not in a good way, either. Take Eliza for example. She sees that Gil wants to be with Matthew, so she decides to try to keep him in the mental ward. Did you even say that part out loud? She's trying to keep him from his brother and from the outside world so he can fall in love with him? There are other ways to show support outside. It could be a motivation for Matthew to get out. It could be used to build up Gil's life outside and how he tries to support Matthew. And the strange thing is that is exactly what happens at the end of the story anyway! If it happened at this point, then it would make more sense when Matthew left and things would be different.

Lets talk about the emotions of these characters too, because they are not very well explained. We almost never go into the characters back stories and we never get real explanations for their emotions. They're all just generically sad. On top of that, none of the emotions are ever dealt with. Matthew's relationship with Alfred is a perfect example of wasted opportunity. It's brought up once in a while how Alfred cares little for Matthew, which doesn't add up since clearly Alfred is the only one making sure Matt is sane enough to leave with a mischievous Gil. It's brought up in a sentence or two, but we never get an explanation for those feelings. We never connect with why the characters feel the way they do and we never try to solve their problems. Alfred probably still doesn't care that much. There are many other examples of this in the story. None of the emotions are ever dealt with, they are just replaced with romances. I believe love is a powerful thing, but it shouldn't be used just to hide away your emotions. If anything, it should be used to disclose you emotions with somebody you love and trust, and that never happens.

Speaking of emotions, really? I understand cutting is a very dominant issue for teenagers and such. But, wow, is this wrong. Felik's back story is a perfect illustration for pretty much what's wrong with the whole story. He got bulied, he cut, then he gets better. yeah, i got that. But then his teacher notices the cuts on his arms, and they just throw him in a mental ward. Listen, you would have to have exhausted every option to get thrown into a mental ward. I mean, you would have to be on your last legs of hope to be soundly put into a mental ward. You don't just throw somebody in a mental ward because they cut some. Nay, you don't throw somebody that's getting better into a mental ward. Okay, the teacher saw his cuts. Ask him what's wrong! Ask him if he's getting better. Refer him to the counselor. Follow up! You don't throw people in mental wards like you throw a broken baseball bat in the garbage for almost no reason. Nobody ever asks how these people are feeling and nobody ever asks why they feel that way.

Then, there's the ending. I know a lot of people's reactions were positive towards the ending, but for me, I thought it was one of the most insulting things you could do for your story. It kills it. Completely shatters any sort of credibility or entertainment you were going for. You basically did the literary version of throwing the story in the trash can. You have basically told me to not read the story because it never happened. There's no point in reading the story. You just threw it all away. All of that suffering and pain we had to deal with the whole way through means noting. Your story means nothing, now. That's pretty much what you did at the ending.

There are some other problems with the story, too. This review is getting a little long, though. I apologize for strongly wording a lot of this review, but i feel these situations call for a little more strong wording to make the point. You could PM me for more info on the issues and how to get better, and you vent out on me and tell me why I'm wrong. I would really like to here your reasoning. Incidentally, I'm also writing a story centered around a not-all-there person, so you can critique that as well. Any contact would be great for me. Don't take any of this personally. This is all to make us better writers. Please PM if you want to ask or curse or critique me. This story is at least memorable in that sense.
MEGABYOTCHERS chapter 27 . 4/1/2013
OMFG! The ending totally made me lugh my arse off! Good job OnneChan and Prussia'sMaster! You hav a new story? lemme red it rigt away ;;;;;00000)
ATTHESTROKEOFMIDNIGHT chapter 27 . 3/31/2013
I'm laughing so hard rn. I was expecting to write a long serious review, for this long serious story, but after that ending, omf I'm laughing so hard!(doitsu? Why not (mein Bruder)
MOFO chapter 27 . 3/23/2013
jasdevi's secret sissy chapter 27 . 3/22/2013
umm...c-can you please write a iceland/hongkong,and it be a multichappie?i-I only find 1 shots,and well,i reaaly like that pairing,so..can you...?

but you don't hafta if ya don't wanna!

*quickly hides behind buildboard*
Guest chapter 27 . 3/22/2013
Purpleflower15 chapter 27 . 3/18/2013
OMG! That was probably the greatest ending ever! the best ending I've ever read! IT WAS AWESOME :D
Sorry, I'm tired... But it was still awesome! (Almost as awesome as Prussia. LOL)
Warrior of Sangre chapter 27 . 3/17/2013
I did not expect that!
ThatOneGingerKid chapter 27 . 3/17/2013
O.o *twitches*
maplepancakes99 chapter 27 . 3/17/2013
LMAO al wasn't expecting that, bit it was hilarious. I could imagine Gil sharing his dream with all the nations involved in the dream. XD
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