|Reviews for Tavington and Lyra|
| guest chapter 75 . 12/3/2013
The story was wonderful. I enjoyed reading every chapter! Thank you for this!
| AbiPrairieWinds chapter 1 . 8/14/2013
I hereby revoke all comments I made in the review before, and hope that the people who read it from now on will not allow it to taint their view of the story. Please forgive any offence I may have caused.
| PrairieWinds chapter 1 . 8/13/2013
Tavington was an animal who had the brass neck to call himself a gentleman while attacking women and murdering children; even his own commander was disgusted by him! It's beyond me what anyone sees in that creature - he deserved whatever came to him and I wasn't unhappy when he was killed. That fact that lots of the stories on this are about him, completely overlooking the way he treated the colonists and making him out to be 'misunderstood' make me sick. Courage and loyalty like the Martins' deserves more recognition than anything that person did.
| G1tana chapter 3 . 8/7/2013
I've read the whole thing and must say this is my favorite of the Tavington stories. I appreciate all the historical detail and the effort to make the emotions and reactions to the harshness of war as believable as possible.
That said, there is one issue that bothered me from the moment of the Simms family reveal. I understand that it was meant to be a surprise, however I cannot believe that Eleanor Bryant would not have made a stronger effort to convince Tavington of Lyra's innocence. Lyra may not have understood her family's power in Charles Towne but Eleanor would have. All she had to do was yell "Rebecca Simms" for him to pay attention. Of course saying so would alter the story- even if Tavington held Lyra as a patriot his treatment of her would have been cautious because of her connections. I just wish there had been some mechanism to prevent Eleanor Bryant from speaking or even being present during the capture, because her passivity at losing the heir of a powerful family is disconcerting. Also- once notified Cornwallis would have immediately dispatched news to Tavington instead of waiting patiently for his return, or at least have been pressured heavily by the family to do so. (Related although minor issue- why did Eleanor only get an old horse to collect Lyra when the family sends her on this very urgent and important mission?)
| Feathers chapter 75 . 7/4/2013
Wow! I just read the whole thing over the past few days - LOVE it! Really well written, and I'm so glad you let them live and have a happy life in the end. 3 Tavington :p
| TudorGirl910489 chapter 75 . 6/6/2013
This is by far the best story I have ever read. I found it two days ago and literally spent my entire time reading it. You portrayed the characters perfectly! I'm so sad it's over though!
| Eleve Osirian chapter 74 . 4/20/2013
Wow, I can't believe I've finally finished it! It's so bittersweet to see it ended :(
Despite the few errors/things I didn't agree with, your story was a fun read. It kept my attention, and definitely got me hooked on Tavington - I think perhaps I will have to do more reading in the fandom now.
As of yet, I haven't looked at your profile to see if you've written other stories (I believe you have, though, as per a previous discussion we had via PM). That will be my next task :)
| Eleve Osirian chapter 73 . 4/20/2013
Nova Scotia - so close to where I am from :)
As bad as it sounds, I almost think that this scene offers Ben his revenge (I know, it's a Tavi fic, but it's how it comes across to me) - he gets to give Tavington orders to leave, he's the one who really wins in the end. I like that - I have to admit, I actually liked Ben's character in your story, despite his not-so-courteous manners with Lyra. So I think this provides both men with a reasonable ending where they both survive. Well done.
| Eleve Osirian chapter 71 . 4/20/2013
"It is not something that can be forgiven," the Ghost's tone was ice. "The loss of a child." He stared at Tavington, intently waiting on his next words" - I understand for the purposes of this storyline that what happened in this chapter makes sense. However, I don't understand how he can claim it isn't something easily forgiven, and yet he willingly walks away, lets Tavington live after losing so much...after 71 chapters of them trying to kill each other? I understand Tavington's motives for letting Ben go (not to lose Lyra) - but again, I think that if this situation played on in real life, certainly one or other other (hell, maybe even both) would've died. But that's just me rambling and confessing my thoughts to this chapter - still a great story though, and I'm adding it to my favorites :)
| Eleve Osirian chapter 65 . 4/20/2013
You've made Lyra a strong character - not being able to shrug off Pembroke...again, though - Tavington's character - would he really have shrugged off what happened between Lyra and Martin?
| Eleve Osirian chapter 62 . 4/20/2013
Yes! Glad to see he pulled through so far :)
| Eleve Osirian chapter 60 . 4/20/2013
Ugh, I had been *hoping* that somehow you'd allow Tavington to survive!
| Eleve Osirian chapter 58 . 4/20/2013
"...then I must organise the Reverend" - Organize - not a biggie, but you've made this error in a few other chapters, so just wanted to let you know!
| Eleve Osirian chapter 57 . 4/20/2013
The only thing I noticed was that in this chapter you've used a lot of "He growled" or "he snapped", giving me the very strange image of two dogs fighting :P
Also, although I enjoy seeing the human side of Tavington, I personally wonder if he truly would forgive her this quickly, given the fact that he HATES Martin, and has brutally killed how many people as a result of that hatred? Martin rapes Lyra and makes Lyra enjoy it, whether she wanted it or not...I'm not sure he would let that go so lightly, but those are just my personal thoughts.
| Eleve Osirian chapter 56 . 4/20/2013
"Benjamin could not taunt William with it later" - I have to admit, this idea was confusing at first because I was thinking of why he would believe what Martin would say over what Lyra says. However, Dan Scott's confirmation of what she said cleared that up, so that he probably now will believe whatever is said...I feel bad for Lyra and what is likely to come of this information!
Great job on this chapter