Reviews for Behind The Bars
heidi.mobius.1971 chapter 1 . 3/20
I'm disappointed in what seems to be an intro with little explanation and a sudden ending that left me wondering what was the direction the tale was meant to take. No character development, no build up of suspense, or anything. Is there any more to this story?
I wrote a 'part two' to add depth and a meaning to what you begun. I'd like to read your conclusion to this tale.
Oro chapter 1 . 4/8/2013
And what did MARILYN do to deserve to be locked up? Couldn't you have written it as Marilyn simply visiting Lily in prison and having to hear Lily's pity party?
Anon chapter 1 . 11/11/2012
Huh?
wiccawhitewitchsmalltownguy chapter 1 . 10/26/2012
not very bad story is this chapter going too be update any time soon when the next chapter gonna be out because i wonder what lilly and maylin is going too do too granpa and herman by haveing them in jail
Banapple Gas chapter 1 . 8/29/2012
Great! Time Lily and Marilyn get what they deserve! Maybe you can make a prequel before they went jail, OK?