Reviews for The Boy
WizardsGirl chapter 1 . 6/16/2012
Loved this, especially snce you didn't make Ibiki-Sama all lovey-dovey or anything. Wel Done!

Hugs & Kittens,

Moon Whistler chapter 1 . 6/16/2012
Ibiki is a big meanie! LOL! Loved it!
leighargeneau chapter 1 . 6/14/2012
Awesome story! I love Ibiki. The beginning reminded me of another story. I think it was among the hawks and doves
exaigon chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
The last sentences made the whole story even better. It was awesome and cute at the same time. Great job!
mabidiso chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
Good lord! Dumbledore and the Dursleys primed Harry to understand Ibiki-love. Yeah, Harry would fit right in to a shinobi mindset in certain ways. Poor little self effacing guy. I do love that he caught Ibiki's eye. Hey! That rhymed! I'm a poet!
enchanted nightingale chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
Nice! :)
JuMiKu chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
This was hilarious. Although the romance came almost out of nowhere, considering Ibiki appeared to view him as a kid.
sousie chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
i like it will you make a second part
In The Mix chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
This was very interesting! I love it! Great one-shot!
Grim chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
i love this story would you consider continuing it including ibiki finding out about harrys magic and harry meeting the other characters in konoha? even if you didn't i still love the story line :D
CrystalBlues chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
brilliant story :)
Conpeki chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
Love the last line, lol.

Curious, though. Why is Harry blind? And why did Ibiki accept food from a stranger, kind of. Could have been poisoned.
xXxOtAkU-444xXx chapter 1 . 6/12/2012
I like it! **
iSaint chapter 1 . 6/12/2012
A few quick things, hope you don't mind.

1. It seems very weird that Ibiki would consider eating something from a person he knows nothing about. Seems a bit out of character for a guy who works Torture and Intelligence, and who, up to that point, seemed like he didn't trust HP.

2. I'm wondering why HP is blind. It didn't really seem to impact the story much, but it was a decision you made. I find that very interesting. It could because you wanted the skew the power dynamic even more, which makes sense, but little kid and older, ninja man seems already pretty one sided.

3. I like your pacing for the most part, but I feel like for this to truly be a one shot you needed to have at least some mutual conflict between your two protagonists (Ibiki and HP). Resolution without conflict seems less intense and satisfying. If they had to work a bit to get together it would mean more to the reader and, hopefully, you.

Well, not the type of story I would write. But you seem to have a great gasp on the fundamentals, and while I wasn't a huge fan of the subject matter, it was still interesting. Good luck in your future endeavors, and feel free to ignore everything I said.

Akrakomatia chapter 1 . 6/12/2012
Can't argue with ibiki's logic. Lol.

It was a nice read, thank you.
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