|Reviews for Disturbia|
| Silverlynx13 chapter 47 . 2/26
As always, I so love reading your tale of River. Please continue to write more
| Guest chapter 47 . 1/23
Aaaaah! Help! Please not the reavers! I'll review ok? Ok good. You should write more stories. About Wash and kaylee and Zoe and Inara. (My favorite characters!)
| Weepin' Willowes chapter 47 . 1/21
Oh, and I may have laughed at really inappropriate times. Like, mid psychotic rant/torture bout/emotional breakdown/bloody scene.
You can't put
(Pain death angst etc)
(More pain death angst etc)
And not expect me -and other fellow psychopaths- to laugh. Though I normally find the things contained within the parenthesis amusing to no end.
Okay, I'm done ranting. Will even just put the name at the bottom with a dash to show it's from said name, all alone, no randomly inserted stuff preceding or following it...
| Weepin' Willowes chapter 47 . 1/21
Welp, I has read what you have asked, many pages, many stories, many chapters. I saved this for last (other than all the ones you specifically told me to not read...) to shake off the initial this-is-weird-to-read-in-excess-because-I-actually-get-the-thought-process-behind-everything-even-the-doofy-stuff-because-I-know (eghads, epic hyphen inhale)-you-so-it-feels-like-traipsing-about-in-your-sticky-notes(whichIhavenotdonepromisedon'tkillme)-or-your-psychological-report-from-a-vaguely-upset-psychiatrist (oh dear I hope this doesn't have a word limit).
Dear omnipresent-hopefully-benevolent-and-not-Cthulhu-being, I hope you appreciate this, and I hope the same being doesn't throw me into hell for abusing the dash/hyphen and parenthesis.
I liek ur stuffz _
Actual worthwhile criticism(you better have not skipped all that garbage or it will be "SHOVE THE -!" All day)
I spotted all of seventeen grammatical errors. Just some lazy their/there/they're and to/too and such. I HAVE PHOTOGRAPHIC EVIDENCE.
Oh god, I've become "that reviewer."
I'm not a stalker, I promise, bystanding review-scrollers.
I really love how it was all nice at first, an unsettling tinge of "oh, we all know what happens..." Then drops. "Welp. Shit hath gotten real, what have I gotten myself int- NEXT CHAPTER."
I may have to sit on you with my bony arse until you post another.
Or maybe go through your sticky notes.
This has been a productive use of my procrastination.
I can't wait until you get to the Session with your laptop backround...
"I can see you."
I think this is what a PM is for or whatever. I'll be damned if I make an account, though. Psh, effort.
some crazy peer who needs to sleep and stop procrastinating who's alias for such purposes for everything is Willow but I will again be damned if I don't overuse words and make life harder for everyone else
Less than three!
| Warhead77777 chapter 26 . 1/20
I'm beginning to remember what it was that inspired all my best writing and I think it was reading something a little like this.
I'm pretty tired, so the edges of my mind are completely blown, not working at all. My bad if my reviews stop making sense or already have. Well at least I managed to plug thru some chapters for once...it's been awhile.
| Warhead77777 chapter 25 . 1/20
This is like reading rape...or something like that. Why do people prefer this half of the book again? I'm not seeing the logic in that exactly, but people never were logical to begin with.
| Warhead77777 chapter 24 . 1/20
Well...It's all over...I wonder what the next half will even be about...
Yeah, the story was about this...only reversed...Completely and utterly reversed. It was about trying to give mass-murders a um...conscious. It was pretty dark.
| Warhead77777 chapter 23 . 1/20
Ummm Why aren't her friends like...picking up on this?
| Warhead77777 chapter 22 . 1/20
Something is clearly wrong...
This reminds me of an old piece I wrote.
| Warhead77777 chapter 21 . 1/20
Word on the street is that awhile back they wanted to make certain people smarter, so they "greased" the points where brain-cells met. The issue was that thoughts in the "imagination" part of the brain and the "What I think is going on" part of the brain started to mix, so that what you thought about was what you saw...It's how acid was made.
This reminds me of acid.
| Warhead77777 chapter 20 . 1/20
...You don't sit up after nightmares...Why does not a soul know this!
Other then that...spooky...
| Warhead77777 chapter 19 . 1/20
This is so charming, it's almost sad...
| Warhead77777 chapter 18 . 1/20
The issue is that I am forgetting to read this and getting rather busy at almost nothing at all...it's weird
But back to the review.
It's not showing any new errors, but I think in a way what makes this story interesting is that the characters are believeable and are different from one another. You know how to write children, which I never figured out how to do.
| Lauren Humbard chapter 47 . 1/17
Wow, this is legit cool. You should finish this. And quickly. So cool
| Warhead77777 chapter 17 . 1/13
Why does this seem like they are weeding out the smartest as well?