I liked the chapter!

Is this story based on something other than ME?

My sides hurt from laughing at this chapter. Between the "What's in the box?", a Grizzly driving a grizzly, Goto stealing that guy's ability to understand language, and a honey badger being a Chekov's Gun- THIS IS MY FAVORITE CHAPTER! Favorited story, Favorited Author!

I read The first two chapters of this story and fell in love and then slowly fell out of it.

At first I thought this would be a good crack fict in the image of where in the world is Harry Potter but it varies so much you never even reach the scene that starts the story

I feel this would have been a lot better tv show then fanfiction. It got hard to imagine very fast and you often lacked in depth description to charcters, attacks, and worlds. You tried to shove to much complicated plot into this it would have made metal gear jealous. You try to do to much and for that reason make is entire story come off as some sort of fever dream vague, wierd, and nonsesicle.

However despite all of this and the fact i still barely know the plot this story was entertaining and interesting enough to hold my attention enough for me to finish it.

7/10

Okay, the idea of Shepard using a Thermal Clip as a dildo is hilarious. Especially when she turns out to be enough of a screamer to cause an earthquake is... oh God. The fact that Le- I mean Wuffels offers to fabricate a Quarian equivalent for her is... just... *breaks down laughing**

Am I the only one who imagines Autochthon being voiced by BRIAN BLESSED? I can't be, can I?

At the very beginning the part when Jane was stranded was promising, very promising.
unfortunately, later the shitty game logic took over assisted by shitty sitcom type humor and shitty context concerning the origins of "superman" type craft of Jane.
So this is probably some crossover with some shitty manga or something.
Thats really is a shame since the author is obviously talented. And some passages are very, very good.
I lost interest, when the whole crap about "chosen" started to be pushed to the front and abundance of "dream" sequences made the text irritating and unreadable imho.

Technically shepherd is a Cerberus science experiment that wipes out the entire organization in game. Ya think that they would learn better after the 7th time. Awesome story

Well how about that? You took two things I hate, mashed them together with a healthy pile of things I love for seasoning, and made something I enjoyed immensely. Bravo!

Wuffles for MVP.

There's a limit to how far the tease can go. Liara and Sheppard, I mean. At this point, it has reached the level of annoyance with the story instead of just drama. Liara is so focused on finally Melding with Sheppard that she just goes right back to accepting kisses from Kaiden? Kisses that don't require apology? Realistic? Sure. Relationships can be messy business. But in stories... well unless the drama of the relationship IS the story, it generally gets annoying. It needs resolution, one way or another. Of course this is an even more subjective review than the others was.

Okay. Stealing the lines of other authors is not cool, nor is it honoring them. Especially since this isn't Superman fanfiction where such lines would belong. Not only is it not cool, it completely breaks the immersion of anyone who knows what the hell you stole from. Horrible.

Damn this was a great chapter. Kung-fu badassery, simple pleasuers of life (hot tub), Wuffles, Thermal Clips. Love it.

This was magnificent! Glorious! A masterpiece of action packed storytelling! Can't wait to see how the rest of the story goes! Thanks for sharing this with us!

Did...?

Did Harbinger commit suicide and get turned good for it?

That last part was so confusing...

I don't know what's going on but it is awesome! Is this a crossover or fusion? If so with what? Any way this was an EPIC start can't wait to see how the rest of the story goes!