|Reviews for Talk me through my panic|
| Miss L Anyus chapter 11 . 6/7/2014
... Still even and slow, clam (calm)...
... Release a sigh. Derek regret(Ed)...
... Back against him. He has (had)...
... Dereks (Derek's) whisper was load (loud)...
... The awkward sort of load (loud)...
... Move up so that they where (were)...
... Stiles closer and his (kiss) him...
... Hoping his feelings got thru (through)...
... Stiles, don;t (don't) you have school...
... Minutes?" Derek of coarse (course)...
I really like your turn or phrase, here: "a question with a bit of awww in his voice." Usually, one would write 'awe;' however, using the similar-sounding 'awww' puts a totally different emotion in the scene! Very awwwsome ;-)
Miss L Anyus
P.S.: Sorry, I'm too lazy to sign in, today. My username is the same: Miss L Anyus (pronounced 'miscellaneous').
| Guest chapter 10 . 6/7/2014
... All sorts of very inappropriate very load (loud) noises but his brains (brain's)...
... Down Derek Hales (Hale's) throat...
... So he could pull Stiles (Stiles') boxers back up and remove the boys (boy's) jeans completely. Derek ten (then) kissed...
... His jeans and it wasn't fare (fair) for Stiles...
... A mind blowing (mind-blowing) organism (orgasm)...
... Asked in his most tiers (tired)...
... Occasionally the hang (hand) job...
... Stroked Derek threw (through)...
I noticed that you didn't use possessive apostrophes anywhere in this chapter. Using An Apostrophe To Show Possession (from .ca . )
An apostrophe plus "s" is used to form the possessive case of all singular nouns, including those ending in "s," e.g.: Rachel's car, the cat's pyjamas, Alice's restaurant, Chris's plants and the fox's tail. Also, plural nouns which do not end in "s" e.g. The People's Court.
An apostrophe alone is used to form the possessive case of plural nouns ending in "s," e.g. the Smiths' house and the foxes' tails; and, singular nouns that would sound awkward with another "s" added, e.g. Ulysses' adventures and Borges' novels.
Just so you know, my 'inner editor' automatically replaces all errors when I'm reading - so they don't get in the way of my enjoyment of your story!
Miss L Anyus
| Miss L Anyus chapter 9 . 6/7/2014
"...as he let Stiles proses (process)... He was therfor (therefore) rather shocked..."
I'm pretty deep into your story; it's just that typos and homophones annoy me. You can try 'reading' your chapters backwards, sentence by sentence, to proof for such errors without getting sucked into plot.
I have to go back after each chapter and read your "lines" - they're hilarious!
Miss L Anyus
| KatherineDarkQueenRiddle666 chapter 19 . 5/26/2014
I loved it please update more
| Rascal chapter 19 . 4/24/2014
| Guest chapter 8 . 4/15/2014
i really frickin love your lines theyre soo hilarious
P.S. i like the story too its really good
| Shiro'sNumberOneGirl chapter 19 . 4/6/2014
Update the story.!
| RaggingLightningWolf chapter 7 . 3/4/2014
your line breaks are absolutly funny cant stop laughing and i love this story too.
| xXStilesKuchikiXx chapter 19 . 1/21/2014
Hurry an Update, need sumore! XD
| Jelicia chapter 19 . 12/24/2013
| Jelicia George chapter 10 . 12/24/2013
| CrimsonAngel99 chapter 19 . 12/23/2013
Woww... that was really cool can't wait for the next chapter,I'm burning with excietment! :)
| Colgate Cavity Protection chapter 19 . 11/20/2013
Oooo shit sheriff stalinski...hehehe...what happens next ?
| SirenxSterek chapter 19 . 10/9/2013
OMG this is The worst cliff hanger in the history of cliff hangers!
I Cant stop thinking about what's gonna happen next.
UPDATE PLEASE, I'M BEGGING YOU!
| gojyo-lover20 chapter 7 . 9/9/2013
Actually I think that your comments in the line breaks are funny.