|Reviews for Shala|
| jim89 chapter 17 . 9/10/2015
Here's my long related review of shala chapter 17 the big ending. If you will
and the exact reason why have dodged us for months. Truth is, I didn't like the chapter when Wade, anything turned out. If you don't want to be angry also put up for you easily good presentation spelling, grammar and formatting are above standard and well done
actual story and was also the conflict
It sucked hard. I wish the writer had the foresight to put AU and MU
that would've fit so much better than from the explanation is when he's writing from
but he didn't so I have to review it as the dark side of common
Now here it goes the review
Here's the thing is actually no betrayal, the big attack was jazz showing up and screaming
If Sam and Tucker have for betrayal, Danny like everyone claimed why aren't they there with jazz. Also, if they side with the guys in white where the hell are they
that one confused teenage girl with the weapon they're fighting they would show up with a small Army division
surrounded Vlad's house and opened fire with a couple hundred tanks
Which means Tucker Sam and jazz haven't sold Danny out. The guys in white
they might be angry Danny but that not his enemy
And now for the elephant in the room that made my case here the one with. This is going to go straight into negative review territory probably be quite frank
What the hell man? Desiree has an obvious gripe against Sam, Tucker and jazz. She's already vindictive bitch and you let the grant a wish from dash. Given what she did to wolf. No one deserves that
Supposedly you left Sam, Tucker and jazz to be sent the equivalent of a ghost concentration camp to be tortured, experimented on and be honest the Sam and jazz to be violated continuously. Okay I'll spell straight out there going to get raped
anyone think the guys in white want to back Sam jazz , it's full of it
And would make this more insulting Sam is Jewish families already gone through the Holocaust once and now you're thinking of going through it again
I don't know what the hell the writer smoking here, but nothing in the story at all
that Sam, Tucker and jazz couldn't ever done deserves that was done to them specially this being done on behalf by dash of all people. Talk about King of hypocrites
And worse. It shows how completely in moral Danny having someone to that fate
like that. Regardless of me feels about them. Humans are ghosts. Rescue them. That's kind of supposedly his core value
Now you know exactly when the writer message me asking why I haven't finished reviewing the chapters. Interesting on what my take would be, he realizes his way out of my usual. So I'm sort of the outside perspective here
To be honest I can come up with any way of telling my responsiveness without going straight for the jugular
So chapter 1 through 10. I recommend this story. But the latter chapters go right off the town, the crazy town
If you want my first gut reaction reading what happened to the other characters here
I was thinking what other load of complete that totally destroyed a good story and its concept with some choice of profanity and anger
So I decided that was unfair the writer as a person who did nothing but be consider and honest. How can I criticize to work and give my honest feedback at the same time not look like I'm trying NOT to insult him. It was quite a conundrum
After seeing in my browser window waiting for review for months. I finally said to hell with it
just drop the review as it is and move on. In a way. Given the writer here my word that I would review. I tend to see it through. For good or bad
Hint, hint. This is bad. Anyone who sincerely thinks Tucker being tortured and killed in the same being done to Sam and jazz the side of gang rape. Were going to a concentration camp. It's completely off their meds . I'm worried about the other reviewers being fine with this
So, I'll leave it at that
Now I mean force use opposite signoff line
we shall (NOT) see
| jim89 chapter 16 . 9/7/2015
Wow first Danny totally turns on jazz and now he's openly plotting to hurt her
he knows that spectra got her claws in her badly. Think of a first plate with Danny
she manipulated the whole entire school or a second why we she manipulated the whole entire town. You really think the ongoing assault, jazz, and stand a chance session she thinks her life is crumbling
As for Sam and Tucker had actually done anything actually although done is listened to jazz and then talk that actually means nothing
Then there's dash being brought into this
Nothing good will come from. From where this is heading
We shall see
| jim89 chapter 15 . 9/7/2015
wolf was under a spell by Desiree that's unique supplies knowing the father that
which fits with Desiree's vindictive side question is was done to him by someone else or by something. He messed up and said
Now as for what he said about the girl in black the board of technology and the growth rate her. That means nothing. Obviously wall thing if Sam, Tucker and jazz. But there are tons of girls in black times boys of technology in times of redheads and the world. Also because of their previous connection to Danny the kind of well-known from the ghost world
I noticed a set up the bases. They see Sam, Tucker and jazz of head against Danny is right now. No offense to wolf. But the same of me walking up to anyone here and say that the writer was being the crap out of children on the street
Danny should consider the circumstances and the source. He also said no. By now that of a lot of people in the ghost zone that would manipulate things shape shifters, mind control experts, etc.
I feel the start of a bad omen coming to pass story wise
We shall see
| Tara.K.Walker chapter 18 . 3/8/2015
I understNd you may never see this review, however, I would very much like to tell you...THIS IS AMAZING! I love this story so very much! I could go on and on about how good it was, and still is... So I will! First off, there are obviously lots of stories with Danny being a girl but you took it to the next level and made it so much more! You didn't just say Danny was a girl you explained how she was a girl but wasn't alowed to be herself. Another thing, all the pairings were amazing! The were very unique and defanently new! I love Vlad's change in heart! And that end? OMG I almost cried! And trust me when I tell you, I do not cry easy! But what I'm trying to say is this story was really brilliant! There were a few tiny problems like spelling and grammar but nothing I found I couldn't make an exception for... I do hope you keep writing! I loved this story and I'm sure many other people did as well! Oh and I'm also sorry for not reviewing every chapter...I'm lazy and I like to keep my comments to myself so as not to ruin the mood! Lol but really, great story!
| KatherineDarkQueenRiddle666 chapter 18 . 12/27/2014
I loved it
| phantom1234 chapter 10 . 7/31/2014
| Guest chapter 10 . 7/26/2014
This is so cute, but soooooo cheesy
| jim89 chapter 14 . 5/6/2014
okay,, you lost me on that one, then he mentioned the be lost, Tucker and Sam. Last we heard from them. They were angry they never told Danny to go away permanently. Unfortunately
Danny never bother talking to them again. Danny Lily gave Sam and Tucker the cold shoulder telling Lancer not even listen to them essentially slandering them. And without any way to talk through their problems of course it will get angrier. And given that Jazz exiled basically no man's land and given that Danny's mom more a mother tto San then her own. She definitely want to help,, or at least give Danny's parents the defense, so not totally railroaded, thanks to Danny's public lynching on TV.
bottom line, to Danny ever once tried talking to Sam, Tucker, since he moved in with Vlad.
We then try to sort things out with jazz. No Danny told him told to go to hell or threatened them.
there. The victims here not Danny here. Danny problems. In a time. We just pulled the truths
most of Danny's problems especially if his parents. He brought on himself.
Danny chose actively she chose to. Any time over the few years that he could've said no
I think from here. I'll take a break from reviewing remaining chapters. I given my word That I would read this whole thing. The way it's going. I know what not to like the way it's going to end
| jim89 chapter 13 . 5/6/2014
what the hell? I think you got totally off the rails here. Okay I do understand Danny has issue with his birth parents. And telling him off was probably right. But to have them arrested and dragged off to jail. And the go so far as making a public lynching. Danny's essentially set up an angry mob
convict his parents. He might as well. So the guillotine in the town square and take them out
I might give this chapter more credit, is actually, charges for Danny's parents. In fact he also for jazz a new one. And you wonder why jazz is I'm the villain, she freaked out. Danny threatened to kill her
now he published embarrassed her and made her a fugitive. Taking away her parents as well
the Danny really expect jazz is only show up and say I hug and be friends. Know she's gonna get a guide by take his ass out. The giver any other option. She'll be sent to prison by the Lynch mob that he just set up.
Is this bad now. I wonder how the remaining chapters ago
| jim89 chapter 12 . 5/6/2014
well the The first, in one single chapter you created shadows hold back story and personality
of more anyone's ever done for that character.
On the other hand eill and ann new tendency to discord and to be sort of self-centered is kind of scary
almost want the old Danny back and Danielle. When the greatest strength they cared about other people and how their actions affected people. in their new sisterly life. They seem to be taking a lot out of Paulina's book how to behave.
It could go either way at this point.
We shall see
| jim89 chapter 11 . 5/6/2014
okay, this chapter was actually well good. I mean last couple chapters seem to be getting on my bad side. Seeing the Queen bee of Casper high gain take down well worth it. Of all the all the people in the story that got a raw deal. She's the first one that deserves it. Unlike jazz, Sam and Tucker. So far
As for DASH being a caring human being. Or at least consider it. Again, this must be bizarro world
were good, evil evil is good.
I'm seriously considering the offer should of put alternative universe. At the top of the story
We shall see
| secretwhovianpony chapter 18 . 4/27/2014
Okay, 1- This was awesome! I do so love a good gender-bender story. 2- That last line. I'm really, really confused. Does this mean that Danny really was a boy at first here? Y'all have seriously thrown me through a loop here. On a side note, I find the positions kind of cool. Especially making Johnny's Shadow be his little brother. And Amorpho actually be a girl. And Wulf be under a spell from Desiree. Those were some really cool twists.
| jim89 chapter 10 . 4/21/2014
what that hell? I mean literally . Jazz is officially gone off the deep end. I don't know who this person is. But is not jazz here.
When the heck she start thinking that her sibling is a test subject. Last I checked jazz fault ethics 101
a number one people are not test subjects, especially your family and your siblings.
She is a shot at a better life then her parents could've given her and to loving sisters. Vlad word
alone and his recommendation could've got into any college or university.
Why on earth someone like her friends list. Spectra. The moment she did her mind got washed and destroyed.
I really hope some way to save, jazz, and all this and bring her back to Danny and Danielle side
We shall see
| jim89 chapter 9 . 4/21/2014
okay, maybe this is a little insanity, speaking, but what the heck happened to jazz, and she had a completely bonhomie or something. Why the heck should be working to psycho shrink ghost.
And be so hung up and keeping Danny acting like a boy and at home. The whole thing seems completely insane.
And if your goal is to get the collegethen we will begin with Vlad and her two sisters actually make it easier. She could write the damn paper on the new family unit. Heck, she could write a paper
on Danny learning his own gender identity. After being forced away by his parents.
Either way, jazz has absolutely nothing to gain from going against them at this time.
On the other hand, the psycho ghost shrink.
Will get to harvest jazz misery. When she realized she'd been played and lost her caring family or
when she messes up Danny's. Either way it's a win-win for spectra. she's is on here not jazz
jazz is her puppet
We shall see
| jim89 chapter 8 . 4/21/2014
Danny and Danielle bonding good, glad acting like a decent human being that is very hard to swallow
ninja monkeys flying on robot pigs would be easier to believe. But I give the writers props for bringing it here
okay, that one drinking the insanity juice or something. Tucker and Sam literally trying out Danny
because of his secret of being a girl. That's makes no sense. Give it everything they've gone through minus Phantom planet. It's hard as hell to believe that when this comes up they would quit.
Yeah were into OOC territory here, I did think of four episodes from the original series alone. That would've been better reason to quit backing Danny. Do it now makes him look borderline schizophrenic
Just say you surprised me here, guess we'll see where things go
We shall see