|Reviews for Humphrey the Lone Wolf|
| Guest chapter 34 . 2/19
Great but will this story be continued?
| Guest chapter 34 . 1/3
You should bring kate back into the story!
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/10/2013
Really good. Great job!
| The Dishonored Wolf chapter 34 . 7/28/2013
| Sergeant Sargent II chapter 34 . 6/18/2013
I still like Earnest. His dry humor never gets old.
"No, we're catching fish, not thrashing around and calling it a day, now get over here."
"So, swimming?" / "I think in your case it would be drowning,"
I see Humphrey is still over eager as ever, trying to "bite off more than he can chew."
So, now he's seen the basics, time to practice for long periods of time... i see the legendary boredom of the student in his future. With Humphrey's personality, that can't end well... but it will be interesting for us, the readers!
Some musings on the cause of the Jasper conflict... interesting. Will that come back, or just a passing thought?
"Chapter 3" is titled 'The Pack'. I wonder what we will learn about the mysterious nearby pack. They've been mentioned occasionally, but not yet fully explained... some details in previous chapters i can't wait to see resolved.
"the deer would eat everything in the valley" Blasted Varmints!
These two are already fun, but i want to see them once Humphrey gets back on four paws.
"You just wait a while, I'll show you how a pro catches them." Humphrey can still have some fun!
And of course, Humphrey caught FOOD! he actually caught it! *"Reader cheers aloud, then looks furtively around and goes back to reading*
Another great chapter. Keep em up!
| Guest chapter 34 . 6/12/2013
will humphrey ever meet the girl who saved him
| Hermes Trismegistus chapter 34 . 6/12/2013
Here we are at the third and final lesson. Time to see if Humphrey has actually improved through Earnest’s regimen:
Of course, we start with Humphrey napping when he should be observing. I guess iron-clad determination to get home and absolute fear of whatever Earnest will do if he fails was not enough to keep the drowsiness at bay. Humphrey, you need to learn about a little thing called will-power.
At least Humphrey’s able to deduce that the rock is what hurt his ear. He does have a good head on his shoulders. Now if he could only use it more often.
To make matters worse, a deer has managed to come terribly near him as he slept. I take it this was the reason Earnest told him to watch the deer and not sleep by them. But at least he manages to escape this sticky situation without being heard or otherwise noticed. I saw how you said he managed not to move any rocks or break any twigs on his way out. It looks to me like at least something of Earnest’s lessons are starting to sink in after all.
Who knows, maybe Humphrey is getting the hang of this and doesn’t realize it.
And a ledge does make a better hiding spot than a place in the field right next to a deer. That line made me chuckle. Such a common-sense observation, but one Humphrey has had to now learn the hard way.
And it was great to see Humphrey’s thoughts here about home and Kate. It shows what he’s feeling inside and how, for him, there really is no leaving Jasper or leaving her. Even thousands of miles away, his heart still is up there. I always like seeing a character’s inner life and thoughts, so this part in particular was a treat.
I like how Earnest is portrayed in his first moments of this chapter. He seems to be relaxed and at ease, yet he’s alert to the slightest motion or sound. It says a lot, with very little, about his character and how, even in moments of downtime, he’s on full alert for any changes or threats in his territory.
And, of course, he knows Humphrey messed up no matter how much Humphrey tries to cover his tracks. That has always been one of the things that makes their friendship so much fun to read about. And I love the way Earnest practically says “I know you messed up,” without ever actually saying “I know you messed up.”
I had a feeling Earnest was the one who threw those rocks to wake Humphrey. He actually looks out for Humphrey much more than he’s usually willing to let Humphrey see.
Final lesson time. Earnest says it’s going to be something “Simple.” Hmm, why don’t I believe this? But as they’re approaching the lake, I’m going out on a limb to say that they’re going to do some fishing again.
Once more, Humphrey is showing that he has managed to pick up what Earnest has taught him, as now he can also get through the bushes without getting pricked too painfully.
I liked the description of the lake, and how Humphrey always seems to be seeing it anew despite having seen it so often before. Reminds me of something I read recently about a man who could walk the same stretch of beach every day for years and still feel as though he was seeing a new beach every time.
“I think in your case it would be drowning,” Hilarious line from Earnest, and to the point. I don’t know how Humphrey ever thought he could swim with one paw out of commission and tied to a stone.
Well, what do you know, I was right. The final lesson is fishing. What a perfect way to take this whole training program full-circle. Humphrey is now back to where he started, but hopefully will be much more successful after having picked up some new lessons and skills.
“No, we're catching fish, Not thrashing around and calling it a day,” Earnest is getting some really good one-liners this time. He’s not pulling his punch, word-wise or lesson-wise, with Humphrey this chapter.
Humphrey’s mind immediately gets distracted by the prospect of being an awesome hunter who could make Kate’s heart melt with his abilities. Once more, Earnest has to bring back down to Earth and the task at hand. I like how you’re portraying Humphrey; his skills have gotten better in subtle ways, but personality-wise he’s still got all of the sillier qualities which made him such a distinct character in the first place.
“He no longer saw Humphrey as the wolf that gave up, this time he saw him as the wolf that was trying to succeed.” This is one of the best lines in this chapter. It captures, in a single sentence, both Humphrey’s change as a character but also Earnest’s changing view of Humphrey and his sense of accomplishment at training him.
The scene with Earnest guiding Humphrey to his first catch was amazingly done. It had just the right pacing and the right flow to give a sense both of Earnest’s careful instruction and Humphrey’s struggle to be patient. We see Humphrey finally learn his lesson and achieve what is for him a remarkable triumph. It was also great to see Humphrey starting to act on instinct – there’s hope for him yet!
And Humphrey gets to see that there are some profound morals behind Earnest’s lessons. I especially liked to see Earnest teaching Humphrey about the need for sustainability and that everything depends upon everything else. There is nothing that is not interconnected to all other things, and this is why both deer and wolves (among other creatures) are needed. I loved seeing this lesson appear here.
I liked the mention of Humphrey having to learn patience, because it ties into his lesson, and then I found it interesting to see him thinking of his fish as a “lowly accomplishment” since it completely reverses what he had just felt when he caught it.
But in the end, Humphrey realizes Earnest’s meaning and recognizes his wisdom. He might just be learning patience after all. A nice way to end the chapter because it shows that Humphrey has changed into a better and more thoughtful wolf through the course of these three lessons. Despite still having much to learn and get used to, he seems readier now to face the challenges ahead than he ever was before.
- Gordon Pasha
| Dawn walker wolf chapter 34 . 6/12/2013
So...will Humphrey ever meet back up with Kate?
| Troygroomes chapter 34 . 6/12/2013
need to do a version of this in Kate's pov?
| Sergeant Sargent II chapter 33 . 4/5/2013
It's back! Praises be sung! [Ok, I'm good now.]
"I'm late!" Still good ol' Humphrey as always.
I feel like Earnest is much more awesome than he's letting on...
great quote: "Trust me. If I were hiding, you wouldn't find me."
And homework! Will Humphrey get good enough at stalking to start playing games with the herd?
So, the key to hunting is to go after the Omegas of the herd... interesting in this context.
The phrasing in the beginning seemed a bit awkward compared with how well the rest flowed. Paragraph 7 [odd use of "such" and an awkward sentence] and 17 [last sentence just sounded weird. i like "regather himself", but "regather himself to what was said the day before" sounded odd to me.] stood out. Just my two cents. I can't criticize anything else besides a few minor typos. Nice!
I cant be the only one annoyed by the fact that FFN formatting removes paragraph indents, right?
When he finally makes it home, I bet there will be some fun moments where everyone is impressed with how he's changed. He wont really be an omega anymore, not by ability, though his personality may be the same. A joker who isn't helpless. Very cool.
What will we learn about the mystery helpful she-wolf from early on I wonder?
Glad to see this story again!
| The dark shadow chapter 33 . 4/5/2013
I love it
| Hermes Trismegistus chapter 33 . 4/4/2013
Ah, the long-awaited (and by Humphrey, long-dreaded) Lesson 2. And it was worth the wait!
Once again, we begin with Humphrey waking up alone in the den and getting the uncomfortable feeling of the light blinding him. I think I might have said this before, but I really like how you contrast the natural beauty of the surroundings with Humphrey's own discomfort at being far from home and in pain. He's so preoccupied with what he lost and what he has to face, that he doesn't appreciate what is right in front of him now. That's been one of the problems he's had to deal with throughout this story.
It was nice to see that Humphrey is putting his first lesson into practice and taking some steps in the right direction. I did not expect him to find Earnest as easily as he does. But that is fully intentional on Earnest's part. I think Earnest has the perfect response here, "If I were hiding, you wouldn't find me." That is just the right thing to sting Humphrey while also being absolutely true.
Humphrey’s confusion about what his second lesson will be is perfectly understandable. I never expected that Earnest would take him out into the deer field so soon. It is true that they weren’t going to actually hunt the deer, but I still thought Earnest would hold off for a few lessons yet. But I see that this was what Humphrey needed to learn at this time.
I liked how Earnest points out that Humphrey was able to get into his den that first time without him noticing. Humphrey didn’t mean to do it, but somehow he still caught Earnest off-guard. It seems to me that Earnest is suggesting here that Humphrey has more potential than he realizes. Now, if he could just get Humphrey to accept that.
Humphrey seems to be slowly sharpening his skills, but he’s not wholly there yet. I found it amusing that he zones out while they are walking toward the fallen tree and ends up not acting very stealthy at all. That’s our Humphrey! I know it was a mistake, but I can’t blame him. I probably would have ended up zoning out, too. There is a lot going on in his head, after all.
I thought it was very clever how Earnest gives Humphrey that clue with his good eye. And the way he seems to still be paying attention to Humphrey even when he appears to be completely absorbed in looking at the deer. There is so much subtlety to Earnest; Humphrey should know by now that there is always more to what he says and does than the obvious.
I particularly loved the way Earnest snapps Humphrey out of his moment of self-pity and self-blame at the end there. The quote, “I tell you these things because I know you can learn a thing or two about surviving, and about yourself” sums up Earnest’s whole message for me. Humphrey did not know a thing about either, but now he realizes that he has much to learn. The important thing is for Humphrey to realize that he can find his strength and find himself if he is willing to learn from his mistakes and use them to move forward. That’s a great lesson and it was just what Humphrey needed to hear at the time.
And Earnest is right about how fortunate Humphrey is. It is easy to think we have it rough until we remember that so many others have it worse off than ourselves. It sounds to me as though another lesson Humphrey needs to learn is to have gratitude for what he has, not sorrow for what he doesn’t.
This was a wonderful chapter and the perfect lesson for Humphrey to learn. I can see how he is beginning to make progress toward surviving on his own and this is all going to be invaluable when he actually makes his way back to Jasper. Earnest is exactly the right person he needed to teach him this and you have given them such an interesting dynamic.
Humphrey has now come through Lesson 2, but the dread he felt for it has been replaced by the dread he feels for Lesson 3. I look forward to seeing what Earnest has in store for him next. Knowing Earnest, it may seem crazy, but it will be the perfect sequel to this one.
- Gordon Pasha
| Guest chapter 11 . 3/5/2013
| Hermes Trismegistus chapter 32 . 1/24/2013
Training begins. Humphrey is in for the nightmare of his life.
It was funny to see Humphrey getting so nervous and Earnest just playing around with his emotions. He was acting like what he wanted Humphrey to do was not so tough, all the while knowing how hard it was going to be for Humphrey. I had to chuckle at the way Earnest tries to reassure Humphrey by telling him "I'm training you to survive," and Humphrey realizes that it's really not very reassuring at all.
Also, it was great to see Humphrey's first attempt at using his sense of smell - and cheating by peaking. I thought that was classic Humphrey; even with his very survival on the line, his first instinct is to take the easy way out. But Earnest knows all of Humphrey's tricks before he even tries them.
When Earnest disappeared, I honestly didn't know if Humphrey was going to get out of that forest. I knew Earnest wouldn't just abandon him, but beyond that, who could tell what Earnest was planning? I thought he might not come back for him until the morning. That was a very exciting part as Humphrey desperately tries to find Earnest and uses all of his focus and concentration for the task. And you did good with the suspense; I really didn't know whether he'd find Earnest or not.
But at least Humphrey keeps up his sense of humor. It's obvious that he needs it to keep from giving up completely. Nice touch.
The way you had Earnest hidden was incredibly clever. You hinted at it by having Humphrey's sense of smell leading back to the rock, but you did a good job of making it look like Humphrey failed. I suspected Humphrey had actually picked up Earnest's scent, and that Earnest had to be watching him, but I couldn't figure out where he might be. And then, to have him pop out of an opening in the rock was the perfect solution. That was a great moment.
I felt bad for Humphrey, since he seems sure he failed. But Earnest is pleased, since he got Humphrey to use his sense of smell and to start taking his own survival seriously. I like the way he's doing this, figuring out what Humphrey needs to learn and how to get Humphrey to overcome his reluctance and learn it.
There were, as always, more great lines, moments, and descriptions than I can possibly mention. Humphrey's got to learn how to survive on his own and it's going to be interesting to see how he responds to the rest of Earnest's training regimen.
- Gordon Pasha
| Epic as a Rule chapter 32 . 1/24/2013
dang he's thick in this chapter. he panics pretty easy too. Keep up the good work! out of curiosity, and coming from an army family, what branch is your friend joining? enlisted or officer?