|Reviews for Palimpsest|
| FatesShadow83 chapter 13 . 12/15/2013
Love this! Brilliant story!
| Makokam chapter 13 . 12/13/2013
I was recommended this story a few days ago and have spent most of my time since reading it. It's very well written and i can certainly understand why it was recomended. It's highly entertaining. The second chapter in particular was absolutely hilarious.
As a whole though...I'm kinda struggling to figure out what is going on here. I can't help feeling like more than one stone was dropped into this time stream. EVERYONE seems a bit too precocious, especially Ginny(The hell is she trying to seduce Harry(or whatever) at age 12 here when she could still barely talk to him at the point in canon?(I did like that Luna was ready to strip too though, that was very much like her)), and/or just out of character. Draco especially. Even in the first year he seemed too...nice? Relateable? Not a complete arse? I dunno. There's just so much going on that I can't figure out how any of Hermione's actions could have changed these things. So many things are just different that I can't even begin to understand why they are. Too many damn ripples and butterfly wing beats. A perfect example of this is the loss of The Diary. Did Lucious just wait too long to retrieve it this time? And if so, why? Our heroes' absence from Flourish and Blots that day shouldn't have had any effect on that, seeing as he'd already had it in his possession at the time.
Another good example is the Slytherin Civil War. Why the hell is that happening? How did that first flying lesson go so drastically off script? Did the Rememberall even get sent to Neville?
I'd love to say I've reached the point where I've thrown my hands up, said, "Fuck it" and stopped caring, but at least once a chapter you've done something that makes me go, "Wait, why is THIS happening?"
Now that I'm thinking about, what happened with The Mirror of Erised? Is it still behind that tapestry being ignored? Weren't they asked about it? Wouldn't they have turned it in when asked? Did that have to do with why Flamel was called to the school? And I guess he still has the stone? Or was it destroyed this time as well? Why would Moody have been enough to send Quirrel fleeing into the forest(where he'd been successfully hunting unicorns for months) and to his death when he was under Dumbledore's watch already? That eye? And does that mean the only Voldemort "alive" now is The Ghost of Tom Riddle?
Why didn't the Aurors recognize "the beast" as a house elf if they viewed the Dursley's memories?
AUGH! So. Many. QUESTIONS!
It's still very entertaining and well written, I just have no idea what's going on and I'm unable to dispel my doubts that there was only one message sent through time.
Which reminds me. The first chapter. Why/how did Harry fail in offing Voldy-pus? And the whole opening of hell gates and nuke-it-from-orbit/rocks-fall-everbody-dies thing? That sure escalated quickly.
| DarkBellez chapter 1 . 11/24/2013
This looks amazing!
| notyou chapter 13 . 11/2/2013
Lovely, this story made my day!
| Tish chapter 12 . 10/21/2013
Just wanted to drop a line and say that I really enjoyed your story :). I found it very well written, you've manged to develop a unique style, and a very witty style at that!
Again, thank you for the good read.
| sfjoellen chapter 4 . 10/20/2013
please accept a gentle nudge to your muse. your legion of fans will abase themselves in gratitude when next you update. or i will.
it's a great story, wonderfully written.
| Ryan Chessman aka Crys chapter 13 . 10/3/2013
*chuckle* like that last paragraph.
Interesting story. Definitely describing a more hide-bound McG than in canon. Several other minor change coming through that the ripple effect is making bigger (Draco).
You never did tell us who the Gryff Seeker is. If Harry's reserve Chaser, then someone is Seeker. More to the point, why Harry didn't try. Now, his hawk-like thought processes will make him an obvious choice.
Looking forwar to more, if this story continues.
| Guest chapter 13 . 9/16/2013
Regarding the regeneration of your diary horcrux, in your story are any of the horcruxes able to do that? In other words, can there be several Riddles at the same time in your tale? That thought adds a serious amount of complexity to the nix.
Best wishes as you continue with your work,
| Sun S. Li chapter 13 . 9/1/2013
After starting on your underappreciated Naruto fic i decided to check out your other fics and i was happy to do so. I would heartily reccomend your fics to any other avid reader. It's both your style of writing that comes off not as an omniscient narrative but as if the main characters are writing their own story and your dedication to not only following one protagonist but all the cast is at your whim..it's great. The greatest point for you i would give praise to is to not be suckered in by cliches and tropes and make the main plot of many of your stories a sandbox rather than a detailed list of what to hit. You may touch it but it'll be done in your way. An oft more satisfying and humorous way. I'll be happy to follow your work and give reviews to your deserved pieces. The only criticism this fic and your naruto would gather from me would be minor typos and grammer mistakes such as forgetting words especially after your parenthintical side alongs. Definitely not the worst to have.
| god of all chapter 13 . 8/29/2013
Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.
| Tellur chapter 13 . 8/29/2013
Great read so far!
I'm looking forward to see more of it.
| X-elemental chapter 13 . 8/25/2013
I do wonder how powerful Tom is at this point. He requires humans as sustenance, yes, but...does it also make him better or is it just like eating food? The story at least as his strength waxes and wanes.
Certainly, he wasn't very impressive in books - maybe fast reactions are not his thing - given he just stood there and watched as Harry stabbed his diary with basilisk fang.
At this point, I note how well Hermione has kept Harry safe. Twice, he has avoided confrontation with sworn enemy. The memories were a nice touch.
I also kind of feel bad for Ginny in her brave disrobing (in front of her own brother! She should have started without them) , even as I know her mother isn't above using love potions - hopefully she, as well as others are after Hermione's unfortunate dosage, given how in canon all that got out of the girls was a laugh when the story was told.
Though I do note they have now reached the age that Fred was first seducing Lavender and Hermione at, yet Ron seems to be much less wordly than the twins. In fact, somehow-or-other, it seems as if girls know about this much more, looking back now. Granted, there's the obvious excuse of AAAAH I'M BLEEDING :p
But more important one, and probably a particularity for that above is who is in PoV - most of the story, especially lately, has been in Hermione's PoV. Which is fine, but even Draco gets more mind-time than The Boys, put together.
| X-elemental chapter 8 . 8/23/2013
You know, it kind of incited diabolical laugh to know that the same flight of first years causes -500 points to TWO houses two years in a row.
| X-elemental chapter 4 . 8/23/2013
This just begs the scene where Lavender drags Hermione to ask ...That Angline's friend, whatever her name was, to tell her secrets of wooing Fred.
| X-elemental chapter 1 . 8/23/2013
I do like this concept, even if I understand well why it isn't used more.