|Reviews for Hermione Granger and the Prince of Serpents|
| Anonymous chapter 5 . 3/12
I think the dialogue is very stilted. I hope it's merely inexperience for this chapter, but it felt very unnatural - as if the characters were reciting lines in a particularly bombastic play.
For instance, when Hermione was complaining at the end, listing off the various things that could be done, it would have felt more natural for her to say the snake was very dangerous, and focus more on Malfoy antagonizing him instead of on what the snake could do to Malfoy.
I hope you improve as time goes on. It might help to talk the dialogue out with someone else, if they are available.
| Lunaris-wind chapter 33 . 3/10
On the one hand, I really like your Bellatrix and find your Tom to be interesting. On the other, I have no desire to see Hermione go 'dark,' so to speak. The big reveal of course is Harry. I canmt wait for him to become human again. If nothing else, I imagine Hermione's reaction will be priceless.
| newerher3 chapter 33 . 3/8
Loved it, read the whoule thing in two days ;3
| Kurai Ummei chapter 9 . 3/7
The grammar and continuity is way too off for me to really get into this story, but the premise is fantastic!
| Guest chapter 4 . 3/6
Do you realize that a galeon is worth A LOT. At the train Harry bought some serious amount of candy and didn't even pay a galeon.
| XxDyiashiaxX chapter 33 . 2/22
please continue this
| Silber D. Wolf chapter 33 . 2/21
awesome story, I hope that you update soon
| master1527 chapter 33 . 2/20
good work but please post next chapter
| Smithback chapter 33 . 2/12
I lost track of this story... I lost it at chapter 27, and sudenly... I saw it...
uff up to chapter 33 ...
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/6
I love love *love* the idea of Hermione Granger teaching a snake addition! I mean, she totally would. :D
| steampvnc1880 chapter 14 . 2/1
I hope you don't de-villanize voldemort. I fear a draco in leather pants (to cite that TV tropes website), and if he's no longer the puppy kicking bad guy of the story then who takes the antagonists' seat? If he's just being manipulative then OK but... well its not my place to say what should be. I'll just wait and see how it goes.
| Honest Lunar Raven chapter 27 . 1/10
Ive seen a scant few fics with a real Ginnymort, but I really want to see how you go about this...
Occlemancer or not, changing gender and redoing puberty has to affect Something...
| Honest Lunar Raven chapter 6 . 1/10
For some completely inexplicable reason, I just got the amusing image of Harry swallowing the Philosopher's stone right before Volde can get it...
The heck would THAT do to him I wonder though?
| LittleMissLynx chapter 33 . 1/9
Holy crap. This. Is. AWESOME! Please update. Please? Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease? High five! Bye!
| Matt chapter 23 . 1/5
Till now i liked your story very much but this ends my interest.
You wrote a winged basilik CANNOT petrify permanently and as such the petrification of three students by a real basilisk is UNDINIABLE proof of her innocence.
Therefore you destroyed you own story. The whole plot just combusted.