What is this?! Down with Colton!
Must continue reading.

This is a pointless review since you've already written the damn story but I just needed to say YOU ARE KILLING ME WITH THE BLACKINNON DRAMA! I'm literally dying here... Anyhow, I must soldier on and finish it!

Omg ! that was the most beautiful story I've ever read l, I just love it, and although it took me 3 weeks to finish reading, I think I will read it again soon, it's just so beautiful, so full of details, and at the same time so sad and... ugh, I can't even find suitable words... thank you for this masterpiece

This story started off quite nicely. I like how you introduced the characters, and also how you gave a each a unique personality, background, and relationship with the canon characters – yet they never detracted from the plot or stole the focus away from James and Lily, who are of course the focus of this story.

However, when things started going downhill for me was around Chapters 13-15 shortly after the Snape werewolf incident, when two main things happened. First, your grammar, punctuation, and spelling took a sharp turn for the worse. I don't know what happened – whether it was losing a beta reader, or more likely, that you didn't take the time any more to edit your writing before posting. If it's the latter, which I find far more likely, that speaks to me of extreme laziness. As this website says, there is no excuse for having as many grammatical errors as this does, because there are so many resources out there that could help you fix them. I'm sorry, but there isn't.

I think that the deal-breaker for me was probably the aftermath of the entire werewolf incident. First, I totally get it that James and Sirius had a falling-out over it, especially since it involved placing Remus in an unfair position on many levels. It doesn't make sense, though, that James would completely ignore Sirius for WEEKS. For crying out loud, James, TALK TO HIM! Is it really worth giving your best friend the cold shoulder just so you can mantain the moral high ground? Worse yet, there was no resolution between James and Sirius – or if there was, I missed it because it's someplace it has no business being, ten chapters or more after the actual incident. Things just seemed to go back to normal between the two after Marlene was captured and rescued.

That said, this story isn't irredeemable. Fixing the grammar errors would be quite simple – finding a reliable and thorough beta would solve that problem. There are plenty out there, I promise; I'm one of them, and I know several others. The situation between Sirius and James wouldn't be all that hard to resolve either; you could just write a scene where they talk it through, set things right and hug, and that's that, after you insert it into an appropriate chapter.

I hope you'll take some of my advice to heart, and please remember that this story is actually quite good, and has quite a bit of potential. It just needs some TLC, that's all!

Eryn :)

I'm sure a LOT of people have already told you this, but your fanfiction was amazing. It warmed and broke my heart. I want to tell you, thank you for writing this, it truly made my day, or the many days I spent reading it. I loved how you wrote each character with such passion and love. You made them seem real and you brought the generation of the Marauders to life. Thank you so much for writing this and I had a great time reading it. Thank you!

do Sirius and Mar ever get together cause I ship them now and if you deny me my pleasures I kill these three pillows on my bed don't deny me!

hope Cas and Esmee die, can't stand transfer students, die die die die die you worthless transfers die

I loved the way of writing the portrayal of characters and how much loss they suffered though voldermort was gone the evil didn't end it would be back, the way lily and james love was unbreakable, the thought how much it hurt remus to see his three friends dead and one of the friends was the reason this happend was so sad the beginning was amazing and continued in a beautiful way how they became frnds and fell in love but it hurts to read how much hopes they had for future but wouldn't be there to witness it is so sad it was one of the best story I have read about Jilly and closest to canon. I love it.

Wow. I know you finished this a while ago, but dang! Great story, mate!

I love this story loads and have been reading nonstop for 5 days but I think you ruined james and Lily's relationship when they are engaged
Idk...it just feels wrong and unrealistic

I have been looking for a great Marauders-Era focus for a long long time. I think the last great one I read was The Life and Times, and that was a long while ago. I saw this fic mentioned in a Tumblr post, that said she didn't think she could read anything better than TLAT but she found this only a bit after reading that and she said it was just as good. It's hard for me to commit to a long fanfiction. It's hard because it takes away hours and the plot takes time. Yet I decided to try this.
And wow, was I blown away.
I started this on Friday I think. Now it's Sunday. The first night I stayed up until 2 am but had to stop because my iPad died. Last night I stayed up until almost 6:30 am.
To be honest, when I started this I wasn't sure. I wasn't sure where this could lead and when I saw this was 95 chapters, I told myself I'd only read a it more and abandon it.
From chapter 2 you got me.
This is so canonically realistic. You capture the essence of every single one of your characters, and reading them was like living histories and histories of people I've known forever.
I laughed.
I laughed and I smiled but above that, I also cried.
I cried in happiness and sadness and from nostalgia.
I cried when they died but I also cried so many other times.
Marlene was replaceable, it said.
She didn't see him looking at her, though, because nobody ever looked at Dorcas, it said.
So many beautiful tragic moments.
Just captured there.
This story made me look at the world in a new way.
This story portrayed every shining moment, every fight and every loving thing that can happen and it tore me apart.
I want to thank you.
Thank you for writing this and showing me things in real life that I would never have realized.
But also thank you for giving me this, this piece of past that tells me the story I've wanted to hear.
No I do not want Mary dead.
No I do not want Marlene dead.
I do not want Dorcas dead.
I don't want the Potters, the Evans, the Coopers, or anyone ANYONE else to die.
But writing this, I know this story I read is the one I wanted to hear.
So thank you for every moment from the first chapter to the last, to when Remus saw him for one last time for a long long time and the letter that shows all the love. All the love.
You have such an exceptional gift. Your talent of writing is truly unique and special and I hope you continue to use it well.

By far the best Maurader fanfic I've ever read. Your characterizations were excellent. Especially the scenes with Peter and how he just kind of broke. Seriously, thank you for writing this. I loved every chapter.

god this story was so sad i at least wanted marlene and the baby to survive. honestly this is one of the best pieces of work i've read in a long while. that i have been reading it non stop for three days just to get to the end.

The characterization is something i have to praise you on, i personally thought it was very realistic and they weren't just all focused on one character like james or lily.
Each character had their distinct voice i found that was comforting. That when you had a point of view stance on a character you understood them fully. i think that peter and alice were pretty neglected characters as you didn't focus on them much,
And i have to say that Mary's death was quite sudden and a tad unrealistic for me maybe if she had gotten tortured with the Crucioed into madness or maybe lost her memory (for a period of time/maybe forever) i don't see why she would willingly say her name instead of running for her life.
i enjoyed it over all there are just things i wished would end differently,
thanks for listening
fangirling2.0

Isnt Mary dead I don't get it

If you haven't read this story please do it will change the way you look at the marauders and put everything in a more clear view and don't pay attention to how long it is I read it in like four days because I couldn't put my phone down... i would laugh out loud at some of the things Sirius and James said...and Dorcas:*D