Reviews for Bad Day
Flipspring chapter 1 . 5/9/2012
This is great. I'm not sure what concrit I can give, but you sure pulled off the stream-of-consiousness exercise really well. The squashed-together words are really good at conveying that panicky feeling, and overall this gives a much closer look at just one of the many terrible things that the kids have gone through. So yes. Good.
randomnumbers1234567890 chapter 1 . 5/9/2012
D: Poor Jade. Wonderful job with the style-stream of consciousness was a good choice for it. 3 I love how you described her emotions; you can really get in her head and feel what's she's feeling.