Reviews for Temari's Tournament
Guest chapter 4 . 5/11
Wtf? Seriously one night then for the rest? Hahaha that's just absurd..
prince711 chapter 4 . 4/9/2016
The ending totally demolishes Shikamaru's character as we have known him till now . there's no way a genius like him will ever accept such a decision when he will forever wonder whether he even holds all her heart at all or not . I mean i know one can still have a place in their heart for their first love/ crush but this was absolutely ridiculous .
ShikallllTema chapter 3 . 9/22/2014
Well I just left that review, and then I read the quote in your final authors note... So I see that you did realize Shikamaru would not accept Temari at that point, but you still wanted them to be together... I understand your thought process, but in that story, as much as I love them, he was much better off alone.
ShikallllTema chapter 4 . 9/22/2014
I'm sorry, I really don't like leaving negative reviews... but I must say, this was not a good ending. I thought the beginning was good, at the ball. And the characterization was fine for the first three chapters. But this ending just genuinely ruined it all. The concept of "one night or every one after" is just... ridiculous. I don't think any of these characters (or anyone with an ounce of self respect or decency) would think this was a good idea- let alone acceptable.
But I think the main thing would be that, I believe, without a doubt, Shikamaru would never agree to something so insane. He's smart, that's his thing. Any remotely smart person would realize that if there's anyone else she wants to be with (if only for just one night), then she does NOT love you, despite what she says or agrees to. Shikamaru would have been the adult there and stepped back, knowing she didn't truly want him.
If nothing else, I would change the genres on this story... it's not a romance. it's angst and tragedy.
CodenameLolo chapter 4 . 8/19/2014
I love this story a lot, and I was wondering if you'd ever consider doing an alternate ending thing where she ends up with Darui instead?
Kh530 chapter 4 . 7/27/2014
This was really really great and you made me fall for Darui so thank you so much 3
Kh530 chapter 2 . 7/27/2014
I'm liking her with Darui over Shikamaru- my baby. What have you done to me D:
Kh530 chapter 1 . 7/27/2014
Okay so I usually never ever comment on old stories or first chapters but this fanfic has made me realize how sweet Dariu ( sorry I'm horrible at spelling) and how much I like his character so I need to say thank you :)
Rose chapter 4 . 6/2/2014
I been waiting patiently for you to continue this awesome story and really hope you finally have the chance too! You are one of the best author on this site.
Guest chapter 4 . 8/9/2013
that was intresting and af good story. good job.
Milo chapter 4 . 5/25/2013
Great story. Really wish you would do a sequel!
AmusingThief chapter 4 . 12/26/2012
I loved your story. I recently discovered the character of Darui and went on a man hunt for fan fiction about him. You story was very well done and moving. It had the feel of a story to just lose yourself in. As yours was the first story i read with this character i can only hope that any other author can do half as well as you did. Keep up the great work. Any hopes for an Ino Y. story? A very possible second interest for Darui, at least in my opinion.
julia chapter 4 . 7/23/2012
This was freaking AMAZING! I love shikatema and all but this made me ship temari with darui. Hard. I loved this and can't wait to read another one of your stories.
i.Love.shikatema chapter 4 . 7/17/2012
So glad you finished the story.

It was great, but kind of tragic for Darui. Poor guy. Haha.

I really wanna see a sequel. Might be great. -
Ralf Jones chapter 4 . 7/12/2012
I really liked this fic...

It is a sad ending, but this is after all a love triangle, someone has to get hurt in the end...

I can relate to Darui somehow, he was lucky, some times life is not so gentle...

I would really like to see a sequel.

Great work
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