Harry's desperate need for dramatics is disturbing, not at all a sign of a good person.

Fascinating story ideas from start to finish made this a really good read. Main weaknesses were often lack of clarity and incompleteness causing spots of confusion; terse, sombre, slick author-speak dialogue from just about every character except Ron, and over-pruning of speech tags; good overall pace but lack of variety in the structure of that pace; very little background location and actions being painted - so talking heads in a void much of the time. But interest trumps technique every time, so very high marks overall. Most enjoyable but could have been outstanding with better technique. Anyway, far, far better than a boring story written with excellent technique! :)

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Never thought i would say this... But this was too much about 'M'agic... not enough instincts or how can magic help the world... Heck, wasn't even able to finish ch6...

It gave me the feelings of when some higher being, who by accident found some very interesting things, and now is playing with them...

If Magic can actually be thought of, shouldn't it be like some primordial force of Nature... Which would not interfere, but watch and give small nudges here n there... Kinda like in "Pivet drive"

But giving it a freakin' personification... And a body(Harry's mind)... It feels more like "Lich King kind of deal"

Harry

I enjoyed this story quite a lot. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Why isn't Harry using his invisibility cloak?

This chapter was quite depressing. I feel alot like Harry, ignorance is bliss as they say. I often say that I wish i could go back to being a child and stay there, but I'd have to have my mind wiped because mentally I'm no longer an innocent. Harry was always so curious, but I'm afraid he's found out too much this time. What is he supposed to do when changing the world is an impossible goal? How can he follow Sirius advice and leave, knowing what is actually going on? I'm afraid I'd just want to be a shop owner or something, living day to day and moaning about the government messing things up as usual without actually knowing what that meant. Perhaps Harry could become a teacher at Hogwarts and start explaining in simple terms to the first years, putting a secrecy spell on the classroom so they can only discuss it with those in the know. It would take a very long time, but he could eventually see the end of the ministry if nobody applied to work there, then he and his students could take over and try to do things right. Everyone has an idea of what is right, but how do we know which ideas to impliment? Politics gives me a headache.

Inspiring, thought-provoking, and sobering. This is a story all about consequences. I love it!

I'm sorry but I just can't continue. The story is well written and the plot is interesting but the story is just the filler between major events . I want to know how crouch brought Horntail and Volde-baby back, how they reacted but instead I get this.

Wonderful! Inventive! Educational...is it bad that I just thought that?

I don't understand it all

This was... thoroughly unsatisfying.

I hate the idea of these greater magics/aspects being hidden away by individual families. Is it any wonder wizarding society is stagnate and complacent about magic when magic itself agrees to hide itself from everyone?

I really don't like the direction the latter half of this fic has gone.

Terrific! If only we could do the same to the Elites and 'Political Animals' that infest our reality!
Thank you for this taste of Karmic justice!
MelJ

Wow the was no doubt the awesomeness major one of a kind smart common sense hps I've ever read ever!

The story certainly changed directions midway, with magical constructs.. and while it was a good read nonetheless, it felt incomplete by the time we reached the end.
It was authentic / true to reality where problems don't wrap up nicely at the end... but life still continues.
Anyway, thank you for sharing.