poor harry! *sweatdrop*

VERY interesting first chapter!

Love this story! 3

Fuck Hermione. She's a hypocritical bitch who only now desires Harry because he's moving on from her. Why the fuck should Harry settle for her? And this bullshit between kissing and snogging? Get real. LOL who the fuck kisses on a first date. Double standard cunt. She spazzes on Harry for kissing Luna on his date, but she's happy kissing Krum on her date.

So, when/how is McLaggen being punished for trying to MURDER Harry?

And before you start blathering about "it was an accident"...
McLaggen had no right to be farking around with that beater's bat.
If I grab a chainsaw from a lumberjack's hands, swing it about wildly, and "accidentally" decapitate a bystander, I can assure you the police will not just wave it aside as 'boys will be boys, it was an accident'.

And again, before you blather in and say a Beater's bat is not a chainsaw...
Beater's bat is a magically-empowered club that can propel a FIFTY KILOGRAM steel ball at speeds of more than 80 km/h. Actually, yes. Not much like a chainsaw. Beater's bat is MORE dangerous.

I love it! I find that Hermione erasing her parents' memory seems to be something cowardly. The only bone I have to pick with this is that she didn't have a way to make sure they were safe (a charm to let them know they were safe in Russia or something). Death Eaters could attack them on the way to the airport.

Lol, I love this Lavender Brown. Great job!

Brilliant story, really one of the better ones ive read. The pacing and the plot is great and i love the dialog and the many fantastic moments you created. The only thing i didnt like is how they said that they love each other. You wrote that this story is about Hermiones crush turning into real love but the moment they say that is short and not that good. I think you could have atleast put Hermiones reaction in there or more dialog after. But thats complaing on a high level so stull a great job and a deserved fav

Somebody almost died and McGonagall ispunishing Hermione who hit McLaggen. Dude, that's almost as bad as 5th year.

Sweet story. Beautifully paced and written.

This story is quite good, but it feels like everyone is taking turns with the idiot ball. Between the Map, the invisibility cloak and roping in someone like Tonks, it would be ridiculously easy to get to a date. Hell, even brewing Polyjuice to sneak out would be a valid option. Or going out during the Easter Holidays. Or going to the Hogwarts equivalent of the Holodeck, the Room of Requirement, and have a nice date there.

It really drags things down that you decided to forgo these obvious workarounds in favour of plot driving drama (or at least come up with an excuse why a workaround would not work).

Also, you are very badly dancing around the topic of teenage sex. The average age when people have sex in Britain was somewhere between 16 and 17 back then, which means plenty of people were younger. Hogwarts is a huge empty castle with a dozen adults and hundreds of students. This distorted depictions really makes the characters feel fake and not like actual people. I'm not even asking for any onscreen scenes, but at least acknowledge the fact that it happens instead of pretending that everyone is still a Virgin.

Interesting, but way too wordy and long. This should have been about five chapters, max.

The story was brilliant!
And the heartwarming
Loved it
I liked the girly take on in-love Hermione, coz as you said, we don't have enough canon to go on
Great!

Okay
So I generally don't comment in between the story
But the line about Voldemort not being able to withstand the new Mr. and Mrs. Potter just hit me really hard...loved it!