|Reviews for zuris first life|
| ScarletPuppy83 chapter 1 . 10/30/2014
Everything is poorly written.
| Purple Majestic chapter 2 . 6/29/2012
| Brooke chapter 1 . 5/27/2012
I love the idea, I really do. But there are so many errors that your messsage is lost! For example,
zuri sweatie she asked
yes um excuse me i never got your name i answeared in return
That should be:
"Zuri, sweetie," she asked.
"Yes? Um, excuse me, I never got your name," I answered [OR] I said in return.
Again, the idea is there, but you seem to have a hard time conveying it. Hope this helps!