Reviews for Down And Out At Motel Vacant
Tinajp chapter 1 . 5/4
ha ha ha it was great I was on the floor for the part about TMT
Keiou chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
Holy...this story was...I can't name it. There was so much... but awesome at any rate!

I was reading for a while before I found your story, my boyfriend sitting next to me. And I made him jump by my reactions the whole time xD At first the whole scene with Dean pulling that bullet out from Sams wound. You didn't bother to skip any detail. It made me wriggle and I felt just like poor Sam when he wasn't allowed to move.
Then I laughed my ass off about Sams thoughs when he was drugged and later the part with the gator-man-whatever creeped me out. I think I can never swim again in a pond without thinking about that scary head peeking out of the water. Ugh! Scary!

Your writing style is so great I felt tense the whole time and when the storyline switched from funny and dizzy to menacing and scary I couldn't move.
The story has so many different parts in it. Not only Sam with his drugged thoughs and moves was funny. I loved every dialogue between Sam and Dean. In my opinion they were totally in-chara :) and quick-witted as ever with their strange patter(?). Really fun!
And your style is playful as well. Mixing the style the brothers are talking like with the normal narrator-style. (I hope you know what I mean) Godd job!

I have something for abandoned places and I really do love your motel! Thanks for all the details! I felt a little bit sorry for Sam when Dean made him sleep at this gross bed-thing. I will always remember your spooky motel with that stumbling Sam. I didn't realize that the motel was REALLY abandoned until Dean showed up and told it to Sam. I'm sure you've mentioned it before and I think it was totally clear...so I don't know why I didn't got it xD Maybe I dindn't realize what "abandoned" really meant...
I was wondering along with Sam why there was no one and why Dean picked up such a creepy place. I also wondered why noone showed up when he was ringing the bell. And when I finally understand what was going on I was laughingso hard. That must have looked too ridiculous. Sam with his strange outfit standing there and taking the reception desk full serious like a regular customer.
His notes about the guinness book were hilarious. I was thinking how odd these numbers were that he was mentioning and then it became clear. That's so Sam-like! I loved that.

Sam's reactions to his environment in his condition were fascinating. I know that feel xD
He was really taking everything serious- not only the reception. Like that "world's biggest coffee cup" for example. And when that think began to shrink it was a real mysterium to him.
And the way he began to think the whole place was spooked was also hilarious!

Dean taking care of Sam was great as always. hurting Sam and helping Dean made everything perfect. There is nothing I didn't like about your story. You should write babbling, toddling Sam more often. This conversation between them when Dean was taking Sam back to their room- or that was the plan- was so much fun, too.
As well as Dean poking at that plastic duck. lol
Speaking of poking... one of the oddest scenes in my opinion was Sam poking around inspecting the rest of that gator-man's meal. I was eating at that moment and I quick finished it before reading on xD
I don't know...I've read stuff more unappetizing but this one...there was something about it...hm. On the one hand it was gross. But Sam in his spacial state poking around in it was kind of funny too. I have no words...

The fight with that creepy gator-man was gripping. I'm glad there was only one of them. When Sam came to the rescue I wasn't sure if going in there would be a good idea. But he has done a good job! Great!

I haven't yet checked out that "Jake the alligator man" thing. But this will be my next move.
Thank you very much for this amazing story. :)
And I hope I didn't confuse you with my mixed up grammar. I know this will be the case- It's always like this. But I can't put my finger on it. To me it is sounding right...ugh. The more I write the more my English is getting creepy '_'

Well...thank you again!
Greez :)
Girl-of-Geekery chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
Can I just say how much I loved reading every single word of this? :D

This story had me literally laughing out loud. With 'Sammy and his feelings of happiness' LOL
Gotta love drugged up Sammy, and Dean's reactions. :D :P

And Dean and the duck! ROTFL
This:
"Chill, Dean. Just a kid's toy," Sam said. "What are you going to do? Shoot it?"
"It's looking at me funny," Dean growled in return, "Freaking me out."
"What is with you and the duck, man?" Sam growled from behind.
"He had it coming."
"You feel safer now?"
"Little bit,"

Oh my gosh! I was laughing so hard :D

And then you still managed to add a very healthy dose of worried big brother Dean and awesome, kicking butt Sam. :D

Just wonderful! This will definitely be one I come back and read again and again
Sparkiebunny chapter 1 . 6/21/2012
First of all, I apologize for taking so shamefully long to read and review this!

Second of all, I loved it! As per your usual fic, it was wonderfully in-character and simply seeping with brotherliness (not a word, I know, who cares). A unique idea, and yes I DID Google Jake! very interesting few minutes spent reading about him! ;)

Third of all, AWESOME TITLE! Literally, since the day it popped up in my inbox, it has drifted in and out of my head, like one of those song titles that just sticks with you. This one totally did, very catchy!

Fourth of all, the bullet extraction was painful and brilliant. Wonderful description!

Fifth of all, drugged-up Sammy made me giggle. Wish they'd show us more of that on the show...

Fave parts:

"How you feel?" Dean stopped a second.

"Honestly. Like a contestant strapped to the Wheel of Fortune," Sam muttered, vertigo setting in stronger with each step. "About to be spun to death by Vanna White."

...LOL! So funny and Sammy and perfect!

The motel was obviously long abandoned. Even Mother Nature seemed not to exist here. Only large chunks of broken rubble strewn all around making the place look like a moonscape. Age-faded yellowish-green paint peeled off the cement block building like moldy sliced cheese, and just about every window of the single story motel was broken out or boarded up. Most the rooms didn't even have a door.

...What a visual you paint here. I love the decriptions that literally leave you know choice about seeing it. I can see it in my mind's eye, and am creeped out but in awe of the imagery!

"No drugs, Dean. I mean it," Dean mocked in a high-pitched tone, placing a clean, protective cloth over the wound. "Whatever you say, cowboy."

...I can hear Dean saying this. I can literally HEAR HIM IN MY HEAD. That's incredible.

"I told you once already, stupid, stupid hurts."

...LOL, yes. Just...yes. :)

Fantabulous writing, Karen! Sorry it took so long to read, but I certainly can say that it was well worth the wait! Excited for whatever else you have up your sleeve! :)
Lilith Luciferia chapter 1 . 6/7/2012
This was a fun short story. Your writing is very good, and you created a good balance of genres - adventure, horror, humour, and hurt/comfort. (I have to say that I found drugged Sam to be completely adorable.) I enjoyed this thoroughly; well done.
Muckel chapter 1 . 5/22/2012
just want to tell you that I LOVE this story! It's full of hurt/comfort, careing/bantering between the brothers and I really like it! Hope to read more of this kind of story.

Nicole
ziggy.uk chapter 1 . 5/15/2012
Really entertaining story Karen, though the abandoned motel sounds the grossest place on earth, not surprising then that alligator-man lived in the disgusting swimming pool - only the Winchesters could stumble upon a hunt there! Loved drugged up and injured Sam and caring but exasperated with his little brother not obeying orders Dean! Perfect that injured as he was Sam managed to kill the creature and save Dean! Hope they manage to get Sammy's wound cleaned out properly or he's in for an infection of epic proportions! And Sammy never found that bathroom!

As usual a really great read my friend, loved it :)
Jane88 chapter 1 . 5/15/2012
How could I've missed this wonderful update from you? Great read! Just their Winchester luck to crash right next to the lair of a monster-alligator. Looked up Jake – oh, that’s so creepy! Your drugged Sammy is so adorable. And Dean and the duck were just hilarious. Brilliant, made my day! Loved it!
pandora jazz chapter 1 . 5/14/2012
Karen,

What a wonderful story. I finally found time to say thanks for sharing it with us.

You did a wonderful job of having different elements in your story that all flowed well together. We got to see the injured Sam and worried Dean, plus drugged/loopy Sam, then action/fight to the death scene with a monster and ending back with injured brothers.

I love how worried Dean was about Sam and how he was trying to hold it together while working on his injured little brother. I had to laugh at the note Dean left Sam, but then I was also laughing at a drugged Sam's actions. I love how Sam went looking for Dean, even if big brother was a little upset about that. There were so many funny moments but for some reason picturing Sam at the motel counter hitting the rusty call bell just makes me smile thinking about it.

You must of had fun writing the loopy Sam. I loved Sam's response to Dean's question about being called Sammy. "Sammy doesn't hate Sammy."

I kept wondering if there was a threat at the motel but you still surprised me. What an idea, an alligator man in the pool. Sam was great, even injured, he had to back up his big brother and he could because he was at least wearing socks.

Cute shout out to rubber ducks. :)

You wrote a great action/fight scene. I love how the brothers worked together to kill the creature.

Wonderful ending, though I would have loved the brothers version of I love you at the end, but that is probably overused.

I enjoyed reading your story. It would have made a fun episode to watch. (No demons or angels involved.)

Thanks for sharing another story with us and for the smile.

Until next time, take care.
Menthol Pixie chapter 1 . 5/12/2012
"What? Old Macdonald lost the farm?"

- I laughed so hard at this line! So totally something Dean would say.

Of course, you know I love this; wounded Sam playing the hero, how could I not?

And Jake the Alligator Man... wow lol, I googled it and... what is that? I love that you based the monster on him. So cool. :)
cappy712 chapter 1 . 5/12/2012
Great story - even trying to get themselves better they find a hunt. ha. loved it.
skag trendy chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
Lovely Hurt/Comfort, with both brothers being heros. The brotherly banter was fun, and drugged up injured-Sammy was wonderfully amusing.

Always a pleasurable read. Cheers for this, hon.

Kind regards,

ST xxx
Visionairy chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
Wow! That was beyond amazing. I loved it! (And I have sooo many other things I'm supposed to be doing today.) The dialog between the boys was just perfect. And just when I thought I knew where the story was going, it changed up again. Great lines from drugged up Sam, too. lol. I'd write more, but, you know, I'm not even supposed to be reading this now. Just great! Can't wait for your next post!
Madebyme chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
What a thoroughly entertaining read! This was fast paced and you caught the perfect balance of h/c, action and humour.

I really enjoyed all the detail when it came to Dean removing the bullet, the hurt and comfort, Dean's shaking hands and his nervous never-ending sarcasm which showed just how freaked he was.

I love a good drugged up and high Sam scene and this one was wonderful. I loved how confused Sam's stream of consciousness was and how he talked in third person.

The icing on the cake was that he also got a thrilling hunt and the boys fighting for each others lives! Thanks so much for sharing, take care, Abbi
Jimelda chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
This was tons of fun! Drugged Sam is always a favourite of mine and you just write him so well. Not to mention the crap-ton of action you managed to throw in there as well! I was practically on the edge of my seat while reading this. So intense.

"Sweet," Sam giggled like a three-year-old toddler. "That gives Sammy feelings of happiness."

Oh man. You kill me sometimes, you know that? That line keeps making me burst out laughing.

Cheers,

Jimelda
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