|Reviews for My Daughter's Harry Potter Story|
| Duchess67 chapter 2 . 2/4
In the books, they never say that needles aren't used in the HP 'verse, they just don't say they do! ;)
Tell your son that poking holes in a NEW writer's stories is only going to discourage them from writing. Find a way to make them see the plot holes that isn't demoralizing! LOL
I like the change to a spider from a snake and the thought of making Harry and Snape have to work together to solve the problem. Well done! :)
| Duchess67 chapter 1 . 2/4
This is adorable and a better premise for a story than some adults have written! :)
| p00hb34r2002 chapter 2 . 7/9/2016
That's pretty good! : )
| LiveAndLetRain chapter 2 . 3/19/2014
To the Author:
So, Madame Authoress, what is this "secret ingredient?" I am most curious!
You should keep writing.
To the Typist:
As for what your son has pointed out...obviously this is an AU, as nowhere in cannon did Snape and Harry have this sort of tolerance for and cooperation with each other!
| LiveAndLetRain chapter 1 . 3/19/2014
Tell your daughter this is very good and I like it a lot!
It sounds a lot like my first stuff, only most of that was poetry. ;-)
| Ryah Ignis chapter 2 . 9/29/2012
I completely missed the update, but I love it. Once again, encourage her to continue writing. A few more drafts, and this could be an on the edge of your seat one shot.
| Guest chapter 2 . 8/25/2012
Maybe it was written when Hogwarts had gone university size, that was how they could have a thousand kids in a class, very cute, better written and more coherent than chapter one-keep writing-good to see children writing!
| forever fan chapter 2 . 8/25/2012
Good job! What happens next?
(Sounds like Susan's daughter's brother should write a fan fiction here of his own - everybody's a critic!)
| SimplyMe514 chapter 2 . 8/25/2012
There is so much cuteness in these 763 words I almost can't stand it. Kidding!
It is true that I just melted a little, though. You should definitely encourage her! She seems to have a great imagination.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/5/2012
| darkaccalia520 chapter 1 . 6/22/2012
Awwww, this is cute. I totally think you should encourage your daughter to write more. She certainly if following in her mother's footsteps. I'd love to see this either continued or in a longer story. This definitely has potential. And to your daughter: Wonderful job, my dear. I hope you write more very soon. You have talent. :)
| Cassandra30 chapter 1 . 6/22/2012
Very cute. Very good idea. It does indeed need fleshing out. I am looking forward to reading it. I read a lot in the Harry Potter fandom.
| Ryah Ignis chapter 1 . 6/22/2012
I know exactly what you mean! I still write Sues. For as long as I've been writing fanfiction, you'd think I would stop. Anyway, I thought the second draft was much better. Encourage your daughter to continue writing- it's a great skill to have in school and beyond. It was a good idea to introduce her to fanfiction. Good luck with future drafts!
| Rkady chapter 1 . 6/22/2012
Cute! I loved the idea of the secret compartment-would love to hear more about it-don't remember that from the novels! Susan, good to see you encouraging her-and you will have a permanent record of it here! I can still remember some of my earliest stories-I remember all those years ago when I was bitten by the writing bug!
| InsanityAintOptional chapter 1 . 6/22/2012
Aww... So cute :)