Reviews for Max and Fang, Flock of Two
Alkian James chapter 1 . 10/30/2014
oh my god that is a good chapter
Guest chapter 22 . 6/7/2014
Pleeeeeease keep writing! :)
Fire Werewolf chapter 22 . 3/5/2013
SO. FRACKING. DRAMATIC. I LOVE EVERY MINUTE OF IT! And when is Fax gonna happen? Hmm? I am so curious like you would not believe 0.o
Guest chapter 22 . 2/3/2013
Keep it up!
Amazing story
emowriter chapter 22 . 9/15/2012
Yaaay, the Flock is all together again! :D
emowriter chapter 21 . 9/9/2012
Woah. I love how you have three different scenes.
emowriter chapter 20 . 9/8/2012
OMG, so suspenseful! And amazing flashback! But you wrote that in the next car, people were reading their food...
Trapped In Narnia chapter 20 . 9/7/2012
Wait did fang get shot oh shiznit no fangs gotta be ok so he can be there for max noooooo
Night Prince chapter 19 . 9/4/2012
Hey, Hows it goin? You are amazing, keep it up! Lots of homework at collage? Dang. Anyways, this is great, add more PLEASE and keep it great. Are the snakes going to be genetically "modified"? Is G-Hagen a mislead not-bad guy? Will he switch sides? Love Fang; add more mystery/dark/romance to his character? Perhaps include more of the flying over the ocean, the two of them? THANK YOU for taking Dylan out the equation! With all of this tech, back then and now, could they have put something in Max's brain that could "control" her by implanting strong suggestions. Maybe only Max's strength of will and love for Fang will defeat the compulsion. Turn it around for a paragraph, imagine how max looks after flying her stress out, windblown hair, lips red and swollen from her biting it...? How permanent are you willing to take Max/Fang at their age? Anyways, you might want to focus on action and the technicalities in this, rather than the romance, and I dont blame you, but if you do... would it be possible to incorporate a few fight scenes... walk me through the moves, when you use what devices, etc. Possible devices: 'granades' or something from the GENIUS eyepatch/cyclone pair made, or a way to throw contact herbs at flesh, and for said body to... I dont know, burn or something? Dont care if you use my ideas, I know you wont like all of them, modify at will. Sorry this is so long! You are just really good at writing. You slip into character easily and stay there.
Trapped In Narnia chapter 19 . 9/4/2012
Snakes? I thought it was that dark silhouette guy...
emowriter chapter 19 . 9/3/2012
You should give her more of a backstory with the snake thing. Like, the whitecoats injected her with snake venom, or they tied snakes to her, or something like that.
emowriter chapter 18 . 9/3/2012
OMG This is so... woah. I can not believe how suspenseful this chapter has been.
Trapped In Narnia chapter 18 . 9/3/2012
Nooooo you can't leave us on a cliffhanger like that!
Arocksprpl2 chapter 18 . 9/2/2012
:O !? :'(
canislupus1999 chapter 17 . 8/22/2012
Pwease write more.
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