|Reviews for The Ghost and The Darkness|
| ConvolutedCreature chapter 2 . 7/1
This is worth while, better than actually! Found a rare gem.
| ConvolutedCreature chapter 1 . 7/1
Wow, this first chapter is amazing. Love the amount of detail and just the idea of this!
| TheUnknown101 chapter 2 . 1/7
damn and i thought we could get some na'vi x pred happening, c'mon man you had a chance for tall blue people and tall greenish people to have some romantic action. (;~;)
yet you go with the regular predator pairing (~) could've had some hunter becomes the hunted action...
I can keep dreaming or stop lazing about and write this pairing myself, but you know... I'm lazy
| Guest chapter 2 . 5/1/2016
Wow predator is a perv
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/15/2015
You may want to mark it as a crossover. I thought it was a regular AVP fic until I read the summary. -_-
| axel100 chapter 2 . 8/2/2013
One thing I look forward to is how the human spawn aliens relate to the indigenous life. The Navi themselves would tower over alien drones and the Predator alike. Teeth and acid blood aside, an alien queen would have a time with a Thanator. Perhaps the humans should have just dispatched eggs to infect and create Pandora based alien drones.
| SomeGuyOverHere chapter 2 . 10/12/2012
please please please keep writing this story! I bed to know what happens next
| SomeGuyOverHere chapter 1 . 10/11/2012
this is a great intro chapter
| Gamerjord144 chapter 2 . 7/24/2012
Great story so far. Keep up the good work
| Ozymandeos chapter 2 . 7/10/2012
Good story, but wondering why Kal'ak doesn't go around to all the other pods that fell and destroy them too?
And wondering when he runs into the Na'vi
| JunkAlchemy chapter 1 . 7/9/2012
I enjoyed the first chapter immensely. Thank you for sharing this well written peice. I look forward to reading more.
| Teddy-wabbitz chapter 2 . 7/6/2012
I enjoyed this well thought out storyline, look forward to an update.
| Guest chapter 2 . 7/6/2012
I AM LOVING THIS STORY, I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER. I CAN ALMOST SMELL REBELLION AGAINST THE SEEDING OF THE PLANET GROWING AND PERHAPS A SHAKY TREATY BETWEEN THE NAVI AND YAUTJA TO RID THEIR PLANET OF THE HARDMEATS? DAMN THAT WOULD BE GOOD! THANK YOU FOR THE CHAPTER YOU MADE MY DAY!
| speederina chapter 1 . 6/26/2012
Wow, I am impressed. I must say your writing is excellent, and your ideas are amazing. You might give me credit for the prompt, but you took that and ran with it. Even if I'd had the time and inclination, I don't think I could have pulled that off as masterfully as you did. That first scene, with Neytiri's dream, was actually really creepy. That partly because I'd reading this a 2 am lol, but still. Nicely done on that one. And I love the family dynamic with Jake and Neytiri. So homely. And so short-lived. Hopefully... :D
Yeah, I'm guessing that's where Kal'ak is headed lol. Speaking of Kal'ak... Awesome character. Not to mention Ma'koh and N'okk. A cliché team-up when you think about it, but that's because it works. You've got the comic relief who's awesome on occasion, the big guy who needs no further introduction, and the guy who pwns everything. ;) I love his personality and attitude. Reminds me of Syra, only nicer lol. And a bit more... chivalrous I suppose. :P
You know, it was interesting, I got the feeling that Kal'ak was just skirting an alternate universe, with that reference to the Earth hunting permit. Like, had things gone just a little bit differently, he could have ended up there instead. Kind of a cool feeling. Seems like, with just a few wrong turns, he could have been Syra lol. Which is awesome, because I love Syra. :D He's got that same, f*** the authority attitude, only he actually cares about right and wrong. Or, maybe he just doesn't care enough to challenge what he's been taught about morals lol. ;)
Oh, yeah, I've been wondering, is Kal'ak gonna be paired with a human or a Na'vi? Oh! And you should totally, totally give that human slave to N'okk! That would be so awesome! Speaking of which, make sure you drop in on those two every once in a while. Not too often, mind you, but sometimes. And yes, that would be an awesome side story, N'okk getting stuck with that human slave. Maybe she's secretly really rebellious, and that's why they hand her off to him...? Oh, god, now you've got me brainstorming. Now I want to write this scene... Hmmm... :/
So, your writing is just great. You've got the flow just right, with perfect foreshadowing, and a flawless inclusion of backstory; just enough to keep the readers curious, given at just the right time. Your descriptions make me look bad, though, so... Tone it down. ;) And don't worry about a few minor punctuation errors. So you forgot a few commas here and there. Big effing deal.
About the use of the Yautja language. That's totally to each their own. Honestly, I think it makes a lot more sense to have everything in English, rather than have a few choice words in Yautja, and the rest in English. It's just that, personally, I feel it gives a bit of an authentic feel to it, which is why I use it. But it doesn't really make sense lol. So... Don't change anything. :P
The length... Is awesome. It's true, you could have split it up, but who the eff cares? lol Some people's children... :P
And holy crap, I just realized that black fire is a huge metaphor lol. Wow. *facepalm*
Speaking of which... Again, nicely done, with the whole, incorporating everything into there. Aliens, predators, avatar... etc. Btw, that combo-stick makes me soooo jealous. Oh, my god, do you mind if I steal that for my story? lol I'd give you credit, of course. :P
Anyway, to conclude this long rant of praise and worship... ;P I LOVE IT! So awesome! Keep writing! God, I need smut. There's something wrong with me, I know, but who give a crap anyway? :D AWESOME STORY! Need I say it again? Cause I will. :P
| bree51 chapter 1 . 6/18/2012
I LOVE THIS A LONG CHAPTER FINALLY FROM ATRUE WRITER WHO KNOWS YHAT TRUE READERS ENJOY LONG CHAPTERS INSTEAD OF PIECE MEAL CHAPTERS THAT MAKE YOU SO MAD YOU COULD SPIT! THANK YOU FOR DRAWING A COMPLETE PICTURE OF YOUR STORY AND KEEPING ME GLUED TO EVERY WORD AND DESCRIPTION THAT YOU WROTE. I LOVED THE HUMAN PET DESCRIPTION AS THIS HUMAN APPEARED TO KAL'AK WHO HAD NEVER SEEN ONE BEFORE. I BELIEVE YOU CAPTURED THE WAY ONE ALIEN WOULD VIEW ANOTHER THAT IT HAS NEVER SEEN. I LOVE DETAILS LIKE THAT AND I SUGGEST THAT YOU CHECK OUT A FELLOW WRITER STUPE, WHOSE PROSE IS JUST AS AMAZING AND CHAPTERS THAT ARE LONG AND LOVED. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! I BELIEVE YOUR FANS WILL GROW MORE SO THEN THOSE WHO COME TO CRITIQUE BASED ON WHAT THEY WOULD DO. YOU ARE THE DRIVER OF YOUR CREATIVE MIND AND ONLY YOU. NEVER FALL DOWN ON WHAT YOU TRULY WANT TO DO JUST KEEP MOVING FORWARD!