|Reviews for Original Sin|
| archy12 chapter 10 . 3/13
Hmm,a soft moment between Edward and Edward spilling a secret nobody why did the men think the necklace would be in some kind of store-room?Wouldn't it be in Edward's room?
| archy12 chapter 9 . 3/12
That was quite a bit of action! And at least Bella tried to defend herself-points to her!
| archy12 chapter 8 . 3/12
Well,she could not help being claustrophobic,but at least she could have got her hair cut off and donned a boy's clothes before leaving the would have given her some chance to ,I suppose she had to return to the ship in some manner!
| archy12 chapter 7 . 3/12
But surely the ship was miles and miles away from where Bella's parents lived?How far could the guards be looking for her?It's not as if the royal Navy was after her!
Of course,it would have been difficult for her anyway,being a single,young and inexperienced if anybody wasn't looking for her!
| archy12 chapter 6 . 3/12
I knew she should have cut her hair off!
Smexing?There might be some axing first,what with Edward's temper!
| archy12 chapter 5 . 3/12
Well,Edward agreed to give 'Ben' a 's progress!
| archy12 chapter 4 . 3/12
Yeah,Edward is a then,he is a pirate with a harsh growing-up,so what else can we expect?
| archy12 chapter 3 . 3/12
Yeah,it would have been very strange if Edward would have fallen for 'Ben'! Though I have read a story by TKegl where Edward is attracted to Bella and begins to think he may be gay. :)
| archy12 chapter 1 . 3/12
Hmm,an adventure with Edward as a pirate!This should be interesting. :)
| Jstacy101 chapter 24 . 3/11
I love this story! Ur an amazing writer! I would have loved to hear about the aftermath, Bella's patents reaction to Edward, their lives together, Black making a reappearance... But one of the best fsnfictions I've ever read by far!
| Allknowing Alice chapter 24 . 3/9
I really enjoyed your story. I would love to see how their future turned out with an epilogue. Thanks for taking the time to write this story and sharing it with us. Can't wait to read more of your stories.
| Pammie94 chapter 24 . 3/4
Wow! Just found your story and read it straight through. Wonderful job! I really enjoyed your storytelling and like your writing style. Would love to read an epilogue! Will be sure to mark your story for update alerts. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. Great job!
| maipigen chapter 24 . 3/4
loved it it was nothing like i had expextd but i loved!
| Sarah Amin chapter 3 . 3/3
I kinda get why she'd choose this life over her previous one .. Who would want to stay with overbearing parents who couldnt give a damn .. Cant wait , i think jasper knows though , he's not an idiot but would a pirate be called kind though ..
| maipigen chapter 6 . 3/3
kinda sad that the disguise is ruined already...not what i was expecting, interesting though