Reviews for Naruto of the Six Paths
Guest chapter 3 . 1/7
Story goes too fast for liking..
Your just explaining everything to what it seems yourself rather than telling the story..
And after that is just.. Your changed naruto too fast..
Guest chapter 15 . 12/7/2015
Your story is shit. Also your grammar is shit. You should consider to quit because you're that bad. See ya cunt.
Noctus Of The Thousand Blades chapter 20 . 11/30/2015
well that was a piss off. read this fic for the first time, its getting interesting when WHAM! AN stating the fic is cancelled and adopted. you do realize that adopting a fic NEVER works out right? the author who takes over means well, but even with notes, they have no idea the direction the original author was going in, they have no idea of what events happen in the future, etc. adopted fics make it EXACTLY as far as the first attempt, maybe a chapter or 2 further, before the adopting author ALSO abandons the fic.

my advice? if you are drawing a blank, take a break, and when your ready, go back to the beginning of the fic and read what you wrote, go over your notes, try and recall and thoughts you had about the fics direction. essentially review your work and try to get your mojo back, if you are struggling, muscle through, then when you get back into the flow you can go back and fix any major mistakes you may have made. it also pays to do a rough draft of a chapter first. as in write the chapter, leave it for a couple of days, then go back and read what you wrote and fix anything that stands out.

I know its pretty basic stuff that you probably learned in school, but believe me, it works. it might delay you, but better to be late then to abandon a fic.
Noctus Of The Thousand Blades chapter 11 . 11/30/2015
her actual name is Ajisai not Chikyu. she was an ame Genin during the time between Naruto and Shippuden, she attended the chunin exams in Konoha as a mission to locate anyone with high enough chakra reserve to possibly be a jinchuriki. she later died off screen before becoming Nagato's second animal path. but she died BEFORE Naruto got back from his training trip. so by the actual continuity, you just generated a plot hole because in the actual timeline, she's already dead by this point in the series.
Guest chapter 3 . 11/28/2015
chapters are too short
bob12348626 chapter 14 . 10/27/2015
bob12348626 chapter 7 . 10/27/2015
EnviosSc chapter 1 . 9/28/2015
Enjoyed the story, can't wait to see more of this cool story
trollkingNO.1 chapter 6 . 8/11/2015
im sorry but your writing is to clumped to gether and passiv and not enuf info in to whats happing you have a good premis and good style but to much is happing i dontget like the scroll just appring out of nowhere most go with a vist from the rikudo or his kids or he meets kaguya im just saying you could be alittle more informativ or set it up to explane whats going on trust me you have a good idea i look forward to a re write if not ok.
lalo80 chapter 13 . 6/9/2015
Porfa actualiza pronto, tu historia es genial
GunnerRyuu chapter 20 . 5/18/2015
I just read his first chapter. While his style of writing was ok his version doesn't seem as good as yours was. Just saying dude.
J.A Jasper chapter 7 . 5/17/2015
Okay the story is not flowing smoothly.

The first few chapters were rough, but had a good flow and then we jump to a chapter were you through in a crossover, and insult those that do not follow that series.

Then you have Jiraiya test Naruto for his element, KNOCK KNOCK he has the Rinnegan. He has equal control of all elements. Did you forget your own story?

That point I seriously questioned the story.

Then the next chapter you are jumping around without showing any of the story line up to this point the Rinnegan and Naruto learning the secrets.

Also a magical scroll appears? Really you could not come up with the Kyubbi having knowledge of the Ronnegan, or know where a scroll is hidden?
Guest chapter 1 . 5/17/2015
bash bash bash

oh look at my internet penis
SHADOWNINJAMASTER chapter 19 . 5/17/2015
Is there a link to his story if so can I have it
Guest chapter 2 . 5/17/2015
Git gud, work on your spelling, use commas more often, it's *kekkei, and stop using so many damn "and"s.
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