|Reviews for Against History|
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/25/2013
I really do wish we didn't drop those bombs on them...
| mimi-chan and aliling-chan chapter 1 . 12/21/2012
The scene where Arthur was remembering the past until that line "it was so warm" it was magnificent, it goes well, very well with the song 'Sakura Biyori' by Hoshimura Mai. A bleach ending theme. The music goes very well and the scenes played in my head like a movie. Great job!
| OldMustache chapter 1 . 12/20/2012
OMG THIS IS SO SAD AND SWEET ;;
| ivyterasu chapter 1 . 7/21/2012
so beautifuuuuuul! ;u; i really love it! so sad but still cute! QuQ
nooooo i love loooong fanfics! with a lot of story ;3
hope to read more from you OwO
| Saelleja chapter 1 . 7/9/2012
Author, I am your fan... You are so amazing! Oh I am really impressed with your job and I can't believe that you aren't a native of English. Anyway I respect people who can express their thoughts in another language. How do you do it? Oh you are really amazing:-)
So I will wait your another story!
| Lacie48 chapter 1 . 6/17/2012
This was rather nice for your first story. Your story progressed a little fast. And the emotion of your characters aren't deep enough to the reader feel the same at the characters. And you should use different referred for your characters. Example: You can referred England at the sandy hair nation, or the green eye nation,... Anyway, good luck with your entrance test, mon chere
| gay-nations chapter 1 . 6/10/2012
Very nice. I will look forward to reading more of your stories c:
| Karashiae chapter 1 . 6/5/2012
It's been a long time since the last time I read something this long XD
You did a fairly good job, in fact, I never expect a first-attempt fic to be this good. Really, now that you got me reminiscing about my first days writing, I feel so embarrassed XD. Good plot, eh, the characters are well-kept in frames - not much OOCness that is. You did good in including all the prominent characteristics of this pairing, and you revived my love for them somehow XD. Given that English is your second language, you were excellent in linguistic skills. The dramatic impact contributes a lot to the romantic/tragic theme, which is a pride-worthy achievement.
Still, might I be bold, I would like to leave some tips that I myself consider to be helpful. I think that if you can reduce some details or events, and expand the rest, your story will have more weight. To explore characters' emotional state, you need not necessarily speak out their mind to readers, rather, a subtle feeling towards surroundings or a seemingly irrelevant act (for examples) can show a deep struggle in subconsciousness. At first I found your story progressed a bit quickly, but maybe it's just my taste. Your depiction is good, and it will serve you far better in the future once you expand that skill.
Will be looking forward to reading your future fics :".
| Blackqueenwhite chapter 1 . 6/5/2012
TT I nearly cried in this. Beautiful Asakiku, it made me all emotional. Good work, I really, really, loved this.
| Suboi Ari chapter 1 . 5/31/2012
Anyway, It's a good idea and concept and was executed quite well. I have to say that I am quite jealous because this concept was one that I had planned out a heckova long time ago but was too lazy to write XDXD Good Job about that
You have all the bits you thought was important and you did manage to make sure they manage to get each and every scene to fulfill the purpose that it was supposed to, and that is really good. I think all you really need to do to improve in such a case is to learn to further milk the scenes with more emotions instead of talking words. That of course would take skill and experience, something you would learn as you write some more, so you dont have to worry about it. For a first time, this is good, so no problem with it
Of course all I said was in my own opinion so you're free to do what you like with it
| Selinawen chapter 1 . 5/30/2012
Wowww! This is so awesome! And way better than my first Asakiku fanfic in many many ways! *w* It's not lame at all, I actually cried when they broke their alliance :( Good job with this, really
| Stray Flower chapter 1 . 5/30/2012
it's a great one, and i could never EVER write a non-AU fic, i love this
and i hope to see more from you.