|Reviews for A Veela and his mate|
| Gleas chapter 4 . 2/4
I am appalled that none of the three "protectors" realized the umbrige thing! Sirius and Remus, i would expect, would have immediately picked up on the blood scent... and sev being Veela is supposed to know- the pain or even Harry's feelings and seeing as he is part creature too maybe smell as well.
Ok... after that rant... Why is Umbridge NOT attracted to potter? she is more or less dominant type i'd say. It seemed strange in a way. I feel ideas just under my conscious mind that would have her attack Harry and consequent events that would embarrass and harass her (yes i rly hate her :P)
It would be preferable if Snarry interaction was a bit more diverse as well...
All said I realize the story is completed and so far it is pretty good (i'm on 4th chapter) but i was compelled to ... well... rant.
| babycakes12 chapter 8 . 2/3
what about when they had to use the bathroom? how did that work out during that week?
| JuleMaker chapter 20 . 1/30
Why does Sev have DRUGGED sugar?
| arllry chapter 24 . 1/5
I love this story and the sequel is going grate I would love to read a story where snape is the submissive please please please!
| Aliss chapter 1 . 8/21/2013
I like your story and you have a nice way of unfolding the plot, even if the idea itself is not that orginal. There's one thing though that makes me unwilling to continue reading - English is not my mother tongue and my use of it is less than perfect, so to complain about grammar would be hypocritical, but the way you've been repeating the same sentence patterns is grating on my nerves when I'm reading. If you could change the wording of some sentences, I'm sure it would become a good story.
| JJxWillxProtectxYou chapter 24 . 8/17/2013
Hey, I've just got to tell you that i read this story ages ago (when it was still being written) and have since read it again at least 15 times, and this was legit the story that made me start shipping snarry! Before I read this, I was exclusively a Drarry girl, but now I love snarry almost as much, if not more! Looking forward to also reading the revised version!
| Obscured Angel chapter 1 . 7/28/2013
Still as awesome as I remember. I'm back for a second read through! :)
| kaelan chapter 11 . 6/22/2013
Okay, so I'd like to start with an apology...I've read this fanfic like ten times before in the last year(cause I absolutely love it) but never have I ever reviewed! And now, as I was reading this chapter, I wondered why. So that's what I'm doing now...reviewing. This Veela fic truly is amazing, I love the whole Snape/Harry things (aswell as Harry and Draco) and I want to thank you for writing this. I would have posted this review when signed in, but I haven't been signed in for abou a year because of issues I don't think we're close enought to talk about... But anyway, I know this story is well over and that chapter 11(or is this chapter 12?) is an odd spot to start reviewing, but you deserve it. I forget what my email is, but kik me if you want to talk- kaysmith333 thanks so much for writing this
| happysue115 chapter 12 . 6/7/2013
This is a lot sappier than I expected...Don't get me wrong, it's well written and I like the overall plot, but at the same time...I feel as if some chapters are the exact same as the chapter before: They kiss, Sirius and Remus freak out, Severus is overly protective, Harry is sickeningly girly (maybe tone it down a bit?), and then they cuddle up in bed and fall asleep. I feel as if they sleep non-stop. Like, that is not healthy. He walks around maybe ten minutes every day... hmmmm? See what I mean? Oh well, I am ranting. Sorry, great story, just kind of repetitive.
| RozaHelenClary Sardothian chapter 16 . 6/2/2013
"Hmm, if you're this docile and cuddly now, I can't wait to see what your like after sex." he mused, his grin brightened excitedly at that. Hopefully Harry would allow him to treat him properly afterwards, it would please him to no end if he could coddle him without much protest. Maybe Harry would even allow him to do things sentimentally...now that he thought about it, he had always wanted to romantically sweep Harry off his trembling legs and bathe him, feeling the trust Harry gave him as he laid against his chest and let Severus wash him. Then he would carry Harry back to bed, because Harry's body would be too exhausted and pleasured to do anything other than curl into Severus and...
Severus was quickly brought out of his musings by Harry indignant whine. "Sev!" he blushed, clearly embarrassed. Severus creased his eyebrows until he realized his last comment wasn't as quiet as he assumed.
"Sorry, love," Severus smirked.
This was in an earlier chapter too?
| RozaHelenClary Sardothian chapter 14 . 6/2/2013
Clothes not cloths though i suppose clothes are made of cloth. I am here not i am hear. Hear is listening/hearing a noise. Here is where you are e.g i am here safe and warm in my bed. (True :D) apparate not apearate for the magically transportation thing okay? But other than those you are mainly fine
| RozaHelenClary Sardothian chapter 12 . 6/2/2013
I may have been mistaken as your grammar is a lot better in this chapter, i apologise.
| RozaHelenClary Sardothian chapter 11 . 6/2/2013
Ironically, there werent many mistakes in this ome and there normally are way more... However i am very much enjoying the story despite some of your terrible grammer. For instance your "your"s and your "you're"s, you're is an abbreviation for you are so if you read it back and it doesnt make sense if you replace youre with you are, you need to change it to your. Likewise with some of your 's if it's like "Severus's" it is something that belongs to Severus and if it is "Severus' " it means there is more than one Severus and something belongs to both of them. "Balls" is more than one ball naturally.
| Guest chapter 24 . 5/25/2013
This story is really good. I really liked it. I just think there alot of part repeating it makes it long to read. But all in all. It has good story line. Also different then other ones which makes it already better then most.
| james chapter 19 . 5/2/2013
I found some of the ending to this chapter to be annoying. sorry, but allowing Harry control and then not reacting like he couldn't really care less, kind of sucks. Call it what you want, Severus is constantly playing mind games and leaving Harry in the dark and calling it (keeping him protected) when clearly Harry left in the dark doesn't usually end well. I think if I were harry and Severus wasn't responding to my trying to turn him on, I would have huffed and walked away and maybe in harry's case been feeling hurt, but not just whine and allow Severus yet another (I always know better then you) smirk. I kind of want to smack that smirk off his face.