Reviews for Forget Me Not
Mr. War chapter 12 . 4/15/2018
This is one of THE best Peter Pan fanfics I have ever had the pleasure of reading! I always loved Captain Hook x Wendy and this is the best story about this couple. :D
Guest chapter 12 . 3/20/2018
Bravo. I loved it
forever4 chapter 12 . 2/26/2018
Wow, I am almost speechless. This is such a beautiful piece of writing.

I found your writing to be very mature, both in quality and in topics covered. Sometimes, though, Wendy’s musings run on a little long and grow a bit tiresome. Particularly when you put a lot of descriptions in the middle of a conversation, sometimes there are paragraphs between a back-and-forth dialogue and I’ve already forgotten the last thing that was said. This definitely hurts the flow of conversation when I have to scroll back up to remind myself what they’re even replying to. I do not mind some descriptions/inner monologue scattered here in there, but you want the reader to be reading it “in real time”, and that’s a matter of seconds that they’re quipping back and forth, not minutes of lag between each spoken sentence.

Also, around chapter 9, I really felt the relationship took a decidedly one-sided turn for the worse, when the captain seemed to be giving more (to a point where it was slightly inconsistent with his character) and Wendy giving nothing at all (quite frustrating for the reader... a nice frustrating at the beginning, but tiresome as it dragged on. Toward the end, when she admitted love to herself but still withheld it from Hook, it just seemed borderline selfish, not quite “love”, more like “lust”.. I know you were trying to make it seem like love, and for the most part, you succeeded... but none of her thoughts were of putting him above herself. It was all about her and how he made her feel. Well, anyway, not that I begrudge her much. I did thoroughly enjoy your work. Thrilling tale, captivating characters.

Oh, another minor bone to pick. I found it unbelievable that Hook would have jumped into the sea without first taking off some layers. As anyone can assume, heavy clothing is just a burden that will necessarily weigh one down, and it would only take one swift fluid motion to rid himself of his heavy red coat. But in the next scene, he still had it on, soaked through and through, and it was conveniently laid under Wendy for love-making comfort (and then later, a prop for faked death). For the purposes of this story, I did suspend belief, but I had to actively try to shut down voices of reason saying that it would just hinder him at best and pull him down into the ocean at worst.

I’m afraid I haven’t said enough how much I enjoyed your writing though! Don’t let me criticisms get you down. I just said them because I feel like your writing is so good and you can take it. I will definitely be returning for rereads in the future! I will definitely NOT be forgetting it soon ;)
Blub chapter 11 . 1/23/2018
This is the second time I've read this story. Maybe it wasn't finished, last, or maybe it was. All I know is it stirs the same wonderful, rabid, vexing joy. It is the crystallization of a thousand dreams from childhood, and an adult's catharsis.
Maihalo chapter 12 . 1/19/2018
This was a great story I felt Wendy was a tad ooc but I thoroughly enjoyed it non the less
A.Lovely.Villain chapter 2 . 1/12/2018
Don't let any fairies die! I love this story. So much.
afterthebattle chapter 12 . 1/4/2018
It suddenly occurred to me that I never commented on the ending of this. I just wanted to let you know that this story was everything I could’ve hoped for and more. Such wonderful characters, prose and plot. Thank you for giving us a happy ending!
Guest chapter 1 . 12/4/2017
Oh my word. You have me hooked, bound, and tethered. Your imagery is beautiful and I can't wait to see where you'd bring us. Thank you for sharing! c:
Katie puss chapter 1 . 11/18/2017
very well written, great story line, and a lovely bit of smut. so all in all a very good read.
Anon chapter 12 . 9/30/2017
I was somewhat recluctant about reading this story - but then... just WAOW! I got drawn in so fast and was completely unable to stop reading. This is the most interesting and enchanting story I have read in a long time. I loved the dark depths of the relationship and the mutual understanding, the denial, the chase, the intensity - EVERYTHING. I hope you will write more stories in this vein. Thank you so much for sharing this work of beauty with us 3
Madame L'Ennui chapter 1 . 9/29/2017
Thank you so much for write the best Wendy/Hook that I've have read.
Rhiannon249 chapter 1 . 8/28/2017
Read this piece and absolutely loved it!

I haven't actually seen the Jason Isaacs movie Peter Pan, but I'll have to get a copy. (The Disney version was not quite what one wants to picture when reading your story.)

I really like how you captured the interactions between Wendy and the Captain. I always like reading the "chase." The actual realization of the relationship is usually rather anti-climatic, so I appreciate how you drew that aspect out through the successive chapters.

A few questions though:

It wasn't clear to me what the timing was between when Hook washed up on shore and when he began stalking Wendy in London. Can you elaborate?

Also, it seemed Hook had a bit of an obsession with Wendy prior to coming to fetch her in the first chapter. Did he love her before he kidnapped her, or did his feelings evolve after taking her?

For being such an astute man, why on earth did Hook repeatedly giving her the run of the ship? After the first or second instance of her getting into trouble, I would have locked her in her room, boarded up any portholes and assigned a pirate scrub to guard the door.

I found some of Wendy's ruminations in later chapters, where she obviously acknowledged and was aware of her feelings towards the Captain, to be kind of annoying. It definitely seemed to be the case that he was exposing himself to her repeatedly and she was giving nothing back. In my opinion, she was the cruel one in the relationship. Did you do this on purpose? It almost seemed like you had certain plot points you were trying to run through, and thus extended some of Wendy's internal monologue longer than was necessary. Was that the reason why?

Anyhow, thanks for writing such a great story. I enjoyed it immensely! Keep writing!
the yellow flower chapter 12 . 8/22/2017
Wow. What an incredible tale you have woven. I've been on FF for ten years and I can say with upmost confidence that this is one of the best stories I've read on here. I'll admit that when I first read the premise I was skeptical. To be honest, I don't know if there will ever be anyone out there that can justify such complex characters falling for one another. What's even more amazing is how well you captured the feel of being in Neverland. I feel as if I haven't been on this side earth for two days. The internal struggle you created for Wendy was so believable. I never felt comfortable with what she had decided until the very end. I also felt her conflict on aging so heavily. I believe some stories brush over just how childish Peter is. It's part of the lure when Wendy was younger, but with age it grows unable to relate toso very true. What a story! I cannot thank you enough for posting this and sharing it with all of us. I was reminded of some of my favorite sea tales and infamous captains and felt like I was right there on the ship with you descriptions of the surroundings. I feel as if my review will never do justice to the work you've created. All I can say from here is thank you. I look forward to reading this again next time I look for an adventure in between the day to day life.
the yellow flower chapter 8 . 8/21/2017
I lost my jaw somewhere...I think it outright fell off. And I have no interest in finding it before I read the next chapter.
the yellow flower chapter 5 . 8/21/2017
This story is going to kill me. I don't think I breathed once during this chapter.
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