|Reviews for Shattered Destiny|
| ImaLady chapter 20 . 7/25/2013
Impressive dark story... T.T
| grayember13 chapter 25 . 3/5/2013
You broke my heart, and yet I still applaud you on a great story.
| Shubby4 chapter 25 . 2/26/2013
I recently found this story, and was not able to stop. Now that I'm done the story, I can't stop crying, the pain merlin went through is unimaginable and your story was just so damn sad and touching.
You are the 1st author I have ever favourited, just to let you know.
| BenaddictedIntoDarkWithMerlock chapter 25 . 12/29/2012
Now then, I will have to write you an extra long review as I had intended to review every chapter, but I got so caught up in the amazingness of this story that I had to find out what would happen next. And so, here it is.
I loved the way you managed to get all the main characters into this difficult position and still made it feel believable. I loved to see how you handled each individual view and thoughts and feelings and still kept them seperate and different as it would be quite easy for a writer to just end up regurgitating all the same internal monologue of angst. *Pats on back*
Although you said that Merlin and Arthur and other characters would probably be very OOC, I think you actually managed to, with the exception of Arthur, keep believable and realistic opinions and choices within the characters as I would think that even Merlin can't persue his destiny forever under such circumstances as his loved ones are killed all around him and his world is crumbling. I mean, yes, Arthur was very OOC, but there was no way you could have written a story of this nature without having him make completely OOC decisions and comments. I think you managed to maintain good internal reasoning within Arthur to keep his actions understandable.
I also loved the way that you ended up with Merlin, Gwaine and Percival all being forced to fight against their former home and I think it would have gotten a bit samey had you have only had Merlin on Morgana and Mordred's side. Their internal thoughts and angst over their situations supported the storyline well and gave a good atmosphere to the story.
The only critcism I have is that maybe you could have proof-read your chapters before posting them as I know you said that spelling and grammar aren't your best subjects but I'm sure that if you read them over you would be able to resolve some of the small mistakes as they looked like you had simply pressed the wrong key. Also, I don't whether you've learn this yet or not, but you spell apologize like that - I just felt bad for you everytime you'd say sorry for the mistakes, you'd make an error straight after. Wow, that sounded bitchy... Sorry :S But anyway, I used to have this problem and I'd get moaned at constantly for my errors so I would strongly recommend it ;) Sorry if I came across very bitchy there...
But anyway, I don't think you need to worry about writing drastically OOC or unbelievably for any of the characters as you backed up their decisions with good reasons and considersations. Okay, I'm going to stop soon becasue I'm repeating myself and I'm probably boring you.
The little lyrics at the start of each chapter were a very nice touch as they gave a deicateness to the story and enhanced the atmosphere created by your writing.
You have a wonderful style and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this Fic. It was a good way to escape the madness to escape the stress-fest that is Christmas! Thank you very much and congratulations on this story. Sorry for the huuuge review!
| Allycat817 chapter 25 . 12/26/2012
Just wanted to say that I absolutely loved this fanfiction. It was beautifully written (I especially liked the last line). Great job!
| Nebriniel Peredhil chapter 25 . 12/26/2012
*snif snif* tht was beautiful, I wish it didn't end
| Guest chapter 4 . 12/26/2012
hmm, I get that Arthur's mad but he isn't showing any pain regarding his son dying. Still, a good story!
| Guest chapter 3 . 12/26/2012
| anon chapter 2 . 12/26/2012
so sweet and so sad... :(
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/26/2012
great imagery and pace! Looking forward to reading more!
| sketchAvolie chapter 23 . 12/12/2012
May I just say: you should work for the BBC. This fic is so much better than what they're doing with the series right now, and is one of the best I've ever read. I'm surprised that you don't have more followers on this. It took me about three days to get through all of this (due to school and distractions from the internet), but it was so worth it. You literally have me bawling my eyes out here. Sorry, I'll stop awkwardly fangirling over such a great fic like this, but it was really really good. I'm excited for more.
| Nebriniel Peredhil chapter 23 . 12/12/2012
OH! can't wait for more
| Ddiwerth chapter 23 . 12/12/2012
Great build-up to that pivotal moment, when Arthur finally accepted Merlin's magic and realised what a bad man he's been to him. The evil twin inside me kind of wanted Merlin to just stand there and coldly watch as Arthur died, but I think what he's actually doing in this chapter is miles better, for what greater way to punish Arthur than to make him feel crushing guilt for what he did, while Merlin makes one more sacrifice in healing and forgiving him. And thank you for doing that to Mordred - he got his just desserts! V Good battle scene BTW. Can't wait to read the next chapter :O)
| R chapter 22 . 11/13/2012
I agree with mordred, Merlin is a fool. Arthur regret is not going to bring back back all the people he killed or got killed. And Merlin left Gauis that's why he's dead no Arthur should not have killed Gauis because he RAISED him basically. Merlin would forgive Arthur for ANYTHING and he wonders why Arthur does not respect him. In this I don't feel sorry for Merlin losing people at ALL he lost them because he did not protect them and let Arthur kill them.
| Ddiwerth chapter 22 . 11/2/2012
OMG what an amazing chapter! Such drama and tension. An epic battle and all those eyeball conversations. Loved the cliffie as well (even though it also made me scream "No! I need to know what happens!"). Love the fact that Merlin and Arthur are both misinterpretting each other's thoughts - makes it that much more tense and exciting, because I have no idea what the outcome will be.
Suffice to say, I can't wait for more :O)