|Reviews for The Warp is Calm|
| ShadowCub chapter 1 . 2/5
Wanting to like this but the Imperium doesn't care for xenos especially ones like the Asari. Shepherd is nothing more than a alien lover and useless to any human cause.
I like the Imperium because they don't do any of that useless crawling and ass kissing like the rest of humanity, aliens are untrustworthy and they don't apologize for recognizing that fact.
They would be more likely to let the Reapers reap, and then come in and destroy the relays.
| CookieMonsta1233 chapter 4 . 1/9
LOL at the one-handed Sphess Marine. That is moment worthy of 'Like a Boss'
| Razbunatorul chapter 4 . 1/5
I really like this. I would love to see more. I hope that you continue to update and that your financial troubles get sorted out. Best of luck. This is a very entertaining story, and is quite well written.
| Commissar Rasher chapter 1 . 12/16/2013
I'm sorry to say this, but you lost me.
I remembered reading this story a long time ago, liking it a lot, hoping it wold be continued, and then came back so long after to read it again, and found that you threw the whole thing out and started fresh.
Normally I would not have a problem with this, but in my opinion as a reader and sometimes a writer, the new version is objectively worse than the original in every way I can imagine, really. Firstly the worldbuilding has been gutted. The most interesting thing about the old story was seeing your Inquisitor grow and develop, getting a feeling for how he works as a character, and then following him as he set out to explore the Mass Effect universe.
But in this new version you simply throw the two worlds together, no lead up, no forethought, just clashing themes. So you removed the thing that made your story foremost worth reading, the worldbuilding and character development.
Secondly though is the inaccuracy and, well, shallowness of the canon Mass Effect characters. First of all, replacing the established and loved crew with OCs for no apparent reason is almost never a good idea, and it makes no real sense why you did it here. Further is the complete unknown that is Shepard, who in no way acts like the character from the games, and seems more like a platform for you to talk through the story about your personal morals and beliefs than an interesting character. Again, I normally have little problem with OOC Shepards in a game like Mass Effect, but the one seen here is simply not interesting to follow as a character. These were issues that were present in the original version though as well, which was a reason I always skipped those sections on re-reads. Furthermore, in this version why do you have the canon ME characters stand on the sidelines like cheerleaders whilst 40k OCs handle a major, plot important, emotional and morally challenging encounter? That was such a wasted opportunity I can barely understand it.
I'm sorry, I try not to be negative or criticizing, but why you would replace a troubled, but decent story with this is simply beyond me, I tried to like it and found that I could not. I'll check in from time to time to see if anything has changed, but for the moment those are my thoughts. I really am sorry to say this, but I felt I needed to be honest.
| Sora with an S chapter 4 . 10/24/2013
Your changing back-story and cannon-events... that makes the story more interesting, if a little difficult to read.
Now of course I have only two questions... how did humanity end up in three places (Earth, Thessia and Terra) and how the heck did the Impirium get an outpost set up in another Galaxy. (Did they find a wormhole or something?)
Oh, also, why are the Tech-Priests being so lenient on using Xeno-tech? Do they not know that Asari didn't invent it?
| Yikari chapter 4 . 10/8/2013
Thank you for the update!
I'm not entirely sure where this would go from here. IMHO, something really unexpected should happen soon to shake things up.
| lazyguy90 chapter 4 . 9/26/2013
Great work on this.
Keep at it.
| Tokyo Express chapter 4 . 9/21/2013
| unanimously anonymous. mostly chapter 4 . 9/18/2013
So far so good.
Just a few comments & questions:
1. I am abit confused about some of the characters.
Khan is a lord inquisitor and the leader of this crusade, right?
Zechariah is his second in command and the one who played "Matriarch Imperious", right?
Who exactly is Haarlock?
2. If I remember correctly, you implied at some point that Asari melding is a form of psykery,
but in this chapter wrote about: "...the nanomachines that were intrinsic to Asari Biotics and reproduction...".
That really came out of nowhere, and it doesn't make sense on a couple of different levels.
A. Nanomachines are not magic, you need to tell them what to do. They can't just decide to destroy implants, because that can lead them to attack wanted implants and replacment organs.
B. Asari reproduction worked perfectly even when Asari lived in caves and thought that the Protheans were gods (come to think of it, they still kinda do...), they didn't have nanomachines at this point.
C. Biotics don't need nanomachines to work either. Even if the canon theory about them is a tad more fantasy than sci-fi, adding nanomachines into the mix dosen't make it any better...
3. It's usually a theme in most W40K crossovers, that the W40K guys come and just curb stomp everyone else's faces. And I suppose that it's kinda justified too, because in W40K universe everything is so grotesquely huge and blown out of proportions, that nothing from "outside" really stands a chance.
It's not all bad, it's actually part of W40K's charm...
Anyway, about the tech-priests and how they usually blow away ME's encription and electronic counter measures, I think that this is one area in which the W40K guys can't claim the "I win" button, and might even suck.
Think about it, in a society in which (almost) the only ones who know anything about technology and computers, are a bunch of religious fanatics that tend to clasify any new and unknown technology as "heresy", and have a very narrow way of thinking about technology, and more importantly - this society doesn't have internet \ extranet or any other tool that makes for an excellent training ground for hacking and cracking and pushes everyone to be better, how good can they be when compared to a modern society with the extranet and the proven ability to make advanced AI's like EDI or the Geth?
| cszolee chapter 4 . 9/17/2013
I really love this new chapter. Keep on, good sir, and may Teh Emprah protect you :)
| MissGardenia chapter 4 . 9/16/2013
fffff...stupid website. FWIW, last Guest review was me.
| Guest chapter 4 . 9/16/2013
Honestly, I think the largest problem I have with this fic is that my common perception, right or wrong, of the modern Imperium is that they are generally xenophobic assholes with no sense of moderation, nuance, or tolerance, which balances out their masses of bodies and Cool Tech. Because of this, unfortunately, when you have Reasonable Inquisitors and suchlike, it feels a little bit coming off like a Gary Stu to me (right or wrong they feel a little Imperium agents in name only), with most of the good points of being a W40k cross and none of the bad. Haarlock in particular feels a bit too modern and whimsical (and I'm sure there's some explanation or in-joke for certain things I'll get if I checked the SB thread).
| Guest chapter 4 . 9/16/2013
quantum-leap is really really really really small
Quantum mechanics and physics deal with incredibly small things
so a quantum-leap would be almost unnoticeable from where they started
Great chapter though man Many happys here
| giodan chapter 4 . 9/16/2013
mmmm a out of context problem? ahahahahah! i'm very curius now!
| Blinded in a bolthole chapter 4 . 9/15/2013
-Was that teleportaion or cloaking technology/psychic technique? The former seems to usually come with a "Pressure building up behind eyes" among other things. Though that could depend on quality of teleportarium unit. My guess is pyschic techniques.
-Tau? I'm not sure if they were anything major until I'm sure Tyranids and Necrons were definitely past mid-M41.
- "Matriarch Imperious" of "Hereticus Tenebrae"... had he been in the Home Galaxy there would be much face-palming involved. Guess the STG/Shadow broker would rushing at their turian archives though.
- I reckon the reason why Kara was not "purged" with extreme prejudice for grave crime of touching an Astartes's battle-plate is because the Imperials are still not sure if Asari are aliens or simply a race of Abhumans. Though that Shadow Warden's patience is very remarkable.
- If they had any vid of those"heavy combat mechs" they would have found them to be at the very least AI controlled monstrosities.
- Wow... someone is found of his fertility drugs... and doesn't seem to mind aliens too.
- I do believe the Collectors and by extension the Reapers also monitor Extranet and Comm-buoys.
- BTW I took liberty of recommending your story in Black Library forum's fanfic recommendation thread.