Reviews for The Straightest Path
sailath chapter 1 . 1/27/2014
I love it. Thank you very much¡
Caleigho chapter 1 . 11/20/2013
great story.
traveller19 chapter 1 . 5/31/2013
Oh my gosh, the internal agony. This is *beautiful*. I love the way the story jumps around chronologically. It makes you think for a moment that the last section does occur last, until you realize that it doesn't and the story actually ends with Loki being broken rather than happy. I loved Thor's anger and pain on behalf of his brother, and Loki's characteristic sensitivity. Well done!

-Traveller
OfTheFullMoon chapter 1 . 4/9/2013
Lovely story! Very touching and well-written. :)
gpcat chapter 1 . 3/6/2013
Odin is such a jerk in this fic... but I liked it anyway.
Guest chapter 1 . 3/1/2013
Amazingly written...!
Thank you so much!
grossasstoenails chapter 1 . 3/1/2013
Heartbreaking. I love it.
Lorien Urbani chapter 1 . 1/19/2013
This is a wonderful piece, written with great and poetic skill. I love your use of unconventional - mixed - chronological order, jumping between the past and the present without a set pattern. It can be dangerous to play with this type of writing, but obviously you're a skilled writer and it really, truly worked for the story. I think it heightened the intensity of the emotions within this chapter, making the final hope of Loki and Thor really heart-breaking.

You really captured the family dynamics with this story, and I just love how you handled the two brothers. It is nice to read about a time when they still stood on the same side; when they still supported and loved each other without anything getting in the way. It is sad how magic is not appreciated by anyone else but Thor; no one seems to see Loki's qualities, not even Odin himself. You definitely know how to play at a reader's heart-strings, and that is a compliment because I love to feel when I read.

Wonderful job!
luckymasie chapter 1 . 12/9/2012
Awww :3
This is absolutely adorable, and wonderfully written.
angrbodagiantess chapter 1 . 11/28/2012
Magnificent, awesome, beautiful, wonderful, heartbreaking, *sigh*... gah! I don't even know what to say! And the non-linear nature of the story brings so much out of it; there's really no other way to read this story. Truly wonderful.
helenxxx chapter 1 . 10/26/2012
I appreciate your story, it feels like an Aesir Kobayashi Maru which Loki rightly defeated - I feel like there's a scene missing in which Odin acknowledges to Frigga, not that he isn't proud of Loki but that he fears he doesn't know how to teach him to prepare for failure, because between them Thor & Loki have always overcome their obstacles. Beautifully written, thank you, helenxxx
wbss21 chapter 1 . 10/21/2012
Um, WOW. This was unbelievably good. Just damn, absolutely stunning, amazing writing, amazing story, amazing characterization, and study of these characters, and the nature and dynamic of Loki's and Thor's relationship, and the relationship to Odin. I'm seriously speechless here, so just give me a moment to gather my thoughts.

First of all, the premise you came up with to demonstrate to the reader the differences between Loki and Thor, and Loki and the rest of Asgard, and how those differences led into discrimination and inequality between them, was absolutely brilliant. It was just... it was perfect, and threw into such stark relief the absolute tragedy of Loki's situation.

Second of all, I just adored the format you chose to present the story in, weaving in and out between the past, interchanging it with the present, and it was a stroke of genius to open the story with Loki's triumph, with him retrieving the amulet and then showing the reactions of Sif and the Warriors and the gathering crowd, how it all began to unwind from that point. And what really stood out here too was, when Sif spits in Loki's face, this ultimate sign of disrespect, of course you know it has to hurt Loki, but his reaction, or rather lack of reaction, is perfect. He's used to the others ridicule, even grown apathetic towards it, or at least trained himself to appear apathetic, but then as the story progresses, you show that non-reaction in contrast with his reaction to Odin's disapproval, how devastated Loki is by it, and it just tears your heart apart. It's so damn sad, how much Loki wants Odin's approval and love, how hard he tries for it, how if only he could get it, all the other slights and all of the bullying and taunts from others could be handled.

But of course, he doesn't get it, and it's just utterly tragic.

What I really loved here too was the relationship between Thor and Loki, how Thor is essentially Loki's only supporter and protector. Everyone else is more than quick to dismiss Loki, and make fun of him, and show open contempt for him and the way he works, and you realize of course, Thor is stuck in a very real predicament, because while obviously Sif and the Warrior Three are loyal to Thor, they aren't even close to Loki, and Thor feels loyalty towards Loki, but also towards his friends. And it must be so hard for Thor to have to see them treat Loki like so much dirt, and not be able to really do anything about it without alienating them in the process. It's just a terrible thing.

And Jesus, the scene when Thor finally goes to Loki, and finds him in his room, his eyes wet with tears, even hours following Odin's rejection, that just tore me apart man. Thor is just incredibly sweet here, and Loki's pain is palpable, and it's just awful, because you realize the only thing that's ever going to make it better, no matter how kind Thor is to Loki, is Odin being kind too. But Odin just has to be the worlds worst father, so openly rejecting what Loki is. And you bring Loki's heartbreak over it to life in such an incredible, tangible way, that it's actually difficult to read.

The whole scene before Odin, when Loki presents the amulet and has so much HOPE in him that, just this once, he'll have made Odin proud, and the slow deflation of that hope, eventually crumpling into despair when he realizes Odin is anything but, man, I don't even know what to say but that it nearly made ME cry. It's just so messed up.

And the scene before the last, with Thor watching Loki sleep, and reflecting on how lonely Loki must be, and how he's forced himself into rarely if ever showing it, into appearing as though he wants and seeks solitude and cares not if he has friends or not, and then Thor remembers, in the hours before that moment, how Loki had finally just let go and cried helplessly over his father's rejection, my God, first of all, that writing was phenomenally gorgeous, and I swear, you just tore my heart out of my chest and stomped on it with your heel. You captured in such eloquence Loki's desolation and emotional despair in a way I've rarely seen accomplished in writing, and it was just simply, incredibly powerful.

And then to loop it all back around, to the moments before they go to Odin, before any of this, and you show this side of Loki which none of the other see, which none of the others are aware of but Thor, this kindness in Loki, and generosity, thinking nothing of giving Thor the amulet, and you realize, it's because also the only thing Loki wants, the only thing he seeks, is Odin's approval and love. And my God, I know I keep saying it breaks my heart, but it broke my heart when Thor tells Loki Odin will be proud, and the way you describe how Loki's eyes just filled up with this giddy hope and excitement and happiness, the way he really BELIEVES it, God... and knowing what's coming, it's just a punch to the gut, and so heavy and tragic and woeful. I don't even have the words to describe.

Needless to say, you've created an amazing piece of work here, and I thank you sincerely for sharing it with us.
ArrancarRayflo chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
I really loved the fic, the arrangement I loved as well:D. Loki is a genius, who is not appreaciated for who he is. Just because he didn't break the door down, sigh. Please write more this was awesome:D.:)
Demeter1 chapter 1 . 8/29/2012
This is so sorrowful and full of adventure and grief and I love the nonlinear narrative, where we know the ending of this story before Loki and Thor do. It flavors the last paragraph, something that is full of pride and cheer, and you can see that this is where the road will truly fork. I think I read this on AO3 first? I'm reading it again and I still love it, because it really hammers (huh, excuse the pun!) the way Asgard looks at something and the way Loki looks at something. In the end, I wonder if Odin feels regret and realizes that he should have spared some praise, some morsel of pride.
Lady Charity chapter 1 . 7/9/2012
I really find it interesting how you start the story in media res and then take an unconventional chronological order to tell the story. In fact, the effect is a lot better that way. I love (and hate, because man that's so sad) how you end it with Loki and Thor being so hopeful that Odin would be proud of Loki, but we as readers already know that it did not end up that way. I really like this story, and the way you wrote it. So good!
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