|Reviews for The Weakest Link|
| Nordics4Life chapter 23 . 4h ago
Okay, so all the wait...so worth it. I literally want to find 'Fletcher' and just destroy him piece by piece º–º HOW COULD HIS MIND BE SO MESSED UP!? I honestly don't think he had to pretend he was insane to escape, because that's honestly true. And the way you're describing his thoughts, he thinks Latvia likes him back?! NO. JUST. NO. My brain hurts from anger at him, stupid Ozols, he's twisted I tell you, you really developed his character well. Hopefully your homework lightens up and you can update soon!
| The secret trio chapter 23 . 7h ago
poor Nikolajs, he sounds like someone Latvia would be best friends with
| TotallyRandomAuthor chapter 23 . 7h ago
I really liked this chapter; it was very interesting, and it didn't have too much torture in it. When I first read this, I thought that Fletcher started off to be good in the beginning, but as I read on, I came to realize that he already had such a sick, twisted mind. I also feel very bad for Estonia. (I would also like to add that I think he's rather good looking, and if don't see how he's 'ugly.')
Also, as a side note, will there be a time where one of the nations snap and go into full rage mode? That would be INTENSE. That probably wouldn't happen, though. Will Latvia at least be able to fight back? I like the thought of a badass!Latvia. I'm not exactly talking about a snapped!badass!Latvia, but just a badass Latvia in general. (Kind of like how Finland is a BAMF, but he looks like a sweet, caring, and harmless guy.)
Anyways, I look forward to the next chapter! (Man, I haven't made a review this long in about a month!) Sorry if I kind of came off as rude.
| Ao Chou Yan chapter 23 . 8h ago
I cannot stress how much I loved this chapter. I have a thing for chapters that go into the minds of villains, and damn you pulled it off!
I hate to say it, but I actually like Fletcher. NO! That's not what I mean, I hate his guts! I just mean he's a wonderfully crafted villain, it's like an 'I love to hate you!' kind of thing XD You know how to write villains! And some of the things he says literally give me chills. Poor Latvia, and Estonia too. But now I'm really curious if Fletcher was born 'off' or if the war caused his insanity. Speaking of which, this is a fictional war that takes place in the future, right?
And Nikolajs! How did you make me fall in love with a character in less then a few seconds? When Fletcher restrained him I was so upset! I also loved his optimism, he seemed so nice! And I like the idea of occasional civilians being allowed to learn about the personifications. It's a secret that definitely would be kept under heavy wraps; but people that said personification really REALLY trusts could be told XD
Great job on another wonderful chapter!
| SeraSearaSpin chapter 23 . 10h ago
Well, now we understand why Fletcher's so messed up...eck. *blinks*
I eagerly await the next update :D
| Dalasport chapter 23 . 10h ago
This is one of your best yet. You've made such a interesting character in Fletcher and seeing his backstory really clears up a lot of things.
And you made me love Nikolajs in the few sentences he spoke. Seriously, how is that possible xD I just love this story
| Obiwanlivesforever chapter 23 . 11h ago
Hooray, another chapter! I got so excited when I saw this in my inbox! I was hoping to see how things were faring with the captives, but given that they're taking a while to recover, this was the perfect opportunity to put in a bit of reflection on Fletcher's backstory. Pacing-wise, I think it was a good move to put this chapter here, since it still advances the plot but does so in a way that provides the reader a bit of a breather after the intense last chapters.
Hopefully the intention was not to make the readers feel sorry for Fletcher, because this just made me hate him more. Yes, he has the 'excuse' of being hardened and traumatized by warfare, and disliking it when people 'waste' their lives (honestly, it makes me upset too, when people throw away their lives in wars that don't mean anything) but he is still such an awful person that I don't feel this redeems him one bit. Lots of villains have sympathetic backstories that cause readers to root for them, or question whether they're truly evil in the first place, but I don't think anything can excuse or justify Fletcher. I hate him just as much as I did last chapter, which is a lot. XD
Case in point - his thoughts about wanting to break Estonia completely, near the start of the story, were cruel and horrific, far too much to be handwaved by "he was in a war." The thing that chilled my blood the most was "maybe we won't even have to use restraints to experiment on him" - as if he's expecting Estonia to just go willingly, no longer caring what happens to him... *shudders*
I was curious as to which war Fletcher was in at the beginning, but Nikolajs' story of the destruction of Riga made it clear that this is some fictional conflict, in the future. I can emphasize with him a bit, with his frustration over the many pointless deaths, but at the same time, he's still going about it the wrong way - only viewing the deaths as 'pointless' because the dead people can no longer materially or financially benefit others. Even back then, his mentality is all wrong.
Fletcher's blond? *Crestfallen* I envisioned him as having rather dark brown hair. (Pretty much, like I think I've said before, I imagine him looking and sounding exactly like Bolivar Trask from X-Men Evolution, another cruel scientist who is supposedly working for some greater purpose but really just enjoys testing out his experiments on people, including teenagers, who aren't like him.)
And here we see his start of darkness. Gosh, even back then he was so freaking insane. Here's a tip: if you want to see how fast the chemical heals the leg, don't carve it up beforehand, and don't kill the patient the second it doesn't work out. It's delightfully sickening to be inside his mind and feel the pleasure he gets from taking out his pent-up frustration on others (sickening for obvious reasons, delightful because, well, it's creepily well-written, and also it's proof that Fletcher really has no empathy or kindness within him, to excuse his behavior. I'd be really frustrated if we were supposed to sympathize with Fletcher, here, he's just done too much...).
Again, I can kind-of, sort-of see where Fletcher is coming from in the moment where he gets upset that someone as young as Nikolajs is risking their life over this. Whenever I read about the teenaged boys who lied about their age in order to fight in WWI, I feel upset that they had to die so young for a war that really was pointless. But, at the same time, Nikolajs is an adult and can make this decision on his own; secondly, unlike WWI, which was really just a matter of alliances pulling countries into an unrelated conflict, this fictional war has a direct effect on his home country, as shown through the bombing of Riga. (I know that WWI had direct effects on lots of young volunteers' countries, but I was thinking more of those from Canada and the U.S., which didn't have anything to do with Austria's declaration of war on Serbia... Sorry, everything about WWI, and how so many countries were pulled in just through alliances, makes me really angry.) Also, obviously, yeah, disagreeing with someone's life choices / deciding to kill them for no justifiable reason. Sorry for the ramble. XD
Nikolajs is (I guess I should say was, unfortunately...) a very interesting character. I think it's really cool how he actually met Latvia and knows about the existence of personified countries; I normally don't think of average civilians knowing of them, but of course there's that one soldier in France's strip, and he wasn't high up in the military or government or anything. I like the idea of the bombs hurting Latvia, not through direct physical contact, but because so many of his people and so much of his capital are being destroyed (I share the same headcanon, that such disasters hurt the nations, even if they're not actually hit by bullets/bombs/whatever). Nikolajs was very sweet to help out Latvia so much! Poor kid ... Fletcher was so ruthless to him. :C
Fletcher, Latvia did not force you into the war; you chose it yourself. Do not blame an entire country because of a job crisis that's not exactly easy to fix. Nor did Latvia force you to kill all those people. That was entirely your own twisted mentality. It's SO creepy how he keeps on laughing, even as he's being taken away...
If only he hadn't faked insanity. Then all of this could have been avoided...
Oh gosh, the description of Fletcher 'tearing into Latvia' in more ways than one was just chilling. Don't worry, you didn't make it too vulgar, but you described the idea of the act perfectly, in all its violence and barbarism. I really, really liked that line - well, not liked it, but you know what I mean. It was well-written.
And here we have more victim-blaming from Fletcher, coupled with him daring to think he could be a better Latvia. Which really shows the difference between them - Latvia is deeply traumatized, far more than Fletcher is, but he doesn't take his fear and bitterness out on others. Granted, he does direct them at himself a bit, which isn't the healthiest of coping methods, but he's working on it, plus it's not immoral like what Fletcher is doing. Fletcher things he could be a better Latvia, but he completely snapped after going through only a fraction of what Latvia did, and yet he has the gall to call him weak! I just hate him so much!
It's kind of scary to see Fletcher lose more and more control, blaming Latvia for 'seducing' him and calling him a pedophile and slut. This really makes me think of Frollo, in the Disney song Hellfire (from Hunchback of Notre Dame) - Fletcher reminded me of him beforehand, but now even more strongly so. Except he doesn't struggle against his religion, but more just the fact that he wants to stay in control and make the experiments as efficient as possible, rather than be sidetracked by his lust. At least, that's what I got out of it.
Fletcher, you idiot, if you totally destroy the country of Latvia, Raivis himself will die, and then he will no longer be "yours forever"... Guess he doesn't know that!
| petmentor chapter 23 . 13h ago
Another outstanding chapter! Every new chapter is always worth the wait. Fletcher is so disgusting...he reminds me of Josef Mengele. Ew. Can't wait for the next chapter!
| Dalasport chapter 22 . 14h ago
A great chapter, but I did a little digging on the age of some of the countries when I saw that you said that Iceland was only a year older than Latvia and Sealand. I'm not sure if what you meant by that is that he is physically only one year older or not, and if that was what you meant then this doesn't mean anything. But I'm still going to throw it out there ;)
The settlement of Iceland began in AD 874 and Iceland has been 'Iceland' since then, only going under Norwegian and then Danish rule around 1200 or so.
Russia however: Founded and ruled by a Varangian warrior elite and their descendants, the medieval state of Rus arose in the 9th century. In 988. So Iceland is actually older than Russia! Less experienced because of isolation? yes. But still older. So saying that he is only a year older than Latvia is quite a wrong statement.
Okay, so now that's out of the way. I really love your story and I think your writing has been improving throughout it, which is really fun to watch.
| Obiwanlivesforever chapter 22 . 3/5
I really admire all the effort you put into researching the Lithuanian and Russian airports and the time that it takes to get between them! Haha, I would probably have just put something like "Lithuania drove to the airport and boarded a plane. Soon enough, he got to his destination." XD I'm curious to know what role Lithuania's pilot will play in future chapters. Maybe he'll be the one to fly them all to the bad guy's secret lair, before they burst in and whoop the scientists' butts? XD
You wrote every aspect of Lithuania so well in this chapter, especially his body language and behavior. Just little things like his stomach hurting, his reluctance to speak Russian, and his involuntary flinching at Russia's anger really brought his character and the situation to life. I'm sure I've said it before, but I really like the hesitant relationship you've written here between Russia and Lithuania; not fully trusting, and definitely awkward and uncomfortable, but willing to put aside past differences in order to focus on a common objective. I also find it strangely touching how Russia is so protective of Latvia; he wants to make up for his mistakes. And, in a way, I feel like he always had a sort of twisted, paternalistic attachment to Raivis. Like, a very unhealthy one, as in "I know what's best for you, so you will do what I say or face the consequences," but in a way that he wouldn't let anyone but himself hurt Latvia. (The whole "he always was a fighter" thing made me feel this, as if he's semi-proudly, semi-grudgingly praising Latvia for his defiance under his rule). And now that he's trying to make up for his old ways, he still views Latvia as vulnerable and in need of protection, and so feels most badly about him being mistreated as opposed to the other captives. I also feel like he's now fully waking up to the fact that Latvia is and has always been just an innocent child, and by trying to punish the ones who are hurting him now, he's in his mind punishing the Russia of the past, to redeem himself. Maybe that's why I find Russia's anger so powerful during this whole story; in a way, it's almost like he's focusing it on his old self. Idek. Hopefully this makes some degree of sense. XD You just write him so well, there are so many different facets of him to explore! Pretty much your Russia is my headcanon Russia, both in his past and present incarnations.
I love Lithuania standing up for Iceland to Russia, for reasons I explained in the last review. :)
For once I agree with Russia; the investigation is going too slowly. I want them to get in there and bust the captives out before anything worse happens! (Yet, at the same time, in a twisted way, I don't want them to make any progress, so the story can keep going forever!) It's kind of cool to see Russia and Lithuania, these former enemies, teaming up to get stuff done. If they can't do it, who can?
The description of what death was like for Sealand made me really sad, especially how he was upset that he never got to see his family before the end. :( The conversation with Ladonia was really IC for both of them, and I actually really like the idea of micronations wondering what death is like. They really want to be nations, and the way I see it, death could be viewed as a sort of 'milestone' of being a nation, at least from young, naïve eyes (sort of like how war used to be, and still sometimes is, glorified as a nation 'proving itself' and whatnot.) Like, I could see the micronations being all, "Oooh, so-and-so died in this battle, they must have been really awesome and brave defending their country!" And not really realizing, like Sweden and Finland do, the awfulness of it all. It's sad that Sealand had to be awakened to this so rudely. And now he's the most mentally together out of all the group! That's something I never thought I'd see... be brave, Sealand! It's up to you now! (Also, the description of Iceland's emotional deadness, as well as his lashing out at Peter, really brought home the direness of the situation. Erikur's normally so composed, and seeing him completely broken like this ... it's creepy.)
Well, I guess I've finally caught up on this story! The last thing I want to do is put pressure on you, but please, please update this soon! I simply must know what happens next to our four beloved countries! And I can't wait to see all of the things we've discussed come into fruition in this story! Until then, I'll be waiting eagerly! :D
| Obiwanlivesforever chapter 21 . 3/5
Poor Sealand, still so (comparatively) innocent and uncorrupted ... I like how he often reacts with confusion or annoyance to some of the older nations' requests, but then quickly realizes his error and does his part to help out. It's a good interpretation of his character that keeps in the childishness but doesn't render him totally useless and annoying.
I completely forgot that their hair was cut off! It makes sense that it's growing back more quickly than a human's would, though, given their healing factor and all.
Fletcher ripped the skin on his lips? D: He was even more brutal than I thought! And again, Latvia's and Iceland's relationship provides the perfect contrast. I love how gentle and innocent they are together, and how Iceland kisses him not out of lust, or even really desire, just to help him feel better.
The backstory was so sad! Poor, poor Latvia... I wish I could jump through the computer screen to hug him after all of that! It's so sad that, even in this future you've created, there are still people who are intolerant of others just because of their sexuality, and some of them even hold important government positions. Personally if I was Latvia I'd have reported him ... regardless of how hard he works, he's still an abusive homophobe. Still, I get why Latvia kept silent about it. (I'm guessing he also probably felt a deal of shame and embarrassment about his coming out, especially since it went so badly, so he wouldn't want to risk telling another person what happened...)
Oh, Latvia, I'm wishing I could show you that you didn't make anything worse! If anything, you made it better by opening up your heart to people you can trust! *Squishes him in a hug*
That's a very good headcanon about the scars. Do you mind if I adopt it for myself? (Of course, I'll credit you if I post it on my masterlist on DA or something like that).
GET YOUR HANDS OFF HIM YOU FILTHY MAN
I really like how you chose to depict Russia's abuse of Latvia. It strikes a good balance, I think. Of course I have no love for Russia so I don't *really* care how he's portrayed, but I will admit it's better that he be shown in a somewhat sympathetic light (at least, not a complete monster). Pretty much the thing I liked was how he's not just randomly beating Latvia for fun, he has *some* excuse (which is a horrible one, obviously) which actually makes him more a more realistic villain because rather than just acting insane he's focusing his anger on them for certain misdeeds. Like, that's how I could actually see a tyrant like Russia abusing countries under his control (for messing up paperwork, or acts of defiance as hinted at by the "I don't want to do this, but I have no choice"). What I'm getting at is that the fact that he has a purpose to his cruelty makes him both more believable but also more cruel. I guess. (Sorry that this review isn't up to my usual quality, I'm feeling tired, but I want to push through and finish up your reviews since you were so nice to give me one :)
Unfortunately, FF dot net doesn't allow people to copy paste stuff from FanFics anymore, so I can't copy and paste the paragraph I'm going to talk about, but it's the one right before the dash towards the end of the chapter, starting with "Latvia screamed" and ending with "Fletcher." Anyways, WOW. That paragraph had me completely mindblown. The sheer amount of pain and agony pressed into it was unbelievable. I love how you went back through Latvia's mind to mention all the things he's suffered through the years, how he didn't know whether he was Livonia or Latvia, how he was wondering why Lithuania and Estonia wouldn't help him (cementing their position as his two closest friends) and being unable to distinguish between his various tormentors ... I just loved every agonizing word. (And that sounds really creepy, but it's a good thing that you put all this emotion into it!)
I love the variety in all the other captives' reactions - Iceland watching in horror (and eventually shooting Latvia), Estonia fighting tooth and nail to get to Latvia (;_;) and Sealand, unused to and overcome by all this tragedy, just sobbing on the floor. It really highlights all their characters so well.
You know, I never thought about this until after finishing this chapter, but if only Iceland had just shot Fletcher! Yeah, yeah, it wouldn't really have accomplished anything, since one of the other scientists could have just shot him afterwards, but at least that sicko would have gotten his just desserts. And some of the immediate threat to Latvia would be gone. I can't fault Iceland, though, he obviously had bigger pressing concerns. (It irritates me sometimes when people call out characters for not doing the 'obvious' thing, because how can you expect them to consider all possible options when they're in such a stressful situation? Things that people claim to be 'plot holes' because of this can really just be explained by simple human nature. People rarely ever do exactly what they're supposed to at the right time.)
Poor Iceland, having to do that, but Latvia won't blame him - and really, it's not like he's killing him. More like knocking him unconscious for the time being so he doesn't have to feel the pain. (Although I can still see how it would be traumatic to him - in my mind, even though the nations can come back to life doesn't mean they're totally okay with the idea of dying/killing each other. I'm just saying that, completely objectively, it wasn't so bad what Iceland did.)
Again, I love the different ways in which they face death - Latvia pretty much begging for it due to the fact that yet again he's the one being tormented the most, Estonia and Iceland being defiant to the end, and Sealand crying and screaming. The last one probably hurt the most, for me. He's just so young and unprepared; he hasn't gone through a lot this like all the others have. Actually, come to think of it, this might be the first time Sealand has died, ever. (The only possible thing I can think of that might have killed him is the fire that broke out on Sealand some years ago, and still I think that probably just scarred him). How horrible, having to face death for the first time like that, with absolutely no comfort or mercy, or even time to prepare himself. :(
P.S. Oh my gosh, I just realized ... if this is set in 2030, and Fletcher is 40, he's only 3 years older than me now 0_0
| Obiwanlviesforev chapter 20 . 3/4
Okay, my last review somehow got cut off towards the end? Anyway what I was going to say was that Lithuania must feel so helpless, and that I love how dead serious Poland is in this last part (esp. the bit about the amount of hate in his voice, usually only reserved for Russia [and I'd say probably Germany too, at least historically...]). It's so, I don't now, strangely awesome to see Poland saying "When we find them, they're dead" and Lithuania saying "Fletcher is mine. I'm going to kill him!" I can't wait for the nations to get their revenge...
I suspected Fletcher was about 40-45, so I'm glad to see I wasn't too far off! (Well, not really glad since this means he's so much older than Raivis, but you know what I mean...)
| Obiwanlivesforever chapter 20 . 3/4
See, I love here how, even though Latvia is in some ways the 'weakest' of the group (physically, except for maybe Sealand, and probably when it comes to enduring pain, even though he still held out for a very long time) he is still not some pushover who just sits around and cries all day like a lot of the fandom portrays him as. He takes care of his injured friend and takes the initiative to get him cleaned and stitched up when his wounds are coming open, even though it's a painful and embarrassing task. Just because he's usually the one being taken care of doesn't mean he can't return the favor.
Even though it's far from the most traumatic thing that's happened in this story, I felt a little bad for Sealand when the puppy snapped at him. Obviously, I can't fault the dog for its reaction, but Sealand obviously feels so badly, and he only hurt it to spare Latvia from further agonizing pain. Is it too much to hope for that Snowflake will survive, and eventually become Sealand's pet? Although I know this story is very dark, I can almost see it happening ... I feel like you would want to put in that little bit of happiness in the midst of all this tragedy.
Poor Estonia, having to remove his shorts and have the others see him there ... At the same time, while I know it's humiliating and undignified for him, I can't help but feel like it contrasts wonderfully with the scene you say you might write. Both involve Estonia in a sexually vulnerable position, but the difference all lies around consent. In this situation, Estonia obviously doesn't want to have to strip, but agrees to it because he knows he has to have his wounds healed. His friends (with the exception of Sealand's brief immaturity, which I really liked Iceland's harsh response to) are gentle, respectful, and do not violate his privacy more than necessary. None of this can be said for the later scene. Sorry if I'm looking too far into this, but I do see a long of strong, positive messages involving sexuality coming from this story, and I like analyzing things.
Ohhh, just thinking about those awful sores makes me cringe... :( And I feel so bad for Estonia, having his very self-agency being taken away, unable to so much as clean himself, having to strip and let the others do it for him. Since he's a very independent, solitary person in most situations, this must be especially humiliating for him; he hates being a burden and surrendering so much control to others.
Iceland's direct, businesslike manner in this scene was excellent and very in-character. I can really see him becoming the leader of this group in Estonia's stead, a role which I feel he would fill very well.
Aww, the amount of love Latvia has for Estonia in this scene is just beautiful ... while I, like you, see him as someone who doesn't like physical intimacy (beyond hand-holding and light kissing, and even that's just when I'm pairing him with Ukraine) I see him as secretly being very grateful for physical platonic interaction, like the hugging and stroking that Latvia is doing here. I feel like he would have been sort of hesitant about it at first, but over the years, when the only comfort he could find was through Latvia and Lithuania, he would have warmed to it to the extent that he really needs it in his life, even though he's not one for public hugging and embracing.
And, aww, Latvia's and Iceland's little moment there :) I just love all the relationships in this story so much! (The one that I think could have a little more screen time is Latvia's and Sealand's friendship, but I get that, with so much else going on in the story, it might not be necessary to cram it in.)
I just love the fact that Latvia still 'instinctively' ducks behind Iceland. He still has his canon trait of hiding behind others, but this story makes it so clear that it's NOT because he's a coward, it's NOT because he'd rather his friends suffer than him, it's NOT because he's unworthy to be considered the hero of the story. It's because he's traumatized, and the things that he's gone through (and is still going through) take a long time to heal. I just - aahhh, I love the characterization here so much! I just love how you don't make him entirely wimpy!Latvia or entirely badass!Latvia; he's a blend of both that I think is so perfect to his canon character! I've probably said this before, but you have the best characterization of Latvia that I've EVER read!
And, to carry on from that, he has triggers, too! (i.e. the room where he was vivisected.) Gosh, gosh, gosh, I just LOVE how you made him! You have a protagonist who is well-rounded, extremely likeable, multi-faceted, incredibly strong, absolutely adorable, AND has realistic mental and psychological scars. (One of the reasons it makes me sad when people write Latvia off as weak or cowardly is because the poor boy's obviously got some form of PTSD, and as someone who has emotional issues from depression [obviously not nearly as severe as his but still a big factor in my life] I get sad that he's being discredited just because he's reacting to this kind of trauma like I and so many others do. Despite this story's darkness, I find it inspiring in that sort of way, because the protagonists are very relatable to me.)
*Winces* I thought that something like this (one of the captives being forced to experiment on another) would happen. Oh gosh, that's just awful... "How much you've learned from me," I hate Fletcher I hate Fletcher I hate Fletcher, he is NOTHING like you nor has he learned anything from you apart from the fact that he should hate your evil, twisted guts.
UUNNNNGNGHJ this was literally so painful to read (I'm sorry that I'm kind of delving into gibberish here, I can't think of any better way to express my emotions over this!) The way Iceland is so understanding even when he's being cut open... LATVIAAA NOO
SEE SEE SEE, this is the thing about Latvia that people don't appreciate. He's soft, he's gentle, he's scared - BUT THOSE THINGS ARE NOT ALWAYS WEAKNESSES. He physically cannot bring himself to hurt Iceland. He throws the scalpel away and refuses to cut any further. A character who was emotionally 'stronger' might have been able to do that, but not him. His innate goodness will not permit it. Heck, even FLETCHER admits, albeit in a twisted way ("I'm surprised that you managed to defy me") that this is strength.
That scene was so graphically well-written, it was painful to read, which is a compliment. Raivis' utter discomfort and disgust came off really well; it was very clear how we are supposed to see this scene in terms of morality (that is, it's blatantly sexual assault, and not in any way 'hot' or 'attractive'.) I must say, I absolutely detest phrases like "their tongues battled/explored/invaded/fought for dominance" in kissing scenes, I think it sounds disgusting, so I'm glad that you used it here because it made me feel even more repulsed by the scenario than I already would have been.
Ugh, I hate it when people use the "they're nations, so they're old enough" mentality to justify pedophilia or mistreatment of the characters, so again, I'm glad to see these sentiments echoed in Fletcher.
I swear, my heart stopped too when Fletcher started speaking Latvian. I can't remember whether you confirmed it or just hinted at it in our PMs, but now it's proven - and in such an eerie way. Best reveal ever. Chilled my blood. I could just see his evil smirk as he said it. "Es esmu latvietis" - that's a Wham Line if I've ever seen one. (Ha, TV Tropes...)
"You're going to pay for that, you Latvian bitch!"? How about YOU'RE going to pay for touching him like that, you traitor?!
*Gasps in surprise* I was so proud of Iceland when he revealed he'd taken the scalpel! How cunning and resourceful, especially given the stressful situation he was in! I doubt they'll be able to use it to escape, seeing as the scientists have guns (I think?) and most of them (the captives) are badly injured, but it's a great tool to have nonetheless! That is, as long as the scientists don't see it through the video camera and take it away...
It was such a powerful moment when Estonia flew at Iceland and punched him in the jaw. Gosh, the tension was just crackling like lightning there, even between friends. It took me a while to realize that Estonia didn't understand what was going on; I thought he knew that it was Iceland, but just couldn't bear hearing Latvia's screams and so attacked him in a fit of rage. I keep forgetting that the poor thing can't even see, although maybe it's better like this, so he won't notice the horrific damage that has been done to his best friend.
While in any other story it might seem like a trivial piece of information, I think the revelation that Fletcher is one of Latvia's people is very unsettling and pivotal in a story like this. I see the nations as having a special attachment to their own, and while all of them have undoubtedly been betrayed by their countrymen multiple times throughout history, it's especially upsetting here, given Fletcher's obsession with Latvia. What a horrible man. In a way, it's an interesting contrast to what Fletcher said about Latvia being a "faulty" representation because he's so "weak" - Fletcher might see himself, tall, strong and presumably somewhat intelligent (he is a scientist, after all) as being a more proper representation of the country, but in reality, it is the smaller, weaker, more emotionally unstable, yet in the end so much worthier Raivis who embodies the spirit of the nation.
Poor Latvia, feeling the after-effects of Fletcher's inhumanity... it must be so painful for him, both physically and psychologically. What Iceland did was very sweet; another example of the juxtaposition between innocent, consensual love and violent, perverted lust prevalent in this story. (Seriously, I'm analyzing this fic like it's a high school literature assignment, but I just can't help myself! XD)
| Obiwanlivesforever chapter 19 . 2/23
Okay, for some reason, it really, *really* ticked me off that Crowley was 'wrinkling his nose' at the smell of antiseptic. It's such a subtle detail, but it hugely increases my dislike for him by revealing what a massive, disgusting hypocrite he is. He's the one who's responsible for this whole thing (he's higher-ranking than the others there, yes?) and he has the gall to complain about the stench? Like, "I'm perfectly okay with physically, mentally and sexually tormenting four children, but that smell? Eew." It's just so ... petty and selfish, I hate him, ugh.
NOOO YOU BASTARDS YOU WILL NEVER GET ESTONIA ON YOUR SIDE. HE IS A REBELLIOUS SPIRIT DEEP DOWN. HE WILL NOT BOW.
The water-torture of Estonia was just so cruel. D: I mean, it can't compare to a lot of the stuff they've done, but it was still awful to witness. The Russia's underwear line was both terrifying and darkly amusing, though I found it more so the former, especially how Estonia started laughing insanely. (And again, it shows how severely the Soviet Union affected him, since Russia's house is always where his mind goes when he's being tormented.)
Fletcher, get your hands off Latvia, you beast... You tell him, Raivis! It's awesome to see him fighting back, although with the way he was punished, it would probably have been better if he'd just kept his mouth shut... I was going to say that Estonia will be awfully upset when he sees this, but of course he won't see it, will he? Maybe Iceland will lie about it to spare his feelings, just saying that Latvia is too injured to talk, but then again, Estonia might just reach up to Raivis' mouth and feel it...
At first I thought the experiment with Peter and Raivis wouldn't be so bad; of course, it would be painful for Latvia and stressful for Sealand, but since I'd originally thought Peter would be forced to inject Raivis himself, I was a bit relieved when Fletcher just said he had to find the antidote. Then I realized where it was. Every time I think this can't get more disturbing and violent, it does. Still, I was sure Sealand would end up killing the dog (which is why I wondered why he didn't just slit its throat before cutting open its chest) so I'm relieved that at least it didn't die. It's so cruel, so unimaginably twisted beyond any hope of redemption, to make a child kill a dog, especially one that looks a lot like his. Symbolically, they're both representations of innocence, so it's like they're both being destroyed through this action ... although, Sealand accomplishes what he needs to do, and the dog survives, so I can't help but see this as symbolism that, however badly scarred, our main characters will still make it...
Fletcher, I think that you are "that type of man." Speaking of which, I think the reason Fletcher hates Estonia so much is similar to his loathing of Iceland; namely, he sees them both as rivals for Latvia's affection. Like I said, that immaturity (i.e. "If I can't have him, you can't either!") really makes him terrifying, especially since in all other ways he's anything but childlike. Shows us just how deranged and unstable our main villain is. If he was all cold efficiency like Crowley, I don't think he'd be quite as effective. And it's so sad that Estonia's so lonely, he'll even take comfort in the presence of his tormentor ...
Hooray for Katya! I'm glad she actually did something for once; I do sympathize with her, but my patience runs a little thin when she just watches it all happen. Then again, she does have a daughter who safety is on the line, so I guess there's nothing she can do. Those horrible words carved into Estonia ... again, I couldn't help but see this as a little 'take back' at the fans who call Estonia those things, especially "Russia's bitch." Is there any chance the wounds will heal before Estonia's eyesight does? Probably not, since his eyes were wrecked first...
I literally swore aloud when the computer screen was a decoy. Yet at the same time, it's good, since it means the story will continue longer. I find it sweet that nations who really have nothing to do with any of the captives are still concerned and dedicated to bringing down the villains. Of course, this is really all of their problem since the Sunrise party intends world domination, but I'm not sure if they know that yet.
| Obiwanlivesforever chapter 18 . 2/23
Okay, first of all, you really have to stop saying "I hope this wasn't too horrible" at the end of every chapter. They are not horrible; they are nowhere even near mediocre; they are amazing! I know it's often tough to have confidence in one's own writing skills, but self-talk is just as important as the words of others when it comes to believing in yourself. If you constantly reinforce the idea that you are not good enough, you will start to believe it. And we can't have that, can we? :)
Honestly, it feels like you somehow read my latest review before you wrote this chapter, because you answered both my question about Liechtenstein and whether or not the others had died before Iceland! I was also wondering whether they were tracking the livestream feed, after reading some of the reviews. I'm glad you answered those questions so speedily!
The mental image of Liechtenstein and all those micronations just huddled together under the table, trembling and wide-eyed in fear, was so cute but sad I thought my heart would break. Poor little guys! I love how Switzerland briefly takes on the protective brother role towards them. Despite how gruff and standoffish he usually is, I have a feeling he'd be good with the micronations (especially in circumstances like this, where they're vulnerable rather than annoying) because of how he acts with Liechtenstein.
Okay, so Latvia died once (after the vivisection? Or when he was paralyzed?) and Estonia almost died after the burning, yes?
Plot twist: Hong Kong is responsible for everything. XD But in all seriousness, now we have an idea of where this is all taking place! That's awesome, it means they're one step closer to rescuing their comrades! (Out of curiosity, how many chapters do you think this story is going to be? Of course I never want it to end, so I'm mostly asking this as an assurance that there's still a long way to go! XD)
I'll admit, these long scenes of Estonia were soooo hard to read, for the simple fact that they are absolutely heartbreaking. I remember a while back you told me you'd just finished writing a chapter where Estonia completely breaks, and I'm guessing this was it. I can't even imagine the pain he went through. Waking up at night with a gum inflammation is bad enough (as I know from experience, DX), but the Black Death? And for a week? With two deaths? There's no wonder he's started to lose his sanity.
I'm not really a big fan of 'Estonia joins the Nordics' stuff, so I'm glad that you put here that Estonia doesn't want to permanently leave the Baltics, he just wants more friends, which is perfectly understandable. I hate it when writers (and, regrettably, canon) act like Estonia doesn't care what happens to Latvia and Lithuania. And it's also irritating when Finland is a jerk who makes fun of Estonia, so it's nice here that he's just busy, not excluding Estonia for fun.
The Middle Ages flashback ... I just couldn't. ;_; It's painful to imagine them being tortured as teenagers, but thinking about very young children dying in that way is just impossible. (And yet, of course, it actually took place, with far more catastrophic results than what happened to Estonia and Latvia here. :( ) Latvia's "why does he get to see the sun and we don't?" was particularly heartbreaking, especially because it's such a simple thing. Not "why does he get to live" or "why doesn't he have to suffer" but "why can't we see the sun?" Damn Prussia (although, like with Norway and America last chapter, I can really see both sides of the story - as cruel as it sounds, it would be worse if humans caught the disease from Estonia and Latvia and died, since they can't come back.) You know, I don't often think about how Estonia and Latvia would have fared under Prussia; I think they'd probably have found him bossy and arrogant at worst, but not as cruel as Russia. (Then again, I don't know much about the Baltic states during the times, so I can't judge.) There were two parts that made me the most emotional: Latvia saying that, even though it was selfish, he wanted Estonia to be with him soon, so they wouldn't have to be alone, and Estonia seeing light rather than blackness, as well as Latvia waving to him, after his death. (Forgive me, but I couldn't help but imagine this was how they were reunited in the Brutal series ;_; Not to mention that the whole scene reminded me of Safe and Sound from the Hunger Games). The whole thing was so bleak and intense that I wanted to jump in there and tell them that, no, they will not die; they will live and be strong! Although they would have to suffer so much more in the coming years, between Soviet and Nazi Occupation and, well, all of THIS, but I know they'll be happy in the end, right?
Is Estonia drawing chibis on the wall a nod to the fact that he's supposed to be modeled off of Himaruya? XD
Oh no, I couldn't stand it when he started hallucinating he was back in Russia's closet! And begging Russia not to hurt him, asking him why he left him to suffer ... and then blaming all the others on the wall, even though they couldn't possibly be responsible for his pain (i.e. Finland, for 'not being Nordic enough') really shows how his mind is starting to deteriorate, and all the feelings of loneliness, pain and inadequacy in his life are combining together to mentally torture him...
NO NO WHY DOES ESTONIA ALWAYS HAVE TO GO BLIND?
Every little detail you put into Estonia's movements and actions during the last bit of the story really made it obvious that he's been broken. The strongest example of this, for me, was when he continued hugging Latvia even when he knew it would shock him. (And poor Latvia, of course, didn't resist.) Estonia in his right mind would NEVER do such a thing. He must feel truly dead inside if he would seek comfort at the expense of his best friend's wellbeing (and there's a kind of twisted caring in it, since he acknowledges the fact that Latvia is the only one who can make him feel better.)
(Oh, and I'll have you know that, while I was reading the last chapter, my sister came over, pointed at a name on the screen, and said without knowing the context, "That one's my favorite." The name in question? Fletcher. XD)