|Reviews for Contract of the Shinigami|
| CaptainToast321 chapter 3 . 8/14
Must you really use Japanese words in the story?
It's written in English. Not Japanese.
There is zero reason to have Kushina REPEATEDLY use the word Sochi. Use the word son. It's shorter and more people know what it means without subtext.
Don't be such an pretentious asshole.
| EverMystical chapter 3 . 7/31
fuck...this is too cringey. the flow of the story is just...bleeuuuuugh. but i will give you props for having the most views of all the stories sharing the same topic.
| Plasma Dragon 312 chapter 3 . 7/22
She's probably gonna be angry when she learns of the things people said or did. Well when she mys them at l ast
| AmethystPone chapter 3 . 4/28
ARgh! So muc spelling/wording/grammatical mistakes.
| YeagerMeister31 chapter 3 . 1/23
well this was an interesting story wonder when he's gonna get new clothes
| zeek17 chapter 3 . 7/30/2016
Bang! That's me facetabling myself.
Bang! Every time it's some kind of error/misspell.
Bang! Bang! Bang! Bang!
| gabeclone chapter 3 . 5/5/2016
I'm experiencing a fascinating set of emotions from reading this story. On one hand you're a competent enough writer that you took an interesting concept and managed to not ruin it. This keeps me coming back for more. On the other hand, your execution of several conversations and plot points has been clumsy. You also malapropise a lot. This tells me that you're either a new writer with a lot of talent, but not a lot of skill. Or a veteran writer who has no talent, but you have hard earned skill from writing for so long.
| DocSlendy chapter 3 . 3/31/2016
Human shinigami? Damn it.
| PredatorPuck chapter 3 . 11/4/2015
I think you should make Uzumaki clan as a whole some connection with shinigami, I mean even in cannon Uzumaki clans seems to have unhealthy obsession with Shinigami with their Death summoning techniques to death summoning mask, temple etc... It would make lot of sense why Shinigami would take interest in Naruto
| Edward95 chapter 3 . 8/9/2015
| QUINN chapter 3 . 7/1/2015
are ya a fucing lesporn douchbag?
| narugokuichigo6 chapter 3 . 5/7/2015
Hey yo I read this fic from beginning to end again and still LOVE IT update soon and I mean real soon cos this is to good to stop
| Indecisive Bob chapter 3 . 12/7/2014
In regards to Kushina's taijutsu style, you could go with the seemingly popular "fist" Sykes and name it "Cutting Fist," "Cutting Hand," "Severing Hand," "Cutting Hand," or something else along those lines.
| hakon2feb chapter 3 . 5/23/2014
Ok, so the debt is payed and kushina will stay :)
I'm really glad you made this fic revolve more around the uzumaki side of narutos family. Sure his father was the 4th hokage, but the uzumaki clan must have been awesome aswell. Many neglect that and only focus on improving on the jutsu that belonged to the 4th.
Also i have a confession. I really love red hair :) Not so much that i would end up in love with my own mother, but still...
Along with his mothers swordstyle, the uzumaki jutsu and the scroll from the shinigami, it will all make naruto a force to be reconed with.
Stay in touch, and don't stop writing.
| devo342 chapter 3 . 2/19/2014
What does Sochi mean?
| MrSwaggafied chapter 3 . 1/10/2014
Beauty, every chapter is well written and enjoyable as well. .
| Guest chapter 3 . 1/4/2014
Kushina actually has bright green eyes that seem to glow.
| 246vili chapter 3 . 8/20/2013
Well Naruto made his part of the deal fast. I almost felt sorry for Jiraya when Kushina had a "talk" with him in the room. Almost. :D
| Swifteagle chapter 3 . 8/20/2013
oh, i gotta love this concept!
| Majin-kun chapter 3 . 8/17/2013
I really wished that "Menma" would've had Kushina's hair and eye color so we could see what it would look like.
| koomba chapter 3 . 8/4/2013
That way of fighting is really good for quick wins. Personally I don't like violence, but when someone came at me raring to go I swung down on his shoulder and kicked his thigh and it was over. 'Course I'm the big guy fighting someone a foot shorter than me so I got in trouble. But that guy is dangerous and to be takin out that fast was a good thing. So its definitely a good fighting style for heavy hitting Naruto.
| ApocalypseDragon169 chapter 3 . 7/31/2013
| Biblio388 chapter 3 . 7/16/2013
Interesting turn of events in this fic. wondering how it will go in the future.
| Mohammad.Alzo chapter 3 . 6/11/2013
| frytrix chapter 3 . 5/11/2013
Kenjutsu style for kushina,,, "err stab it til it stops moving style..."
| Kuro Tamashi chapter 3 . 3/5/2013
oh fuck yeah! now naruto will need a Zanpakuto and he will start to spam Byakurais! hehehe, oh yeah, and maybe he can make a bankai :P. Love this
Raiton: Byakurai :)
| david.teague.3950 chapter 3 . 12/22/2012
Very nice chapter, but one thing, I thought the bandits said "Let's get out of here and leave these bodies to die in the fire." That made no sense to me, if the group in the Caravan were already dead then wouldn't it be better to say "Let's get out of here and leave these bodies to burn or fry in the fire?"
| Narutard-Slayer chapter 3 . 12/11/2012
| Jmw chapter 3 . 12/8/2012
I have slutty fem naruto fiction challenge
Naruko is the daughter of kushina uzumaki and a fem kyubi both her parents are futa so she also has a penis before naruko was born kushina and kyubi wanted to revive the uzumaki clan so they decide that they will raise their future child and turn her into a willing sex slave and whore her off two other females in konoha or other village kunoichi that want to fuck there child naruko. Watch as kushina and fem kyubi offer ther daughter as slut to revive the uzumaki clan willing.
1. Kyubi never attacked konoha she fell in love with kushina.
2. Naruko must refer to her moms as mistress
3. Naruko moms must rape her constantly till shes a willing slave
4. Kushina sell her daughter off to Her friends such as mikoto uchiha, Hana inuzuka anko ayame tsunami from wave and mei terumi her friend in mist tsume inuzuka village elder koharu and shizune. You can add more if you want but these people have two abuse rape and dominate and fuck naruko.
5. Kyubi must sell of two another village as breeding stock has two be either kumo or iwa. If its kumo the people who must use naruko are yugito Sami and karui who must be very abusive two naruko and naruko must be the raikages slave. If you choose iwa then you must make her kurotsuchi slave who drugs her after befriend her and gaining her trust and then betrays her by raping her abusing her and getting her guy friends Impregnate her.
6 fetishs that must be used on naruko is beastality,domination,gangbang ,slavery double penetration, yuri, futa on girl, rape, incest, impregnation, milf, lolicon, mom/daughter futa on futa drugged, and teen and old. Any more is ur choice.
7. Naruko must be ten in this story and must have like 7 vaginas and 3pairs of boobs that she gets for being daughter of kyubi. This way she can have many babies.
And that's my slutty fem naruto fiction challenge for you kyubigoku and any other writers out there.
| fate's mask chapter 3 . 11/16/2012
how the hell are you getting those two together
| Nid Salim chapter 3 . 11/12/2012
How about Red scyth style?
| kitsuni-ken chapter 3 . 11/10/2012
how about Heddohantā-ken. it means head hunter fist
| Ophidias chapter 3 . 10/5/2012
Fun idea but it's such an effort to read. your sentence structure and word use is like a child's and your dialogue is so unnatural it hurts. sorry but i can't read any further
| Rickjames196 chapter 3 . 9/23/2012
I'm glad their meeting was original. Usually it's "MINATO BAKA WHY DID YOU SEAL KYUUBI INTO MY SOCHI" or some other shit and she punches him lulz. I just thought of this, but does this mean Naruto can use shiki fuin and give shin two souls instead of his? She shouldn't be mad at him, there are plenty of people to kill in the elemental nations. Hahaha kushina gonna teach him the way of the sword. He should steal samehada. Hhaahaha jiraiya gonna get it. Xd kushina gonna kill tsu-chan. Fuck swords, ask bout fuinjutsu xD. Hahaha he made up an uber lie, lets see what it is. He could say, "I asked you who my parents where when you where drunk, cuz I met a woman claiming to be my mother..." that's a good one XD. Hhaaha he made a crazy explanation. Kyhahaha Naruto is listening in. Wonder if he kills a bandit camp does that count as extras for later on or what? Be kinda annoying to have to catch whole bandit camps, just cuz he only needs two. Awww kyu gave him advise, so nice. Awww fucking bandits, but only two? Kinda convenient. Why is he saying sorry to those fuckers? They deserve to die. Bwhahaha stab and a rasengan to the gut, fuck yea. Naruto should have a death god mode or something, maybe to replace sage training? Well he has toads still so the shinigami version of sage? I hope he revives haku and zabuzabu. Well it's shin's job and he doesn't really kill them, just collects their souls...usually Xd. XD Naruto is making kyu change. Idjit didn't even put the kunai away xD. Awww so cute, killing for his mother, he is becoming gaara. Lulz now he got two S rank teachers. Wow that taijutsu is pretty bad ass, with or without a sword dangerous either way. XD so much for shin not sneaking up on him. Kyhahaha he made the death god laugh. Hhaha dun let bunta hear you say that, he'll sit on you. Stfu Naruto, dun make him change his mind. He is exited, it's his first actual summoner XD. Wow fucked up, sarutobi never gave him presents... Shini will prob give him some kind of death sword. Hahaha she kicked jiraiya's ass till he gave her his wallet. Try decapitation fist in Japanese? Things always sound cooler in Japanese.
| PercyxThalia Should Be Canon chapter 3 . 9/15/2012
That was funny when Naruto did and said "He turned to the door and stood at attention with his hand to his forehead.
"Goodbye Ero-sennin. I'll try to revive you if you die," Naruto said"
| Guest chapter 3 . 7/19/2012
make him learn some normal elemental jutsu you are concentrating more on AU jutsu
| Screamindivr145 chapter 3 . 5/28/2012
Very interesting. I really look forward to seeing what happens next. By the way, try reading over your chapter before posting them. You sometime leave words out of sentences and you continually use "your" instead of "you're"
| TheVoidWalker666 chapter 3 . 5/27/2012
| BioHazard82 chapter 3 . 5/27/2012
Great story so far. Please update soon, and often!
| chazman89 chapter 3 . 5/26/2012
I have no problem with you using the name of the style that I created for the OC in my story. He just calls it the dance of death cause it looks like a dance and leads to your death.
| Chooch77 chapter 3 . 5/25/2012
The red blade for the sword and the whirling tides for the taijutsu.
Good story by the way.
| ncpfan chapter 3 . 5/25/2012
This story is very enjoyable so far! Your storylines are always great, though, so that's to be expected! Errors are minor, so I won't go into those, and they don't take away from the story, either. As far as a name for Kushina's taijutsu style - if it's designed to match her kenjutsu style, how about the Cutting Fist (Kattoken?). This would kind of go with the style of the other two major taijutsu styles we know the names for - the Jyuuken (Gentle Fist) and the Goken (Strong Fist). Don't know much about actually making up the style, but as far as taijutsu that works like cutting blades, you could use Shigure from Kenichi - History's Strongest Disciple as a point of reference, at least, for the moves.
Either way, good story, looking forward to more! Curious, though - will Shin allow Naruto to tell any select few people about his contract now that Naruto is his full summoner, and in a sense, an equal partner to him now (at least as far as summoning is concerned)?
| puma1sunfire chapter 3 . 5/25/2012
Great chapter! I am looking forward to seeing this story further develop.
| GrievousHollow chapter 3 . 5/25/2012
A very nice chapter KyuubiGoku. :) I really enjoyed reading it.
Just a little something to add to Naruto6023's idea regarding Kushina using a clone-style form of taijutsu. When Naruto uses the shadow clone technique, the clone is formed from using hand-seals then there's a *poof* and it appears.
What if instead of that happening, Kushina's mastery of the shadow clones is at such a high level, that she can have them phase out of her like a ghost and then solidify afterwards?
It would take enemy ninja by surprise, and imagine the clone phasing through Kushina, and into the ground using a jutsu like Doton: Shinjū Zanshu no Jutsu on an enemy. Then add her kenjutsu to the mix, and you have a lethal combination attack.
Your doing very well with the Naruto/Kushina scenes, and they are making a steady progression in their relationship, and a strong bond is already forming between them.
I'm still very curious about the look exchanged between the Shinigami, and Kyuubi when Naruto said Minato was one of his heroes. Judging from how Kushina talked about her late husband, I don't think she knows the secret that Kyuubi, and Shinigami are hiding from Naruto that would make them narrow their eyes in such a way when his name is mentioned.
I'm hoping that more information will be revealed in future chapters.
Looking forward to your next update. :)
| Naruto6023 chapter 3 . 5/24/2012
Hey! Have to say that I'm enjoying the story so far, though its kinda rushed at some parts, but still, am enjoying it.
Anyway, about Kushina's taijutsu that would suit her? Tsunade did told Jiraiya in canon that how her fighting style like Naruto revolved around shadow clones...get it? There are just so many possibilities with shadow clones in taijutsu. Like, show her as a master of shadow clone technique who could create it seallessly. So during her taijutsu fights, shadow clones would keep popping from unpredictable directions, pummeling the opponents.
Although Naruto knows this to some degree, you can have Kushina train him to master this kind of nintai (ninjutsu-taijutsu). You can call it 'Clone Fist'...requiring high amounts of chakra, sharp reflexes, mastery of kage bunshin no jutsu, timing of forming shadow clones...many other factors need to be taken into consideration here.
You can Kushina be a master of the next level of this taijutsu- Exploding Clone Fist'...(sounds cool ne?) 'grins'...so you get it? Add exploding shadow clones in a mixture of normal shadow clones and BOOM! You've got a kickass deadly taijutsu style! :D
So, what do you say?
About the kenjutsu style, lemme give you a hint- chakra chains XD
Now its upto your creativity as to how you make Kushina incorporate with a katana. :)
Anyway, hope this helped. Update soon please! Eagerly waiting to see how Naruto and Kushina's relation progresses! :p
| MadaraRennigan chapter 3 . 5/24/2012
Keep going, and keep lemons to a minimum if any. That is just like porn for naruto addicts
| GStarrahhxx72 chapter 3 . 5/24/2012
I loved ot soo much ! However, I don't know how their relationship is going to develop onto a boyfriend/girlfriend relationship though when the have a mother/son relationship ? Can't wait for more !
| Dregus chapter 3 . 5/24/2012
well she was from uzushiogakure (i think i got close to the spelling), so why not 'wrath of the whirlpool' or something with whirlpool in it?
| Rake1810 chapter 3 . 5/24/2012
Flowing water, swirling tides, go for the water allusions. I'd also down the road like to see Tsunades excuse to Kushina.
| Elemental Dragon Swordman chapter 3 . 5/24/2012
Looks like Naruto won't have to find two people to kill so his mother can stay with him and lol at Naruto's reaction to Jiraiya being punished by Kushina. That is a interesting name for that taijutsu style Kushina is teaching Naruto.
| Psudocode Samurai chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
There are a number of true martial arts that focus on nerve strikes and the like, you could just say that the 'limb cutting' extent of it was just a variation, one developed after the discovery of chakra scalpels or the like. That said, I dont know of any styles offhand that are centered around chopping strikes to joints, simply because chops are usually not the normal strike used for taking out joints (Usually it's palm strikes (Tae-Quan-Do, if I spelled that right, I'm not much for spelling) but others use fists or feet, it's just about the hardness of the hand/foot in that instance.)
Now if he is trained specifically for it (This can be accelerated by the fox or through chakra) he could make his hands like steel or actually sharpen them with wind chakra to accomplish it.
As to a name, decapitation implies that he always goes for the neck to take the head, but in the description it works for any limb/sections of the body, so 'limb' may be better, but at the same time a lot of styles dont really embody what you do in style. Strong fist, for example, means more than just keeping your fists tight.
All that said, perhaps going from the aspect of it being 'Kushina's style'so maybe something like Crimson Lotus or the like. Then take a page from Kenichi: The Mightiest Disciple and have her martial arts and sword style mirror one another. At one point in the aforementioned series the character was emulating his masters, but he didnt have a weapon, so he used hands as though they were swords. strong follow through strikes with knife hands and thrusts with spear hands. With the mentioned exercises above he would be able to, technically, learn one fighting style that can be used interchangeably. The main hurdle would be compensating for the length of a blade Vs his hands/feet.
The idea can actually be applied to other weapon styles, most notably the staff and spear kata, so later the concept can be something that he teaches to Konohamaru if you like. Or, if you really want to play up Death, have him learn scythe styles and apply them with his hands, not unlike snake or mantis martial styles.
| El Frijolero chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
Nice chapter i hope you update soon
| CJL20115 chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
great chapter update soon
| Irishfighter chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
| red neo ranger chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
loved it keep it up cant wait to read more
| renegadeofficer89 chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
I agreed with your AN. Anything with Decapitation is pretty awesome supposedly, but placing that name for a taijutsu style is weird. But sadly, I have no Idea for a name, so no help there. And Tsundere!Kyuubi is totally great. Will he/she/it keep being a Tsundere later on? WTF happened to the seal that uhh... 'fixed' him/her/it to be a tsundere? And I thought the actual contract is pretty stupid. This kinda shows that it is more than I think. Good job as always KG. Keep on going with this.
| LbcLostKid chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
| Guest chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
Funny part is where do you guys get red death and kushina is great with swords? You do know actually she stopped being a ninja after she got with minato just felt like letting you all know
| Noble Endeavor chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
Thanks for the new chapter maaaaan!
Shinigami on Earth? Hell let loose such thing lol.
Anyway, me hope for the next chapters soon! Pleaaaseeeeee *puppy eyes* Well if not, then maybe the Fox love the Cat Fic, or maybe Tsume & Naruto pairing fic.
Keep up the good work!
| SSJ3 Kyuubi Gohan chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
| Not In Use Anymore 35 chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
Awesome, can you have Naruto give up on Sasuke later one.
| Heliosion chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
The thing is all we know about Kushina is her chains and fuin techniques. Its a a fandom that she's a swordmaster that has permeated the entire section... Just so you know but honestly I like this quirky title. Now kindly um remember your background details. They slipped a bit in this chapter!
| Marick Kel Thalas chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
That was a great chapter also for alias for Naruto when he becomes the Human Shinigami also as he holds the contract with the Shinigami how about Shinigami No Shinobi (Death God Ninja) for Kushina's taijutsu style name how about Rage of the Maelstrom considering Kushina is from a country surrounded by whirlpools and as whirlpools are called Maelstrom plus Kushina was known to have a temper when she was younger so it would make sense if her taijutsu style was named after something from her home country and her temper great story please update looking forward to future chapters
| Sang28 chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
A little filer-ish buy with a little forshadowing. Idea for the sword style call it maybe the dance of the tides , dance of the whirlpool or flowing tide style. All of those sound like they might fit some one from a sea village. Hope for an update soon
| fanficreader71 chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
Great chapter, I will be looking forward to reading your next update.
| blueexorist chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
Great chapter keep up the good work :)
| Forsaken God chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
| Deltablacknaruto chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
How about the shiniken(death fist), you already said it would make the opponent feel the lost a limb or it would actually remove them, wouldn't that be like killing the bodypart
| daveoo mangeoo chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
my last review was meant for chapter 3 sorry!
| smokeapound chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
ok... could have been longer
| karthik9 chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
it is excellent chapter i look forward to future updates
| Acolyte of the Blood Moon chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
Hmm... How about Eight points style after the 8 points of instant death (mentioned by Zabuza)?
| a.marsh55 chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
Way to start the mother and son bonding also if you want a knew name have the name have some to do with foxes or something update soon!
| BladePhoenix41 chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
| edboy4926 chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
| Semi-Professional Scotsman chapter 3 . 5/23/2012
It was good but it's making me wonder how the development of their relationship is gonna happen, personally i loathe minato with a fucking passion so it makes me wonder who's going to develop the feeling s first
and how it's going to work, most stories with the Naruto/Kushina pairing make the mistake of mentioning Minato wayyyyyy too much and it bothers me because if your going out with a girl and the girl keeps mentioning their past lover who they originally had feelings for it would make you feel inadequate, espiclly someone like Naruto. So I hope your don't do that,
I wonder are you gonna make it a Bleach like thing cause that'd be awesome and if he someone gets into some emotional drama with Kushina (which is bound to happen) it would distract hi. From that :).
| Aaron Leach chapter 3 . 5/23/2012