|Reviews for Equilibrium|
| invinoveri chapter 3 . 3/1
Like the premise but the characterization is off. I think the strength of this fic would be a sith lord Lelouch in the Code Geass universe or Emperor Lelouch in the Star Wars universe.
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/3
hi loving this story just thought I would let you know that knightmears are space capable it happens in a game called another centuries episode r so any way keep up the good work
| SirKnight chapter 6 . 1/12
Nevermind I apologize. I wasn't assuming I forgot you confirmed he would go back in chapter 5. Cant wait :)
| SirKnight chapter 7 . 1/12
I would like to say overall I like this story. I like the way knightmare frames are implemented into this story and your description of how much of a impact they've had to the battlefield. Also I might be assuming but it seems inevitable for lelouch to return home to earth at some point and if he does I cant wait for that. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.
| Vaeius chapter 7 . 1/4
I think Zero (Lelouch) should go to earth with at least a few Sith. Plus if he's going to be dragging it into the galaxy he would probably like to have at least some help. Going into a situation blind and alone? Not good strategy unless hes got some form of master brilliance up his sleeve(which would actually prove interesting. BUT still think he should at least bring some of his closest allies with him. That is IF hes going intentionally?
| Other Personalities chapter 7 . 9/15/2013
I love this BTW is that voice he hears V.V. Or Mao?
| STARSCREAM RULEZ chapter 7 . 8/27/2013
Great chapter. I hope you update soon!
| reven228 chapter 7 . 8/21/2013
Hey, great chapter, I'm looking forward to more soon. Keep goin and stay golden
| reven228 chapter 6 . 8/20/2013
I say let zero be alone. It'll be oh so more impressive when he wins the war by himself, rather than with a galactic army
| Epic Ebi chapter 7 . 8/10/2013
Ouch, so you're in my position: a sort of "I can write fanfics, but can't be bothered much" mindset. I feel for ya.
This was disappointing in the sense that I was waiting for a new chapter to advance the plot. But, then again, this did put things into perspective, so I didn't mind in the end.
Hopefully, when you're ready, you'll produce the next chapter, and it'll be all good. Don't rush it. ;)
| Slices chapter 7 . 8/8/2013
interesting however, I have to point out that to particularly powerful force sensitives, it is easy to destroy such machines using the force or Lightsaber combat. In addition, the Knightmare frames are not interstellar fighters thus they do not take over for the space cruisers or even fighters, as these are used for sieges and skirmishes in space.
Otherwise I look forward to a new chapter.
| JinzoMask656 chapter 7 . 8/8/2013
Great job, but how did the Republic get it? I would think a weapon on that scale would be top secret and extremely hush...well anyways please keep up the good work
| Thorndsword chapter 3 . 8/8/2013
I'm not sure that you realize that what you want Lelouch to control is not, in reality, the dark side so much as the overused and disingenuous grey. I'm hesitant to even regard this as a dark side story. It's more a let's shoehorn some light side into the mix so that he becomes a sympathetic but still edgy character situation.
My critique of this chapter is as follows:
What kind of fool just beats someone up and assumes it's over in the first place? Seems like Lelouch got what was coming to him for not taking such a dire situation seriously.
What, did he think that fools so far gone that they'd planned to rape someone would stop their dark ways out of fear of being punched? This is not the Marvel universe, and such a method is just about as effective as it is there. That is to say, not at all. There's no excuse for not finishing them off in the first place.
Another of the many problems I have with this chapter is Nyla acting like Lelouch killing that garbage was a bad thing. This is supposed to be the girl that "wants to be a Sith Lord one day?" Not with that attitude, she won't be.
The dark side is not some misunderstood or inherently malevolent entity. The dark side is harnessed when you use emotion to power the force. It doesn't matter what kind of emotion, it's still "the dark side." The corrupting element being the human condition.
Your assertion that the dark side is inherently bad is one that many stories have put forth, and all failed to be sufficiently convincing of. The protagonist overcoming the odds to achieve his desire is useless when said odds are a non issue.
In the end, this seems to me like you wanted to be contrarian and write a story where the protagonist uses the dark side, "but he's still a stand up guy!" This is absurd for reasons stated above. It's also a concept used in many a forgotten story on this site.
This story, while better written, reminds me of Freedom of the Dark Side by ShadowRaider20009.
You have more talent than most on this site. I'm not saying you should stop writing this or completely change it's direction (despite how much the latter would please me,) I'm just giving you some things to think about.
| OBSERVER01 chapter 7 . 8/8/2013
short but good
| Imperial warlord chapter 6 . 8/7/2013