Reviews for Avatar of Victory
Quintain Apprentince of Alduin chapter 85 . 4/15/2021
Fantastic story and I'm happy it's finally been finished!

I do have some issues with some of the aspects of this story, but in the end they're entirely irrelevant and down to personal preference.
scorpio723 chapter 85 . 4/14/2021
It's been one heckuva of ride, and I enjoyed every bit of it. And I'm also glad to see that you still plan to keep writing. Can't wait to see what you do next.
deadman88 chapter 85 . 4/14/2021
I just want to thank you for finishing this, its one of my favorite mass effect crossover stories period. Its just a great time.
Arekanderu chapter 84 . 4/14/2021
I can't believe it's over. This story was beyond amazing. A true epic eclipsing pretty much any book I have read. Your talent is superb. I love you resolved the great conflict. Millions of Avatars fighting together? Every species being given a chance to rise up and fight? Aimei fighting a battle of the gods and just becoming stronger and stronger with each death?A galaxy free from the opression of Harbinger? And the Harbinger himself being cut down and down again until he becomes nothing more then one of the nameless victims of the Hate Engine? Beautiful

This whole story is beautiful and truly an adventure. I am so glad I reread the entire thing so I can truly get this amazing experience

And I know it's greedy but could you give us an epilogue as well? Even if it's not an epic length like your usual chapter. I just really want to see our heroes enjoy the post harbinger galaxy
Arcane Howitzer chapter 84 . 4/13/2021
So that's that, then.

First of all, thanks for coming back. I find SO many stories that just stop updating before they're finished. For some of them, their final post was just weeks before I first read it! Dozens upon dozens of stories, some of them just as amazing as your own (and trust me, that is a high bar to reach), doomed to languish by the side of the path they once trod, with no hope of closure. (and that's not even counting the ones where the author actually flat-out says they're done)
So it's always worth a cheer when a story I barely remember gets back up and takes a few more steps along their road, even if they just fall flat on their face again. And you certainly gave me a lot to cheer for.

Second of all, this finale is worth a celebration all on its own. It masterfully captures the courage, the horror, the sheer desperate stubborn hope that the last battle with the Reapers deserves, AND comes with the satisfaction of punching Harbinger in his dumb fucking face like everyone wanted to at the end of the games. You didn't just tie up all of the loose ends (except for the eternal question of 'Now what?', obviously), you brought them all together, showed so clearly that all of it, everyone and everything, has all been leading here. An entire armory of Chekov's Guns brought to bear, and everyone had a trigger to pull. Even Weaver, The Illusive Man himself, got off one last 'Fuck you!' to the monsters that nearly tore his dream out from under him.
Bravo, good sir. It was well worth the wait.

And finally:
You get an Avatar! And you get an Avatar! Everyone gets an Avatar!
SpikerWolf5896 chapter 84 . 4/13/2021

God! that line cracked me up!

The first thing that came to my mind when I read that was a scene near the end of Hot Fuzz when the guy gets a spike impaled through his chin, and his is. "Ow! That really hurts! I want ice cream!"
Guest chapter 83 . 4/4/2021
No one ever conceptualized fighter carrier ships before humans did, stunning everyone. Why

Why is it that the technologically advanced asari and salarians, the militaristic turians, even the ocean dwelling hanar or the quarians with their fleet based culture never ever come up with the idea of an aircraft carrier? Even the robotic geth don't conceptualize carriers once they gain their freedom from the quarians. A closer examination of each alien species reveals why.

The asari call their soldiers huntresses, with a few being designated as commandos. The huntresses were most likely derived from hunting parties that foraged for food before the Protheans taught them agriculture, and then once they stopped foraging, the huntresses were used as local militia to guard their food stores. They most likely saw very little actual conflict with other huntresses, since cooperation and diplomacy became the norm. They evolved into spec ops types, as an overtly diplomatic culture will need problem individuals like bellicose matriarchs or ardat yakshi quietly dispatched behind the scenes, rather than amassing armies and fighting conventional wars. Therefore, the asari most likely never even conceptualized a navy before they became spacefarers. When they built a navy, it was most likely just a basic space navy intended to protect their ships, and therefore lacking tactical depth. Having never fought a naval conflict, they never realized a need for carriers. Even after forming the Citadel council, they never had to fight a large scale naval conflict themselves. Their contact with the salarians, volus and elcor were peaceful, the krogan fought the rachni war for them, and the turians fought the krogan rebellions for them, and later on the humans did the lions share of Reaper fighting. They were therefore never in a position where they had to think of using carriers as an out of the box method to win a naval war.

The salarians have much the same issues as the asari. They too relied so much on spec ops, spies and scientists to influence the outcome of conflicts, with a large number of their wars "ending before it even started", that they too never had a history of naval conflict on which to base the need for a carrier. They too, like the asari had the krogan, then the turians and finally humans to do the conventional war fighting for them.

Although the quarians built a humongous fleet to sustain them while they wandered the stars, they actually had no need for carriers, because carriers are actually a long range power projector. Carriers that are kept close to shore, or close to the bulk of the fleet in the quarians' case are useless, as those fighters may as well be stationed at airfields, or any ships' shuttle bay in the quarians' case. Carriers are meant to operate far away from the home port or home fleet and strike targets with the full complement of an airfield, targets that would have otherwise not been reachable from that airfield. In the quarians' case, they aren't inclined to strike distant targets using a lone carrier, they instead stay out of such situations to preserve their numbers, or just take their entire fleet and strike. The geth are similar as in, they just want to protect their holdings in the veil and do not want to carry out the kind of long range offensive ops that carriers are best suited for.

The hanar are ocean dwellers and we know not if they had a history of intra-species warfare. But since the ocean is a natural habitat, their "naval" conflict would have been similar to a 3-D infantry engagement or an air war, since they can swim in all dimensions in the ocean. So, they never needed carriers, not when they themselves could get where they needed to go without neccesarily using vehicles.

The volus and elcor most likely never had enough warfare in their history to discover the need for carriers. Volus owing to their Proud Merchant Race culture, traded and bartered rather than contest resources, so they never had a naval conflict, while the uber-conservative Elcor who are so deliberate to even avoid falling, most likely never got into many conflicts either. Even if they did, that conservatism would prevent such radical ideas as a fighter carrier from being given any consideration.

The Turians if no one else, should have developed carriers. After all, they are a proud soldier race where a martial outlook permeates into everything. So, a long range power projector like a fighter carrier should have been conceptualized by someone right? Especially, as a dextro species, they are more likely to have garrisons on a few planets, and would need a navy to defend and resupply them. The reason they didn't, could be biological. Garrus reveals in the third game, that turians are horrible swimmers, and so avoid large water bodies. This is most likely from the metallic carapace they evolved to mitigate the high levels of star radiation on Palaven. So, their oceans might have been too much of an environmental hazard for them to operate navies. They would have instead, just built aircraft to traverse those oceans, and built land based airfields everywhere. Instead of projecting power over their oceans with a navy, they most likely kept their power projection limited over contiguous land. This also explains why the turians didn't embark on large scale colonization after winning the Krogan war - they want to keep their colonies close by in order to be better defensible. That is why Sparatus can't fathom why humans colonize planets so far away - he doesn't get the power projection capability of a navy.

Synthesis, you have AI first a child then equal then sage, but how long until the inefficient organics less than bacteria, you don't give nukes to cavemen, MAYBE Shepard' use popularity to only upgrade when there is a problem to solve

game is set up such that a Wide-Eyed Idealist who believes that there is a Golden Ending in which you save everyone is going to be in for a rude shock. A Pragmatic Hero on the other hand recognizes that some sacrifices have to be made and can actually win in the end

he/she is the The Hero/ The Chosen One of the story. His/her entire life was framed a stereotypical action Hero's Journey in a si-fi space opera. You were born to be special; had an impressive service record in the marines; Was chosen to become the first human Spectre; Saving or dooming entire planets and civilizations; Cheated death itself; Finding love and friendship despite the merciless fires of war; Uniting the galaxy to fight as one in the war to end all wars; And finally, you march off into the final battle with the hopes and dreams of those around you, fighting for the future of every mother, every son, and every unborn child…
Well, and then Reality Ensues and his/her story crumbles around you like a ton of bricks. Primarily because the will of a single men/women, no matter how strong or determined, can stop a super advance race of genocidal starships. The only option you have left at this point is to either summit to the will of an insane cosmic AI tyrant, betraying everything you fought for; Or stay true to your moral principles, refusing to let fear compromise who you are... at the cost of dooming everyone to die and the Vicious Cycle to continue.
You are just dust struggling against cosmic winds, after all

Could the races have prepared better for the invasion during the time Shepard bought them? Yes, they absolutely could have. How? The asari had a ''goddamned'' beacon in their ''goddamned'' temple with a goddamned VI program that knew everything there was to know about the goddamned Crucible. And notwithstanding Shepard, there may have been one asari who has the Cypher and is able to activate the Beacon. But the asari wasted this opportunity. There were Crucible plans in Mars - as well as data about the goddamned Thessia beacon. But we squandered it, as TIM so eloquently put it. Heck, there were even data files on Kahje pointing to Mars and possibly Thessia (we never know if Thessia was the deleted location, but it is possible that asari operatives found and deleted it to cover up their beacon), but nobody bothered to look. Had they found the Crucible plans a month after Sovereign's defeat, they could have built that thing unimpeded, then refined the design further to eliminate the Reapers while minimizing damage to the relays. But the Council and the Alliance demonstrated Head-in-the-Sand Management at its finest, even going so far as to shut up Councillor Anderson who was warning everyone about the Reapers.
Shepard *was* the Hero, and in the end, no matter the Commander's own fate, the galaxy stopped the Cycle

The saga is a brutal confrontation of an idealistic world from a space opera, to which we are introduced in ME 1, and a merciless one explored, from the end of ME 1 to the end of ME 3. While you begin as a shining badass drifting through space on an epic quest, the discovery of the Reapers changes the tone dramatically. They are unstoppable, unknowable, invincible. Even if you get a small victory at tremendous cost by the end of ME 1, you know that it is but next to nothing compared to the true might of the Reapers. And as explored above, you do not even know how to fight them, merely how to slow them down. By Mass Effect 3, the realisation of the futility of all the efforts so far come crashing down on the whole Galaxy, and you first. Every world falls, everyone you know dies despite your best efforts and you struggle to keep the Galaxy together while waiting for a miracle.
But what do we find in all that despair, all that pointless fighting, all those quests that goes nowhere and resolves nothing? Simple happiness.
It is always by the end, just before the most dangerous mission of all, that your loved one stops what s/he is doing and come share a moment with you, because they know they might not get the chance anymore. The loyalty quests in ME 2 have little impact in the long run, because whether they die or not during the suicide mission, Liara will still find the plans for the Crucible. But you help them find peace and meaning in their lives, and they'll be happy for it for the rest of their lives, long or short. Even the couple you help bring together, the Asari and the Krogan, ends tragically. But listen to his last words, their beauty shows how wonderful those last months have been for him. His death is inevitable, the quality of his life isn't and it may improve thanks to you.
A message that may be gathered throughout the saga is "Whatever your situation, no matter how great the danger, especially if it is great, you can, must and deserve to find your own happiness"
The most vibrant moment of this may be the Citadel DLC where, while on the brink of extinction, people take the time to sit back, and smile.

Despite Shepard being the Alliance's newest Spectre candidate, they weren't the first, so they are not really the Chosen One by any reasonable measure—much less the chosen one to deal with Saren's treason and an invasion of the Milky Way by technological horrors from beyond. In other words, in the first game, Shepard is firmly The Unchosen One—just a normal soldier who goes out of their way to save the world.
And that is where the story of The Unchosen One was supposed to end: the first thing we see in the sequel is Shepard being killed by the new enemy way beyond a normal soldier's ability to withstand. But Shepard's story does not end. Recognizing their new symbolic value, the shadowy genius of Cerberus transforms Shepard both metaphorically and physically. On the metaphoric level, they undergo a metamorphosis from The Unchosen One to The Chosen One. On the physical level, the entire "normal soldier" part goes by the wayside: the new, chosen Shepard is a cyborg, combining the best qualities of human character with the galaxy's most bleeding edge tech.
But as the third and final game shows, despite their transformation, Shepard still remains a fundamentally human being. When exposed to the immense burden of wearing a Messianic Archetype's shoes, their psyche starts creaking at the seams and puts them on an ultimately self-destructive path.

On a larger scale the trilogy is the story of the unchosen species pushed way past its limits. Humans were uplifted by no one not the Protheans who studied them, not the asari who could have lived long enough to undertake a conventional journey to Sol without the use of Mass Relays and not the Salarians who uplift species all the time. When they discovered mass effect tech and started to expand, their first contact with an alien race was in the form of near unrestricted warfare. After that, they were treated like the little kid trying to sit at the big boys table. Then barely ten years after that war a different species with slavery in their culture becomes openly hostile and starts fighting a proxy war. After a costly bloody victory, they are now fighting Omnicidal robots and are the only ones who must save the Citadel from those robots. Then insecticide cyborgs start kidnapping them on masse and are told by the powers that this is an internal matter to clean up themselves. The final icing is that a race of Eldritch Abominations consider them to be their prime target for assimilation, and thereby launch their entire force at humans first before attacking anybody else. Most species would have given up in despair and become isolationist Luddites after all the trauma humanity has been through in the time since they thawed the Charon relay. And to top it all off, they now have to take on the lion's share of responsibility for defeating the Reapers - because the more militaristic races are bogged down in hopeless conventional wars, the more technologically superior have chosen to turtle up and even the chosen species decided to abnegate that responsibility. The Turians need humans' help to evacuate their Primarch despite the fact that they know how to build stealth ships like the Normandy. The Krogan need humans' help to distribute the genophage cure, even the Quarians ask for human assistance in their war with the geth, instead of the asari whose hat is diplomacy. Finally even the asari asks for humans' help in getting the Reapers off Thessia. How much responsibility can one species shoulder like that?

Cerberus says when the going gets to tough the aliens will abandon humanity which is EXACTLY what happens
The-White-Spiral chapter 2 . 4/5/2021
Great Whales.

Wait, why does that sound familiar annnnd OH MY FALSE GODS IT'S YOU and you've done a mass effect crossover!
I'm so happy I could cry
Arekanderu chapter 83 . 4/5/2021
You have ruined me. Seriously I used to love this story so much back in the day and I was crushed when you stopped updating. So when you came back I was ecstatic. I practically inhaled chapter 82 but I couldn't stop myself so I started a reread of your entire story. Not how I intended to spent my vacation. I was planning on chilling out and catching up on the new shows that came out, fix some stuff at home and just chill but you had to make your comeback and make me obsess. I read your entire story again and it was brutal. My back and neck feel like hell, my eyes are beyond tired but I did it because once I started I couldn't stop. Almost 2 million words. I have read so much in such a short time. I am beyond exhausted but also beyond happy.

I could feel the end of this story coming and it's going to be like the end of an age

You are the most amazing writer I have seen. Thank you so much
MollyPollyRolly chapter 1 . 4/5/2021
When I first saw this I thought it was ridiculous, but well, it also seems ridiculous enough to be interesting it seems
Arekanderu chapter 1 . 3/27/2021
Oh i am really loving Jennifer ! Can’t wait to see our three avatars fight together!
But redid this chapter has reminded me of how much I have forgotten about this story . I thought it would come back to me but now I will have to reread the entire thing ! I am so excited about this old and new adventure
fictionfreak9 chapter 82 . 3/26/2021
The only proper response to this revival is to reread every other fic you've written on this site.
WellWhatDoYouKnow chapter 2 . 3/23/2021
I feel dumb but I can't figure out what four-letter word you're referring to.
WellWhatDoYouKnow chapter 1 . 3/23/2021
"Humanity appear to be the only group who can use bending, in all of its forms, without extreme difficulty."

This is super nitpicky but who's to say that there aren't other undiscovered forms of bending that humans can't use?

Anyway, this seems to be a pretty good start.
scorpio723 chapter 82 . 3/23/2021

That is all.
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