|Reviews for Alternate Ending to Ender's Game|
| Haibara Ai z chapter 4 . 8/26/2013
And what the previous reviewer said about the plot holes :P
| Haibara Ai z chapter 5 . 8/26/2013
The pacing is good but you left out a lot. Like what happened to Peter's plan to introduce himself as Ender's brother? That's the part I was looking forward to :P And Valentine revealing her identity. They're rather out of character and there's a lot of things I would add.
Raven's a cool name though :D
| Artomovski chapter 5 . 8/9/2013
the style is ok (although at places a little too easy), but there are many plot errors:
- why would Graff think that Ender would be happy to see his siblings - he hated Peter and although he oved valentine, he would never be really "happy" to see her since he still thought she was IFs tool
- Stilson died - Ender killed him at school
- Ender would come home as a hero - everyone would respect him. He would have security due to possible kidnapping or assassination attempts
- Peter would definitely try to contact him and get him on his side
Also, your Ender is very talkative - by the time all was done, Ender was so closed in that he wouldt give anyone almost any information
I can think of many more criticisms, but overall it was a nice try.
| Travis Negrete chapter 5 . 5/17/2013
good luck ender
| Travis Negrete chapter 2 . 5/17/2013
constructive criticism: watch the "come on"s graff doesnt say it that many times
| Maralue chapter 5 . 5/12/2013
And yes, like another reviewer stated, Stilson was killed. He was the first person Ender murdered. In self defense but still, killed.
The first few times I read the book I missed that, too.
| Maralue chapter 5 . 5/12/2013
I want to like this. I really do. But I just can't get into the plot here. In the books, Ender is sent off to a colony. In your story, Ender is sent off to a colony.
Hmmm... I'm not sensing much of an alternate ending, just the insertion of a Mary Sue.
| Maralue chapter 4 . 5/12/2013
This doesn't make any sense. They'd promote smart kids. Not flunk them out.
| Schizoid7Loner chapter 5 . 9/14/2012
Nice, there are a couple of wrong facts here though. Like when you included Stilson (he's dead actualy, Ender did that.) But this story is good enough that I can ignore it.
Hope to see an update soon.
| SirPancake chapter 5 . 8/3/2012
It was okay. But I wouldn't think Stilson would even want to approach Ender since Ender almost killed him in th every beggining of the book. Other then that it was good.
| neverland 45 chapter 5 . 7/28/2012
i still cant wait for an update! this is so aaaaaawwwweeeeessssssooommmee! (it says awesome incase i spelled it wrong)
| grossasstoenails chapter 4 . 7/25/2012
I agree with "Guest"
| Guest chapter 4 . 6/28/2012
Ender killed Stilson. We are told this in a conversation between Graff and Anderson. Also, your writing style is not nearly as intellectual as that of Cards, and you fail to capture the personality of any of the characters.
| PROXY.X2X chapter 5 . 6/21/2012
Love it! Cant wait to see more!
| PROXY.X2X chapter 2 . 5/28/2012
ignore my review from earlier! its 3;00 in the morning and i forgot to click on the chapter button, silly me!