|Reviews for Rejected|
| none chapter 1 . 10/21/2012
| screak chapter 1 . 6/4/2012
I like the way you've started this story. I don't know how you want to do this, but I suggest that you add detail. What does the room look like? What are they wearing? Is it spring? Are the birds singing? What kind of piano does Schroeder play, the toy? A real one? If you look, listen, smell and taste the scene, you can describe it, and the story becomes more vivid. Keep going, it's good!
| supersexyghotmew95 chapter 1 . 5/19/2012
BOY IS SCHROEDER STUPID IS CRAZY LOVE IT LOVE YOU GIRL