|Reviews for Cherryl Elisabeth|
| Magna chapter 1 . 5/26/2012
hello there. I have read your story and I'd like to give some comments.
I have to say that your story's pace is too fast, skipping some details that perhaps useful for the reader.
Then, why don't you make chapters for your story? It would be better that way, rather than stacking many ideas on one-shot. Example: chapter 1 explains about Sparda's story, chapter 2 about Dante & Vergil story. By splitting into chapters, you can put more focus and details, which would make your story more interesting.
That's all from me. Sorry if I said somethimg wrong.
Keep on writing!