Reviews for Taken
daisy thiel chapter 1 . 3/10
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tiCocoChanelle chapter 1 . 3/7
I wait the next, please. And please read my story I'm french
Guest chapter 1 . 2/4
Please ! update
anitra.mason1 chapter 1 . 12/26/2013
Love it can't wait for you to update
nonna99 chapter 1 . 6/22/2013
Great start, please continue, I want to know what's going to happen next.
volleyball chapter 1 . 6/14/2013
You can't leave in hanging there! Update pretty please XD
augus10 chapter 1 . 5/19/2013
Great chapter, well written too, please update when you can.
Angelina56 chapter 1 . 3/16/2013
more please
Guest chapter 1 . 2/10/2013
Great suspense on the ending. But where is the next chapter
Guest chapter 1 . 1/19/2013
can you keep writing
Andreaaaa chapter 1 . 12/14/2012
CONTINUE PLEASE! I like your beginning story ;)
Guest chapter 1 . 9/23/2012
Update soon:( please
DrQuiltmom chapter 1 . 6/15/2012
Nice job! This is my favorite so far. Lots of description and I felt like I was there. I wonder who left that note...
lilgenious chapter 1 . 6/14/2012
This seems like a good story. I really liked the first paragraph as it makes Calleigh more human. You also have everybody in character and I am rather interested in the idea.

You shouldn't space out the first word of dialogue, for instance: " Natalia watch out!"

It should be "Natalia, watch out!"

You also need to space out your dialogue so no two or more characters are speaking within it. Only one character should speak in a given paragraph and all other characters and their dialogue have to have their own separate paragraph. For instance:

"No I did not notice that, Calleigh," said Natalia.

Calleigh frowned. "You should have noticed, Natalia. That was evidence you stepped on."... etc.

Overall, I think you did a good job and I can't wait to see what you have in mind for this story.
CSIMiamiObsessed chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
First paragraph is priceless. I love how you wrote this. Keep up the good work!
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