Reviews for Olowalu Paintball Explosion
lanteaddicted chapter 3 . 6/14/2012
love the long chapter
PhoenixWytch chapter 3 . 6/14/2012
Awesome! Love the final chapter. It completed a truly fantastic story.

Thank you for writing and sharing.
francis2 chapter 3 . 6/14/2012
Miss Carlyle clearly has good taste in men, which is the only good thing that can be said about her. She will probably send panties to Steve from her cell.
Doni chapter 3 . 6/14/2012
A Washington Five-O? ;) I like it. And they would get to wear wet suits! But, you know, for the rain. ;)

I really do like the perspective of this one.
Doni chapter 2 . 6/14/2012
I'm enjoying the mystery of the case. Nicely done!
Doni chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
Ooh, I like the mystery of a case. And I love seeing the team through an outsider's eyes. Nicely done.
Lidil chapter 2 . 6/13/2012
I like the outside observer.
delia cerrano chapter 2 . 6/13/2012
Great new story. Wish it was an "M" though. The sassy talk between Steve & Danny was hysterical.
lanteaddicted chapter 2 . 6/13/2012
love the chapter
francis2 chapter 2 . 6/13/2012
This is a great case, and the perspective of the liaison is wonderful. I love that you don't distract from the case by making it all about the narrator. That would be dreadful, like some stories with Mary Sues are. I suspect someone used the paintball containers for something else, like smuggling or drugs. But who has a key? Can't wait to find out.
PhoenixWytch chapter 2 . 6/13/2012
Curious...

Thanks for writing and sharing.
Qweb chapter 1 . 6/12/2012
Gotta love a nice long chapter. Interesting plot. I hope it doesn't get too slashy. But as long as Danny and Steve sound like Danny and Steve, I can stand a little romance.
PhoenixWytch chapter 1 . 6/12/2012
Interesting! Great first chapter. Look forward to reading more.

Thanks for writing and sharing.