ugh, really, is this going to be an anime where the mc is a child and chokes over the simplest emotions? hi im arry potter moody angsty teen supreme. i am super emo and drain my magic do i have purple bags under my eyes its easier than eye shadow. im also incapable of doing anything but mumbling like a moron when confronted with my own idiocy. do i have a real brain? who knows

what a bumblebee that actually tries to give harry some proper training and support? what is this? haha thanks for that take, bid bad ole evil bumblebee is a bit tired. that said your writing is a bit rough. a couple issues of tense, most your prose is past tense, sometimes you slip into present.

Lol dude have you never been elbowed by a girl before? You act like they are putting all their weight into it, it's more like a love tap, hardly hurts, stop being such sensitive little flower.

The guy under me is an incel

now fleur is elbowing him enough to make him cringe in pain. so she is training him like a dog with pain if he says the wrong thing... gross. (p.s. not the proper way to train a dog)
he is prob gonna end up her slave by the end of this so was good, but I'm out.
p.s. the woman scary trope is far more fun to write than read, having the women enjoy the fear makes it 10x worse.

wow it was implied that serious got his privates cut off and harry and wolfie laughed... wtf -50 dkp

You're not sorry, you're just a brain dead monkey too stupid to wipe his own nose, let alone finish a story. Hope you life sucks, liar.

Ron is easily the worst character in the entire Potterverse. Sad that they killed Fred off instead of him AND he got Hermione who he never deserved.

I'm enjoying the story... but I hate mysteries... I want to stop reading because of the whole 'neckless' bit... gods teeth... I really hate not knowing...

That's a horrible idea for an ending my brother

What a dogshit time and place to propose

Dear Author, the story is very cool, or rather how it began. The couple Harry and Fleur are just amazing. Everything went according to the canon while adding something completely new. The minus in your story, as for me, is the break in Harry's relationship with his friends with Ron and Hermione. The second mistake is to say that after the Triwizard tournament, some kind of soap opera began. I love Harry's romantic moments with Fleur, but it still wasn't the same. Harry should have been feeling the pressure of having Voldemort back, but it was all taken away as if it wasn't important, and so much more. If you intend to rewrite this story and make it better, pay attention to these details.

you know i never got why harry would laugh about mr. weasley blowing up his living room. vernon would just take it out on him next summer

Rereading this from a req by another author reminding me of it. I forgot this author’s absolute obsession with Harry’s ponytail. The second time through, knowing how much they go on about it, it’s like a running gag. I’m my own mind, I pretend no one likes and they’re all teasing him without Harry getting the joke.

I must say this summer arc is getting a bit too long-winded.

I honestly was just waiting for them to screw each other because this is just ridiculous. The author was dragging it on and on and on... by the time it happened, I didn't even really care. The whole act was just a footnote and I am happy I got through it. I think the author really missed the good timing for it long ago by drawing it out so much.

I also find myself scrolling down, not really caring about what's going on. Most of it is pretty much irrelevant to the story and just fills the word count anyway.

The author is most likely trying to go for 'romantic' but for me, it just all falls kinda flat. Kinda meh.

Other than that, it is good. Not great. Just okay. I don't have much to complain about. There is nothing that would make me stop and be like: 'Yeah, I can't get through this. I am dropping the story.'. Most of my irritation comes from little things but every story has some of those.

The take on Three Brothers the author is going for is cool, though.

The problem is how many 'mysteries' are pilled up without really being answered. It's as if the author was throwing unexplainable things at me but not giving me enough hints to properly wonder. It's just frustrating and at some point, I actually stopped caring.

But then again, that's my personal feelings. Someone else might love this story for it. I think it just didn't sit all that well with me.