Reviews for The Quiet One
LovelySocks chapter 1 . 12/7/2012
Oooh. And the mystery thickens.
This is a very powerful, poetic type of feel. I know how Molly feels sometimes. I love the way you included all the arguments- it took me into her world and made me understand where she was coming from. Nice, intriguing ending and a wonderful last line. Well done.
Alohaemora chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
Oooh, this was fantastic. I really like the idea of a quiet Molly being trap in her undeniably loud, argumentative family. You did a very nice job showing her exasperation, especially in the first scene, where she had resorted to throwing balls of dirt at the tree (very nice use of the prompt, there). Well done! Thank you for the submission! :)
SophiaOfSlytherin chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
It's a shame that we don't get to see the nextgen Weasleys grow up in the books. I liked your perception of what it'd be like, plus the fighting among the Weasleys was believable and interesting. Way cool job!

However, there was a couple things that could use improvement. The tense shift threw me for a loop, for example. It was past-tense at the beginning but then shifted to present. Also a lot of the paragraphs were short, but that seems to have been for dramatic effect. Just note that they should be about four sentences minimum.

On that note, I'd like to recommend you to the creative writing website Rocky Mountain International (www. rmimagic .com). It's a text-based Harry Potter roleplay site where we play as though Harry, Voldemort, and even Molly II never existed. I think you'd be an awesome addition to the community. :)
LittleMissCloverFromDistrict2 chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
Good luck! I like it, I can imagine the Weasleys arguing a lot
zechirator chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
I like this idea for Molly, run with it! Write another chapter, or another story, where, well... it's the watch-out part of her personality coming to light, because she's had enough. :) I'd read it!