|Reviews for Sacrafice A BlancheRoseDorothy Friendship story|
| Yo chapter 1 . 2/10/2013
there is a plot here, which is great. But you lack details.
for ex, the first line:
Rose came in and slammed the door. She began frantically looking under the couch and behind the table and in every place she could think of.
"Problem Rose," Dorothy asked
What was Dorothy doing before/while she asked Rose the question. Where did Rose come from? The bedroom? The kitchen?
Just a few details can help the story go a long way.
Dorothy sat on the couch, her nose and mind lost in yet another book. This is how she plans to spend the next few days until she was called in for work. Blanche on the other hand was using her free time, during the hot mid-afternoon, looking over her address book. So many man, so little time.
The sound of keys and the front door being unlocked geared the women's attention.
Rose came in and slammed the door. She began frantically looking under the couch...
And so on and so on...hope this review helps!
| Ergh chapter 1 . 5/31/2012
Yeah, I could see Blanche doing that to Rose and nice touch that Dorothy was the one willing to help Blanche even though she DID rightly point out what an awful thing Blanche had done to Rose. A sort of the "Gift of the Maji" deal. I also liked that Sophia actually genuinely consoled Rose rather than just being needlessly mean to her. A good story.
No, your review is FAR more stupid than this story.
| luckyxlabradoodlexloverx7 chapter 1 . 5/23/2012
| scarlett chapter 1 . 5/23/2012
that is the stupidest thing i have ever read!