|Reviews for The Oncoming Storm|
| Crazylazy007 chapter 8 . 12/16/2013
Love it and cant wait for an update.
BTW have u taken a look at the sequel titled UQ Holder?
| Lord Sigfry chapter 3 . 11/24/2013
Well if she spills...then it's not gonna be good for her.
Might just kill her because magic doesn't affect her. Easier that way.
| mark.zhang.12 chapter 6 . 11/12/2013
Great story. Don't worry to much or at all about updating since life does get hectic. For English not being your first language, you write like it was your first language. Nice story once again and good luck to you whatever you do.
| LookinForLuk chapter 8 . 11/10/2013
Love where your going so far. Looking forward to more.
| Ado Edem chapter 8 . 10/6/2013
Hmm lots of Nasuverse references. Anyone more than mildly familiar with it would see through it...hmm still relly good.
| TrueRedDragonGodEmperor chapter 8 . 9/18/2013
This story is really good and very well written. I enjoyed everything up to this chapter. I thought the video sequences in the last chapter was incredibly moving, I even thought Negi's anger and sense of betrayal was fitting. His description of what could have happened to them was also justifiable. My problem lies with Negi's callus remarks and discussion with the dean. He came off as a complete a**. He is basically betraying the position he has as a magister. The fact that they have to basically blackmail him into helping them settle down the conflicts in Kyoto betrays his position as a peacekeeper. Its true that he might not have a direct stake in the conflict but that doesn't give him an excuse to let people continue to die. Sure he might be scarred and tired of war but refusing to help in a conflict when you can help save lives, only helping when forced, shows a real lack of honor as a magister and a peacekeeper. His flippant remark to the dean about how he was going to help anyways doesn't come off as sincere. Which further reaffirms the idea that he is only helping because he is being forced to.
| shikyoseinen chapter 1 . 9/16/2013
Find it hard to believe I read this last year...time really flies fast.
| ZenDen chapter 8 . 7/28/2013
Isn't the on coming storm from Doctor who ? But cool anyways, I like the idea of a older and more serious Negi, he was always so painfully young in the series, didn't really seem that believable to me , even tho it was magic n stuff :
I would love to see more interactions with the baka rangers that broke into his workshop and Negi being his Frosty self, he was faaar to lenient with them for my taste, should have scared them more since they broke into his sanctum and rifled through his stuff. That's just not cool.
I wonder how the Kotarou relationship will be , will they be friends/rivals or eternal enemies battling again and again. Also how badly is he gonna whup his ass ? :
If there was war in Mundus Magicus wouldn't Fate have tried to use that to further his goal ? Why does he need to be in the old world?
But great story! I look forward to reading more.
| Xoroth chapter 8 . 7/8/2013
A very intriguing story. I am looking forward to seeing how you've blended the three worlds together. I am particularly curious as to the direction of the story. Beyond the ripples and changes of canon events I am most interested in how Negi will grow. While it sounds like he has already done a lot of growing up, from what I understand he came to Mahora for a change of pace so a very real possibility no? There were a few grammar and spelling mistakes but all of them minor. Basically nothing that can't be solved with a little spelling check.
| Lie chapter 8 . 7/4/2013
This is seriously cool idea and story. Seeing negi a few years older is an intriguing idea. You write it quite well considering his background too.
| Biblio388 chapter 8 . 6/27/2013
Wow. This story is awesome. The way things are going and the way the different universes are crossed is really well done. I would like to congratulate the author on how well all of this was pulled off. I hope to read more chapters in the near future.
| RandomReview chapter 3 . 6/13/2013
...and here I thought I would be reading something more original. Maybe I'm jumping the gun here so early on with a few more chapters available to read, but was it really necessarily to narrate the first few chapters of the manga verbatim? I can understand using the basic framework of the manga to tell your tale, but surely you could have taken some liberties for the sake of originality? Well anyway hopefully it gets better...
| Catz1112 chapter 8 . 6/11/2013
Egads! I'm rather curious how I managed to miss this story for so long... I admit I'm a huge fan of dark twists to the Negima story line... but this... this is just something else...
I know it would probably be more appreciated if I were to put some sort of constructive criticism in here... but... Honestly? When I read this, any flaws that there might be are glossed over by the sheer quality of... well everything, your plot, your "dark" Negi, if you'll allow the oversimplification of it.
Quite frankly, you've managed to get me to invest emotionally in this Negi in just a few chapters in a way that I been since I read Maneyan's "Negima: Shadows of past and present."
I'm eagerly awaiting more from you, and I'm especially hopeful to see more interaction between Negi and Evangeline... Those tend to be great moments, and yours certainly was... There's just something about her personality chaffing against a Negi with maturity forged in the fires of war like yours is that just makes my day, no matter how poorly such interaction turns out for the two of them in the end.
| CV12Hornet chapter 3 . 5/10/2013
Okay. Why does Asuna keep calling Negi a brat when he's 15? In canon she could get away with it because Negi was 10, here she wouldn't. You only call a 15-year-old a brat when you're, 70, or something.
| Tikigod784 chapter 8 . 5/5/2013
This story is interesting indeed! Having randomly picked up Negima when the first volume came out in America, this series has been one of my favorites, and I always fancied the idea of an older, more experienced Negi. The only story I've seen do this before was Juugo! and that had a markedly different protagonist. Your Negi is interesting in a way that I never found the original to be. Far for Gary Stu, he seems like a real character. I'm wondering how powerful he's supposed to be, and if this story actually uses Dresden and Nasu mechanics, how the powerlevels actually work in this.
Also, Kyoto already! You skipped the build-up and went right for the arc that made this series start to shine. This Negi is actually at a disadvantage compared to his younger counterpart, oddly enough. Asuna is afraid and suspicious of him, Nodoka is just plain terrified, he has no bond with Kaede or anyone in his class for that matter, and Setsuna (who probably also took a level in badass for this story) will be decidedly less friendly towards her teacher, though given Konoemon's competence and interaction with older Negi, I'm surprised they haven't been introduced. And don't even get me started on the drunken, womanizing delinquent that is Kotarou. I'm loving what you've done with his character so far, though I'm worried that Negi is unlikely to befriend him in this timeline. Speaking of friends, Fate is actually gunning for Negi? Yeah, Negi's gonna need some help, even if he is a war vet.
Also, having gotten up-to-date on your Naruto, ZnT/AssCreed, and Negima stories, I must insist that you are an incredible writer. I wish I'd found you sooner! I'll be sure to follow your work from here on out. Thanks for writing!