I'm surprised that an otherwise good author manage to lose the cohesion of a story to this extent. Too many plots, too much introduced in too short a time. The story line is unravelling beyond rescue.

Down the rabbit hole, indeed.

The story seems to stumble here. Suddenly, Fae. Silly shopping trip. Harry goes from Alpha wolf to submissive child to angry and decisive. The story is all over the place. Writing quality seems to suffer as well.

The loss of direction seems to be confirmed by being abandoned.

Too bad. The story started out so well.

You could have named this Harry be were-y

please will you add more to this story and finish it off. I quite liked it. and i'm interested to see how it'll pan out.

I have read every chapter of this marvelous story, it is in my opinion one of the best fan fictions I have ever read, not only of Harry Potter but of any franchise I have ever heard of. The compellingness of the story, the funny moments that defuse the tension, the way you have followed Harry's life throughout the challenges and changes, how he now has legitimate chance at happiness and how complete you have made all their characters that make them seem alive and vivid shows me that you have the true mastery of the pen as a writer. I hope this story so grand and amazing doesn't die out without reaching its end so please, continue this grand adventure for I wait with baited breath to see where this leads. Thank you, from the deepest part of my heart for your hardwork and your masterful dedication.

great chapter. but what movie was referenced in this chapter. you know the one Al recognized.

"Oh shit, did I say that?" LMAO

I hope you come back to this story one day. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Wow, this has been so fun to read. It looks like you may not finish and that would be a shame because I have no idea who Racheal is. Also, you're good at this and it's almost like a new story with all the changes now. Poor Harry, predestined and now he's got to rely on Luna which is always terrifying if fun. If real life let's you come back to this story I will enjoy finishing it. Thank you.

This is a great original fanfiction story. Now that im finally all caught up with the chapters, Id love to read more if youre inspired to keep writing!

I do hope this story will be continuing. It is realy good.

I love the fact we don't have Umbridge at school in this story which mean no inquisitorial squad none of those restrictions.

This was a great chapter. The addition of the werewolf thing was great. The part of Umbridges anamagious being a toad was extremely funny and like I said in another post everyone knows that she may were pink but her true color is Green and Silver that of all those Slytherins.

Great ending to book 4. The early appearance of the pink toad was a great addition.

That third task was great. That last bit was a perfect way to get Harry to the graveyard.