Rereading this from a req by another author reminding me of it. I forgot this author’s absolute obsession with Harry’s ponytail. The second time through, knowing how much they go on about it, it’s like a running gag. I’m my own mind, I pretend no one likes and they’re all teasing him without Harry getting the joke.

I must say this summer arc is getting a bit too long-winded.

I honestly was just waiting for them to screw each other because this is just ridiculous. The author was dragging it on and on and on... by the time it happened, I didn't even really care. The whole act was just a footnote and I am happy I got through it. I think the author really missed the good timing for it long ago by drawing it out so much.

I also find myself scrolling down, not really caring about what's going on. Most of it is pretty much irrelevant to the story and just fills the word count anyway.

The author is most likely trying to go for 'romantic' but for me, it just all falls kinda flat. Kinda meh.

Other than that, it is good. Not great. Just okay. I don't have much to complain about. There is nothing that would make me stop and be like: 'Yeah, I can't get through this. I am dropping the story.'. Most of my irritation comes from little things but every story has some of those.

The take on Three Brothers the author is going for is cool, though.

The problem is how many 'mysteries' are pilled up without really being answered. It's as if the author was throwing unexplainable things at me but not giving me enough hints to properly wonder. It's just frustrating and at some point, I actually stopped caring.

But then again, that's my personal feelings. Someone else might love this story for it. I think it just didn't sit all that well with me.

Oh! Of course, the author needs to throw some useless drama about Harry (being the monumental idiot and waste of magic that he is) trying to leave Fleur because Voldemort knows about her.

Like... it's not like he would come after her anyway, riiiiiiiiiight? Leaving her would TOTALLY fix everything! Voldemort would definitely forget about her once Harry leaves her!

Like... use a shred of common sense? A sprinkle of freaking logic?

That scene is such time-wasting BS and only shows the MC truly is JUST THAT STUPID.

Sorry, author, but I have no freaking idea why you would even need to put that scene in. Only an utter retard would think this way. You don't protect people by keeping them weak. You don't protect people that are already targeted by abandoning them.

Oh. My. God. This is just monumentally stupid.

The idiot MC even had a BONAFIDE VISION that told him EXACTLY HOW Voldemort would try to get him. He KNEW that Greyback would attack.

But when he hears a faint growl in the maze and feels somebody watching him, it DOES NOT make him realize what's going on? Like... really?

Also, Potter is like: I don't want the cup!

But he doesn't just... resign?

WHY?

Everybody told him not to risk because there was somebody trying to kill him. Both previous tasks had 'accidents'. And now, there is a way to painlessly resign from the task and the MC just doesn't take it once Fleur is safe?

As I said in my previous review, this author is building his plot on MC's stupidity.

I would totally not complain if Harry DID NOT GET A VISION TELLING HIM WHAT AND WHEN WOULD HAPPEN!

And the MF just ignored it. Ughhh...

Once the vision happened, the plot should have been adjusted accordingly. The MC SHOULD HAVE NOT DISREGARDED IT.

Oh! And of COURSE! The second Voldemort evaded Harry's spell and it killed a Death Eater, HE TOTALLY STOPPED. He did not use Voldemort's distraction. No, why would the honorable idiot do that? Why would he fight for his life with all he got? The author would not make Harry do that. Pfft. Of course, Potter has to stop and wait for Voldemort to start paying attention to him again.

It literally can't get dumber. And I am fed up with stories doing this same shit again and again. They ALWAYS make Potter freeze despite the fact he had killed way before this.

And don't let me even start about Potter using freaking stunners in life-and-death situations. The bitch-boy can't even man up enough to fire adult spells. It's so pathetic. What was all the talk he got from Sirius for? All the drivel about fighting back properly? Only for MC to use stunners because the Death Eaters OBVIOUSLY deserve a second chance, right? Only Voldemort is irredeemable and deserves lethal spells, right?

So stupid. The last attack Potter threw at the Death Eaters should have been lethal. Because the stunner just painted him as a naive idiot.

But, at least I have to commend the author for trying to make this scene unique. The scene would totally make sense and would be perfect. If Harry didn't get the vision about how Voldemort was going to get him and promptly disregarded it. It was well done, ... I guess. I really can't judge it properly because I am simply too fed up with Harry always losing here. It is always the same. In almost every story. No matter how OP he gets, no matter how many in-the-face clues he gets, no matter how much training he gets, the MC ALWAYS disregards everything and forgets his training/powers just so that Voldemort can be resurrected.

Sigh.

Honestly? This story is extremely well-written.

But on the other hand, it is getting ridiculously stupid how this author pushes his plot forward.

The whole premise is built on the fact that the MC is a hopeless retarded idiot with all the luck and no brain.

Examples:

Harry knows that something is strange about Moody. He even smelled the polyjuice and thought the smell was familiar. He even found Moody's tongue tick suspicious. But does he investigate it? Like... every year, the Defense teacher tries to kill him (even Lupin did!). Now he sees the newest DADA teacher acting weird and he just decides to ignore it? There should be a limit to stupidity...

He gets visions but ignores them.

He feels that something is wrong with his body on the day of the task but does he go and check with Poppy? Nope, he decides to just ignore it.

There are more irritating instances like this. The Mc is simply not using his brain. At all. He gets all the clues but they are always ignored for the sake of the plot. It's infuriating.

“No one apart from Harry or Voldemort himself can touch it [the Prophecy], but that is only something we both know." I think Dumbledore, as the one to whom the Prophecy was given, can also touch it, since his name is also on it.

Poor Sirius! Dumbledore inviting anyone he pleases to MY house WITHOUT MY PERMISSION would send me ‘round the bend. I’m sorry, but he should have taken them to Hogwarts. How much of that castle is completely unused? I’ll bet the Weasleys and several others could live there without anyone noticing. Forcing the Weasleys on Sirius goes beyond the pale.

Someone came unglued over “peeps”? Has its meaning changed in recent years? For years, it has meant friends, associates, teammates, etc. It also means similar to the verb “peeks,” as in “peeps through the gap in the curtains.”

Peeps are also the name of sugar-coated marshmallow candy shaped like baby chicks, ghosts, bunnies, etc. I suppose there are other uses of the word, if one cares to research them. Sorry you were given grief over that.

Now … what was Ginny thinking? There should be some sort of serious legal ramifications for what she did. Technically, it seems Harry and Fleur are married. Detention doesn’t seem strong enough for me. She could have killed Harry.

Of course, the British Ministry probably doesn’t recognize anything to do with Veela. I think Harry needs to get outta Dodge, so to speak. Trying to keep him at Hogwarts, where he is both pining away for Fleur AND in danger from Ginny (and others like her), isn’t going to help him defeat Voldemort. Dumbo needs to use his brain.

I’m curious … If Harry has passed his OWLs, can’t he leave Hogwarts? Why can’t he do his NEWT classes at Beauxbatons? He now speaks French, and he and Fleur are fully bonded. So what is the problem? Aren’t they supposed to be together anyway? He needs to get that citizenship!

Maybe if Harry doesn’t return to Hogwarts, Umbridge won’t go there, either. She is going, after all, to make his life a living Hell, right? If he’s not there, she’s not needed! JM2K!

Granger bashing? I guess I wasn’t paying attention, because I didn’t see any Granger bashing. I did get the idea that Hermione wanted to talk AT (she isn’t always one for talking WITH) Harry, but she was not really comfortable approaching him.

I think perhaps Hermione has thought of Harry and Fleur as boyfriend and girlfriend up to this point; but the two she sees now are infinitely more than that. I don’t think she really knows what to make of them. I think she may be embarrassed by the depth of the love they feel for each other. Perhaps she is sad, knowing she will never have this for herself? I don’t really know. Hermione hasn’t really occupied much space in Harry’s thoughts over the past year.

Harry’s Patronus has changed! At first I thought it was going to be Prongs with wings, or perhaps a Pegasus. I was quite surprised that it was Fleur. Of course, I shouldn’t be, because he seems to consider her a protector, and isn’t a Patronus a protector? Interesting that the professor seems to think it is an angel … a GUARDIAN ANGEL?

“The best [Veela] could usually hope for was to find someone that treated them with respect…at least most of the time…and in return serve his needs and provide him with a family. They could never be truly happy.” That sounds quite different to most Veela stories I’ve read. Fleur’s parents have seemed very much in love in most stories in I’ve read. Ditto the Harry/Gabrielle stories.

I wouldn’t worry about the lack of R-rated scenes. Most people can fill in the blanks if you point them in the general direction of what is happening. Better that than not writing at all, because you don’t feel comfortable writing a particular scene. You could get a ghost (or guest) writer to do this for you. (Old-crow had a couple of writers do a few different scenes for him in his “Great Wandout” story. He gives them credit at the bottom of the chapters.) If you go through the story and look at the ANs at the bottom, you can find them.

I have a hard time understanding why Sirius is amused by things that either cause Harry pain or compromise his and Fleur’s private business and possible safety. I’ve long known that Tonks enjoys making people uncomfortable. She and Fleur’s friend Aurelie are two peas in a pod, IMO.

The white wood in Harry’s wand — is it connected to that white tree he keeps dreaming (or is it hallucinating or having a vision) about? Should he have talked about it to the others?

If I were Sirius, I think I would prepare a few port keys to keep in my pocket that are “one-way tickets” going right through the GP wards directly into the kitchen of the Burrow. Every time Molly starts winding up for a tantrum, I would slap one of the Portkeys on her and enjoy a few days of Molly-free bliss. Don’t let her back in for 2-3 days, and escalate the number of days each time there is a repeat performance. Just my 2 Knuts!

I wouldn’t call what you did with Mrs. Weasley “bashing.” You presented her in a way that was quite well supported by canon. She treated Fleur in an appallingly rude manner in the books, and her attitude there shone through quite clearly in this scene.

Harry’s response was quite controlled, I thought, given the provocation. I think he was perfectly entitled to rebuke Molly for the “what would your parents think” admonition, since she truly WOULDN’T know what they would think. As a Muggleborn, Lily would surely have lacked the bigotry that fueled Molly’s attitudes. My guess is that she has been imbibing Rita Skeeter’s toxic reporting. We already know that Molly’s judgment is sorely lacking when it comes to tabloid trash, having seen evidence of it in GoF. I say Bravo! to Harry for standing up to Molly and defending Fleur.

I’m glad Remus was standing by for back-up, too. Harry doesn’t usually have such good luck. I’m surprised Bill or Charlie didn’t keep Molly quiet on the subject of Fleur, as upsetting Harry just before such a dangerous task shows how colossally stupid and self-absorbed she is. I think she has burned her last bridge there.

"I'm glad that Madame didn't let Pauline come to represent us, things would really have gone downhill then." Pauline was a curly brown haired girl who was very competitive. She was often referred to as the bookworm of Beauxbatons and it was known throughout the school that she hated both Fleur and Caroline with passion, declaring that both of them were only good in their studies because they charmed the teachers with their looks. **** Pauline sounds suspiciously like Hermione in looks and passion for reading. I hope Hermione doesn’t treat Fleur the way Pauline does.

Interesting … Hermione doesn’t like that Harry is giving her a real challenge in their classes. Hey! Isn’t she the one who is always nagging him to study? Just asking … *smirk* I guess she wants him to do well … just NOT as well as or better than she does.

“Ron too was getting irritated with the way things were going, especially since he no longer could rely on Hermione for help since she was so intent on beating Harry. … it wasn't hard to see that he resented the way Harry was changing.” I think Ron has previously done about as well as Harry (though this was possibly by holding Harry back through goofing off and wasting time). Is Ron afraid that he will now be expected to do as well as Harry … which means A LOT MORE WORK? Just speculating.

Dumbledore: “There is still a lot more I haven't told you Harry, I wanted you to grow up and have a happy life …” Is Dumbledore really such a fool that he truly believed Harry could have anything like a happy life at the hands of the abusive Dursleys? If so, he needs to be locked up. (I definitely consider Dumbo an accomplice to Harry’s abuse.)

Considering the injuries Harry sustained around his ribs at the QWC, I think that if Hermione jabs him in the ribs, he should jab her right back! She really has serious boundary issues.

The Beauxbatons girls seem friendlier in your incarnation than they generally do. I’m not sure about the red-haired friend of Fleur’s. I’m curious to see what Hermione has to say about Harry/Fleur.

Harry seems to have gotten Madam Maxine’s seal of approval. I wonder if the Delacours have enlightened her about Harry/Fleur. I’m also curious about the necklace. There seems to be more to it than just a simple gift.

“AN: I only realized when I was writing this that I don't like Ron at all lol.” Don’t worry about it. I’m not a big Ron fan, either. Since the age line is back — it was missing in a story I read earlier this week — I won’t be surprised to see a reappearance of jealous, greedy, insulting, unpleasant Ron, if Harry’s name comes out of the Goblet.

I hope Fleur continues to like Harry. He will need something to keep his morale from flagging. Then again, if SHE is a champion, Harry’s name coming out of the Goblet could undermine that relationship.

At least Sirius and Remus will be here for Harry.

Why did Ginny think it was okay to get into Harry’s things? I know “fanon Ron” is usually very free about going through Harry’s trunk. He feels quite entitled, in some stories, to take the Marauders Map, Harry’s Invisibility Cloak, and even money he finds in the trunk. Even Hermione, in a few stories, has “borrowed” (without asking) the Cloak and Map. Why do they feel entitled to do this?

I will admit that in more recent stories, Harry tends to keep the Cloak and Map on him, so R&H can’t get their hands on it. These tend to be the stories in which Dumbledore uses Ron and Hermione to “control” Harry.

I’m curious to see what Dumbledore does when he finds out about Fleur. I can’t imagine he will approve. JMHO.