|Reviews for The Sorcerer's Journey|
| sargeja chapter 2 . 10/12/2012
Seems a lot like a D&D game, a lot.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
i like want more
| Hitman Nx chapter 1 . 6/12/2012
I'll admit that I only made it about half way through the story before I stopped reading. I can see promise in the story, but you have to work on a few things first.
1). Grammer. It's the most obvious one. Always capitalize I, and don't forget to add apostrophes for compound words ( I'll ). Also, read your sentences out loud. That's the fastest way to catch a grammar error.
2). Pacing. While you are checking your sentences, make sure that they flow properly. Try to avoid extending details out to far in a run on sentence. Instead, stop the sentence and start a new one to finish your description. The best example of this would be your description of Harold. That sentence was too long, and could have easily been split up.
Otherwise, what I read was good, and I hope you take my advice. Good luck on this story, and keep working at it.