Reviews for New York Scare
dork with chalk chapter 1 . 6/10/2012
Hi, um your story has a interesting premise. It needs a little more revision. There was a few grammar errors, but nothing majorly bad :) Everyone makes mistakes! Also, another thing would be maybe add a little more emotion into your story. I found it hard to imagine the characters living out there lives, but like I said it's got a good start and I hope to read more from you! :)