|Reviews for Fence|
| soybean prophecy chapter 1 . 7/12/2014
I'm definitely a newer fan-I just started reading TCAFS very recently. first, I would like to say that I fell in love with TCAFS. never have I ever thought I would love a story with OCs as much as I loved yours. not a speck of Mary Sue, OOCness, anything that would make me cringe. also-please update? i want to see all the relationships develop :).
secondly, this may be an older story, but I'd like to comment that you are an amazing writer and I really admire the way you incorporate your emotions and experiences into your writing. you imagine a character, a human being, and the development is incredible. I wish I could write half as well as you do.
thirdly- niou(or V, if you will) is something everyone with a uterus and vagina has to deal with in their life. it's hard and I really don't know why they call it a "heart breaking" (when it really feels like a saw is ripping your heart open) but there are more fish in the sea. really. it sounds cliché and like something your mother would say but there's a boy out there that will wake up every morning and say, "hey. I'm a really lucky guy. I hope I don't screw this up," because he really means it. and you'll love him millions more than you ever loved V. he's the oishi to your akane. the echizen to your ryuzaki. haha just kidding. whatever character you find yourself connecting most to, at least :). and although I don't even know you, I don't even know your name or what you look like or who you even are, essentially, I'm always here to talk. I would've loved that when my heart was broken-but it's not exactly easy to have someone willing to listen (who didn't know anybody LOL). psttt-I tried omegle. It's pathetic when you try omegle. chat me up (PM i mean haahhaha) if you ever feel like: "hey what the heck. random reviewer meet-n-greet day" and you're not too busy. I wish you the best of luck and like akane, listen to your own characters' preaching. you're stronger than you think. :)
p.s. please update! I'm dying to know who izumi chooses, TEZUKA AND CHIHARU OMG, don't ever forget my ryosaku, taka and aiko are kinds cute too, oishi and akane are too cute omg, bring a lil yumiko and kai back too, and although I liked kikumaru and sayaka, I'm kinda liking niou too.
(also-I loved jealous Fuji, but I always wanted to see jealous Tezuka! pleaseeeee please please. and if possible, a jealous!ryoma because I always love a little of that.)
you don't have to take any of my requests (even though I would love if you did, a thousand times over). I wish you the best of luck everyday and I hope this review makes you smile even a little! thank you for TCAFS really. good day!
-soybean prophecy :)
| NikkaHi chapter 1 . 2/24/2014
This is beautifully written, and frighteningly accurate to how I perceive Niou's character...
| sushixxx17 chapter 1 . 11/17/2013
| SugarTensai chapter 1 . 9/18/2013
Its so, SO sad. I feel sorry for the girl. I kind of hate Niou. But you captured everything perfectly. Don't worry about some stupid guy. Your fans are here. We love you.
| Monkeyheart chapter 1 . 7/1/2013
I read this piece a while ago. But it didn't resonate with me. Until I got my heart played with. I can understand you completely. It hurts to be with him, but it also hurts not being with him. So where does that leave you? How do you get over him when you already know that he's over you? That he means more to you than you do to him. It hurts and its a horrible feeling. Like you're floating on water, unable to pick a direction to swim to because you just want everything to disappear, including yourself.
| anon chapter 1 . 2/15/2013
he can burn. you have your fans behind you. he will be hated for doing this to such a perfectly pleasant nice and dangerously talented girl.
| A Midsummer chapter 1 . 1/3/2013
I guess this explains why some people can't seem to let go of their unrequited love, why they are so desperate and cling to it to the very end. I can't fathom it but just a little I think I understand now. Just a little piece slotted to the complicated puzzle that is the heart.
I don't really understand feelings though beyond what fiction says. I think I'm too selfish to be able to love someone that hard. I even wonder if I love my family at all. I care about them sure but...*shakes head* nevermind.
| Music4Life1791 chapter 1 . 11/25/2012
I didn't even see this story until now...awkward.
Anyway, you are my favorite fanfic writer, by far. I love all your stories so much!
And it sucks that you ever felt like this. That V person deserves to be pushed off a cliff into a lake full of piranhas, I swear. Screw him.
Love you, fyerigurl! Please update TCAFS, because all your reviewers and readers are suffering, I tell you!
| vivaaa chapter 1 . 11/11/2012
I loved it. It is rough but perfect the way it is. You really captured the feelings... I don't even know how I feel right now. Just... Wow. Very well done. And yeah, he's a jerk. I hope you're not too sad anymore cause it would be shame and he wouldn't deserve it.
| kikumarucat chapter 1 . 11/6/2012
I really love this part-Except it doesn't matter which way you fall, because either way, you know you won't be able to get back up. It really makes sense with the story, and... Well, what can I say? I like it, either way.
| Snowbeamer9 chapter 1 . 8/23/2012
So I've been a little active on and I thought I'd get round to reading this. It actually made me really sad. Simple words, but raw feelings beneath. Brava.
Miss you, hope the muscles and innards are fine.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
the idiot who broke your heart should go die in a hole. he doesn't deserve you, remember that!
love this fic! you write SO WELL...have you ever considered writing something original and maybe publishing it?
| asdf chapter 1 . 7/12/2012
omg, I LOVE IT. o.O
I'm tempted to ask for a sequel but I shouldn't
| SunneRaine chapter 1 . 7/10/2012
You know how a sometimes people write really amazing pieces of work that leave me speechless, and I can't come up with a comprehensive review?
This is one of those fics.
I disagree with you when you say it could be more "polished". I think this story is already pretty polished in that it has subtext, motifs, and flowery language. But there is definitely something raw about this, straining against the words, and I have to commend you on that. From what I've read in the reviews, it seems like you have achieved this effect on most people.
So many people have been in your situation, sweetie. This story struck a nerve in me, and that surprised me. Unrequited romance is something everyone can relate to.
Things that I would consider changing:
"…kisses that are too gentle and too rough, and not enough, never enough, because it is all your longing, longing, longing…"
I love how you mimic the desperate passion of the kisses in the writing, but I felt like this sentence is a bit jarring. I'm not a fan of the word "longing", and the repetition takes away from the pace. I'm not really sure what word I would use, but if you ever edit, play around with this option.
"What do you want from me?
You tell yourself to stop, stop questioning it, and just let things be what they are."
Okay, I love the sentence before this, the part about "but games are only fun when both people want to play." I wish you continued the "game" motif here. Instead of being sort of direct-in-your-face with "you tell yourself to stop", I would prefer something more along the lines of, "you can't ask him what the rules to the game are, he makes them up as he goes along." You know? Or even something like, "It's hard to win when the person you're playing against has all the cards." Something more subtle, because you have the "game" allusion, but then you destroy that with the "stop questioning it" line. It's a bit harsh and sudden.
Then again, I do like the rawness of the in-your-face lines. It's kind of like BAM. THIS IS HOW I FEEL. So I guess I'm conflicted.
I love this line, "He smirks, a smile that reveals absolutely nothing." BEAUTIFUL. So simple, yet so deep. This line captured Niou in an instant.
(See this is when you make me want to read Neon Genesis's work, if her characterization inspired you. I might actually get around to doing it.)
I love the whole "pretend you haven't already fallen" sentence, and the question at the very end. You start out by making us believe the words in 'italics' are Niou's words, but at the very end you suggest that it's all in the OC's head. Very well done.
Second person is risky, but always very powerful when it's well written. You took a risk and I think it paid off enormously.
Whether you decide to take my advice is up to you. I love this fic, so if you decide not to touch it, that's perfectly fine. It's beautiful the way it is. Thanks for sharing.
| StarrySkies27 chapter 1 . 7/3/2012
I love this story, and this kind of things DO happen in real life. Sweet but bitter. Anyway, I love your fics, and yeah, Niou's so... enigmatic here.