|Reviews for Promises Kept|
| OH NO NOT AGAIN chapter 1 . 7/24/2014
I read your story... a while ago...
Dude, you're HILARIOUS!
This is a great story. I remember how hard I was laughing when I read this story. I can't remember what I was laughing at, but I DO remember the whole 'su finds restricted content' part. Also at how Keitaro and Naru kept screwing around all the time. Heehee.
| savageking chapter 11 . 4/26/2014
I just found the story, and really enjoyed it. I especially like the idea of Keitaro and Naru staying in touch for their whole lives. I wish there were more stories like this one.
| hannibal221 chapter 11 . 9/13/2013
i have a question. Why doesn't Keitaro just 'remove' naru as a tenant? she's his fiance he could easily argue as his fiance he asked her to move in with him as his partner and help manage the inn? Even if the girls did take it to court afterwards, what are they gonna do? tell him hes not allowed to let his fiance live in his family's property for free? then they'd have to outlaw all non-married roommates! Or why not just have naru get infuriated at the girls presumption and drag Keitaro down to the courthouse and elope? then shes his wife and i'd like to see them argue that sex between married couples is wrong. lol Also you could have naru secretly install a security camera in his room and next time they barg in and attack him hes got blackmail or evidence to assault charges and for mokoto assault with a deadly weapon. As for su and the cop he could either have su deported or threaten deportation for 'production And detonation of illegal explosives within city limits' and for the cop he could simply have her badge or threaten to for 'dereliction of duty' for her not doing anything about the above mentioned crimes. hell have naru do it cause Keitaro doesn't have the balls. Hell Keitaro doesn't even have to know she did it only know she did something to get them off his back.
| AnimeMaster24 chapter 11 . 8/22/2013
Looks like everything finally came to a head... And exploded this chapter! Quite hilarious this chapter, and I look forward to seeing what happens next.
| AnimeMaster24 chapter 10 . 8/20/2013
I assume that crack about never kissing might've been a reference to how little it happens in the actual Love Hina series? All too true, although your version of the story had an abundance of that, which is a welcome change to the original in some ways. Nice seeing everyone participating in the classic stalker routine this chapter, but leave it to a police officer to point out just how pointless it was from the beginning. Looks like there was some friendship development this chapter, which is definitely a good thing for the story as a whole. I like how you blend your original characters with the canon characters so nicely, and are still able to make changes to the main story without diminishing the spirit of the original work. Still enjoying the romance moments between Keitaro and Naru!
| AnimeMaster24 chapter 6 . 8/19/2013
The harem idea in your story is fun, but it seems like Naru's been more than enough so far. Still feeling bad for Keitaro's two buddies who just can't catch a break. I also liked how you summed up the basic formula for love triangles in several manga, and it's funny because it's true.
| AnimeMaster24 chapter 5 . 8/19/2013
Nice touching scenes with Naru and Keitaro, and I liked how you decided to include his two friends as moe than simply background characters this chapter. That little history where the group has been acquainted for years was a nice touch too, adding to the big revelation about what happened to Naru's family. I don't think any of the change you made the canon storyline really harm the series... In most cases it had made the story more interesting. I like it a lot so far. Chapters are little short, but mixed with the decent quality of the writing, it makes it worth the read. Looking forward to seeing what else change in this story, and how things turn out!
| AnimeMaster24 chapter 4 . 8/19/2013
Seems pretty true to the original in how Shinobu turned up, but then again some things remain the same.
| AnimeMaster24 chapter 3 . 8/19/2013
Nice to see Naru is trying to get closer to Keitaro, although it would appear you've followed the spirit of the series and added a running gag to this. In the original series it was a series of crappy misunderstandings that kept Naru angry at Keitaro combined with her own inability to cope with her feelings. In your story, they just have really crappy luck, what with stinging insects interrupting them, and the contract rules having the other girls at their throats. A really fun read.
| AnimeMaster24 chapter 2 . 8/19/2013
Hopefully Kanako appears at some point in person. Her antics are funny to watch; like watching her play mission impossible by running around in disguise, and trying to duplicate Naru's facial expressions while failing miserably due to her inability to smile properly.
| AnimeMaster24 chapter 1 . 8/19/2013
Nice to see Naru being supportive in this story, definitely a nice change from her constantly punching Keitaro every scene for now reason. If they had remained in contact, I imagine she would've grown quite fond of him early on. Overall a good beginning to the story.
| tomaO2 chapter 11 . 8/6/2013
Congrats on breaking 100k words. Some thoughts
-I liked the Su finding porn segment. Thought that was some funny writing.
-The Naru dream sequence, I felt, should have had a scene break with a "dream" listing. Works as is, but I think a visible scene break would have been useful.
-I liked the bit where he realized he was seeing a compromising situation rather then being the victim of a misunderstanding and acts accordingly.
-Laughed at the realization that Su was awake.
-"Nah, the Manager had nothing to do with this, it's just me and Naru." Su stated. Another good bit. Really enjoying your Su interactions on this chapter.
- Hmm, the "psycho middle scholar" doesn't sound quite right to me. More like mad scientist or hyperactive trouble child. Psycho is for people deliberately trying to kill and besides we already got some other girls using that moniker.
-I think they are being a bit harsh on poor Su. Can't they find someone that would willingly sleep with her?
-I liked how Kei tried to deflect what Naru was doing with Su with the other girls but, since the issue does seem important and it's only until Mokoto comes back I do wish there would be a compromise.
-Yay, Shinobu to the rescue. Does Su actually act perverted in the manga though? I thought she acts mainly childish. To my recollection. Personally, I didn't care for the false cries of rape she did.
-Woa, she was being surprisingly insulting about Kei when talking about him to Shinobu. I thought she actually liked him and then she tosses the rape card when he confronts her. Hmm.
-Okay, now I see that the point of this was to get an escalation of a takeover attempt by the way of Su. Well, I kind of like that idea. Su and her toys can be kinda fun but the buildup around the end did seem a bit much. I dunno, I know it's all a game to Su.
You know, I rather liked the solution for Su's penchant for blowing stuff up in another Love Hina crossover, called "Promises of a Wandering Hero". . He had Su set up her toys so she did the stuff outside of the Inn and even let her do periodic attacks on him, as long as the Dorm was fine. That's probably been done in other fanfics as well but I don't recall off the top of my head. Anyway, have you read that story? At first I thought it was really bashing but the character development in later chapters has been quite good. I especially liked how much Mokoto developed in the Rusty Heart arc. Favorite Mokoto growth arc ever. Although your flash back version is also quite good.
Overall, a decent chapter.
| MaDeR Levap chapter 11 . 6/24/2013
Well, that... escalated quickly.
| Wittmann the Tiger Ace chapter 11 . 6/22/2013
Wow! And I though that I wrote long chapters.
This is very good and in some parts, excellent. The best thing is that you keep the reader focused in on the story that you are telling and manage your cast very well.
I await your next chapter.
| Samhan chapter 11 . 6/22/2013
Welcome back my friend
I liked how Keitaro tricked Su, it was funny, also I loved the realistic Naru, she is not BITCH.
Looking forward for the next chapter.